Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

A sad twist in the tale! You do a great job of telling a full story in very few words, and presenting us with an unexpected and tragic conclusion. I'd normally say I enjoyed the read, but better to say I appreciated it.

Mike

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022

Thanks, Mike. Some people jump to conclusions.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Well done. You permit the reader to draw the sad conclusion. The mark of a good writer is to not say everything. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022

Thanks, Wendy. Did Sunny like it?

reply by Wendy G on 15-Aug-2022

He sad it was a very sad story, and if the hitchhiker had a dog he might have lived because he would have had love.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

What a sad and eerie story in 50 words, Mystery Author.
You did a great job with your contest entry, The last line
can be taken two ways--I'm getting out of the car AND
I out of here (dead--jumping off the bridge). Even you title
is a play on the words 'a bridge(d) for shortened life.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022

Thanks, Jan. Maybe he's got a bungee cable there.

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Excellent

I love the play on words of the title and the way you were able to set up a mood, a setting, a plot, and a kick-ass ending all with fifty words. Now THAT's talent. And it also seems like a contender for the winner of the contest, as well! Good luck in the polls.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022

Thanks, Rachelle. That bridge in West Virginia is quite something.

reply by Rachelle Allen on 14-Aug-2022

I'll have to check it out!!

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

This is well led, and for 50 words you have managed to craft a detailed, well described story. Subtle ending. I especially liked the way you cedited your reader with some intelligence. Good luck. Kate xx

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022

Thanks, Kate. If I had more than fifty words, maybe the driver could have talked him out of it.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A really good tongue in cheek post. The punch came late, as it should, but the lead up was rather brilliant, which makes this an outstanding entry in this flash fiction contest, well done, an excellent post, well done, blessings and good luck, Roy

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 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022

Thanks, Roy. The quickest solution is not always the best solution.

reply by royowen on 14-Aug-2022

That?s true

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

Oh no! I appreciate how you set the scene and told the story in just 50 words. I love that you let that last sentence end with the assumption of what will happen next. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.

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 Comment Written 14-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022

Thanks, Jessi. I've been away for awhile. I'll try to get back in the saddle.