Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "Return to Sender"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from jake cosmos aller
a well done poem about faith and your journey to find face and redemption from the temptation offered by alcohol and drugs and finding God's grace in the end.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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a well done poem about faith and your journey to find face and redemption from the temptation offered by alcohol and drugs and finding God's grace in the end.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Jake, thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Faithful words here Jim and I enjoyed the yearn to belong and the hopelessness felt as many would identify with these words. I felt a sense of freedom in your words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Faithful words here Jim and I enjoyed the yearn to belong and the hopelessness felt as many would identify with these words. I felt a sense of freedom in your words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Yes, forty-one years of Freedom and Salvation and Grace!
Comment from royowen
God is amazing His wisdom and wherewithal late beyond our imagination, He knows things way beyond our abilities and perception, I've never believed in Isaiah 55:8, and I think that may be your reasoning too Jim, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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God is amazing His wisdom and wherewithal late beyond our imagination, He knows things way beyond our abilities and perception, I've never believed in Isaiah 55:8, and I think that may be your reasoning too Jim, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Roy, yes this is so!
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Well done
Comment from karenina
This is through and through a testament of faith and grace. We (many of us) may not have been adopted, but for one reason or another we felt out of place or unloved or in some way "apart" from those we call family.
I was one of those... Like you, I learned at an early age I was God's child.
Many times, I went the wrong way like a lost sheep, but God always guided me back to His flock.
Love the "return to sender" reference. It's my great hope!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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This is through and through a testament of faith and grace. We (many of us) may not have been adopted, but for one reason or another we felt out of place or unloved or in some way "apart" from those we call family.
I was one of those... Like you, I learned at an early age I was God's child.
Many times, I went the wrong way like a lost sheep, but God always guided me back to His flock.
Love the "return to sender" reference. It's my great hope!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Karenina, you as a child of God have your face painted on the Golden Stairs so - when you go they will all know and see that you are coming home! Because you are richly blest. 🙏🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶🎶
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I am well short of what I'd like to be ~ but hopefully, I still have time to grow!
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! Love your testimony in your poem, Jim! Appreciate the message that this is not our real home nor our birth families are necessarily our real family. Christ did pay everything in full so we can return Home. Virtual Six! Hope this poem does well in the contest!
'oft struggling with a hopeless longing (oft) no apostrophe needed
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Wow! Love your testimony in your poem, Jim! Appreciate the message that this is not our real home nor our birth families are necessarily our real family. Christ did pay everything in full so we can return Home. Virtual Six! Hope this poem does well in the contest!
'oft struggling with a hopeless longing (oft) no apostrophe needed
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Thank you lyenochka! I appreciate the good wishes.
Comment from HarryT
I like the overall sense of this work. However, I have a problem with the rhyming of pain and again; and of heavenly and heavily. I guess they are near rhymes, but for me they stopped the flow of the poem. I don't know if near rhymes are acceptable according to the rules. Even so, I believe this is an excellent effort.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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I like the overall sense of this work. However, I have a problem with the rhyming of pain and again; and of heavenly and heavily. I guess they are near rhymes, but for me they stopped the flow of the poem. I don't know if near rhymes are acceptable according to the rules. Even so, I believe this is an excellent effort.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Harry T you may well be correct so I massage this one a wee bit. Just the input I appreciate!
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Thanks Raul!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is a very powerful and heartfelt piece of writing. As someone who was adopted, I can fully relate--to the first stanza, especially.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.
Take care,
Erika
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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This is a very powerful and heartfelt piece of writing. As someone who was adopted, I can fully relate--to the first stanza, especially.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem.
Take care,
Erika
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Erika thanks so much. I Know that you are wonderful child of God and you have made such a difference in so many lives - Live long and be well.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Wow. You take a testimony to a new level. This was lovely. I love the postal reference. Return to sender postage fully paid. And fully paid, indeed. I know how it is to try and find that salvation in things. Be it alcohol, drugs, sex or even food. Tangible things that seem so much more real to us than a promise made over 2000 years ago. Faith is truly putting yourself out there. But so worth it. Your poem had an almost lyrical flow to it. Well done.
Gretchen
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Wow. You take a testimony to a new level. This was lovely. I love the postal reference. Return to sender postage fully paid. And fully paid, indeed. I know how it is to try and find that salvation in things. Be it alcohol, drugs, sex or even food. Tangible things that seem so much more real to us than a promise made over 2000 years ago. Faith is truly putting yourself out there. But so worth it. Your poem had an almost lyrical flow to it. Well done.
Gretchen
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Gretchen just sharing the good news! Thank you for your appreciation of Return to Sender. 🙏🙏
Comment from Bill Schott
This spiritual poem, Return to Sender, finds a happier destination for the soul sent through the passage of great resistance, filled with snares, barbs, and traps. The final destination is now seen and anticipated. Neat.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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This spiritual poem, Return to Sender, finds a happier destination for the soul sent through the passage of great resistance, filled with snares, barbs, and traps. The final destination is now seen and anticipated. Neat.
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Dear sir! Thank you. The final destination is now seen and anticipated for sure. :)
