Life Contortions
The twists and turns of poor choices21 total reviews
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Rachelle, I could actually see you trying to scoot out the door, while being a little thankful that you had no memory of the night before. Of course I know this is fiction, but you told the story so well that it was so easy to envision the uneasy and horror in the reaction of the whole experience. Awesome job Rachelle!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Rachelle, I could actually see you trying to scoot out the door, while being a little thankful that you had no memory of the night before. Of course I know this is fiction, but you told the story so well that it was so easy to envision the uneasy and horror in the reaction of the whole experience. Awesome job Rachelle!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2022
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Thanks! Those are really encouraging words!
Comment from Liz Westfall
This was extremely funny. I loved the mental walk of shame! The monologue bits really got me. I especially chuckled at the missing link sentence. Your voice reminds me of the one I have in my head! I would love to read more about this particular character.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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This was extremely funny. I loved the mental walk of shame! The monologue bits really got me. I especially chuckled at the missing link sentence. Your voice reminds me of the one I have in my head! I would love to read more about this particular character.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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I think that's as nice a comment as a reviewer could make: could we please have another round with this character. Thank you for making my night.
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Well, you're absolutely welcome!
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Oh my gosh. You just played out an entire scene in a cheap porno, for us all to enjoy and regret. Even being a man, I have had those "regret" mornings too. You would think the man is always smiles the morning after, not so. There are those "what did I do" mornings for guys as well as there are for gals.
Very entertaining and almost too realistic.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Oh my gosh. You just played out an entire scene in a cheap porno, for us all to enjoy and regret. Even being a man, I have had those "regret" mornings too. You would think the man is always smiles the morning after, not so. There are those "what did I do" mornings for guys as well as there are for gals.
Very entertaining and almost too realistic.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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hahaha. One reviewer double-checked that it was fiction. (I assured her it was.) It's good to know that men are as susceptible to the regret mornings as we are. Thanks for a delightful review.
Comment from Ann M
This is so funny....and I have a feeling it may have an ounce (or so) of actual experience. From your profile one would think you are the model of sophistication...which I'm sure you are....but it's nice to know there's a great sense of humor and a more earthy existence underneath.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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This is so funny....and I have a feeling it may have an ounce (or so) of actual experience. From your profile one would think you are the model of sophistication...which I'm sure you are....but it's nice to know there's a great sense of humor and a more earthy existence underneath.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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No morning-after experience, but the hairy part I, sadly, do know. Thank you for thinking I'm sophisticated, but I just dress that part. Very close to the surface, I'm still a Kindergartener through and through. Thanks for a wonderful review.
Comment from judiverse
This a great contest entry, and best of luck with it. I just wrote about a college gal who's been getting drunk and having sex with men she doesn't know. This is a great example of what will happen to her when she goes out in the world. Great description of Enzo. I'm with the narrator about the hairy men. He is such a happy-go-lucky guy. I love the ending with Enzo looking for another likely prospect to make "hubba hubba playtime" with. That surely means he won't bother the narrator anymore. Highly entertaining story. judi
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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This a great contest entry, and best of luck with it. I just wrote about a college gal who's been getting drunk and having sex with men she doesn't know. This is a great example of what will happen to her when she goes out in the world. Great description of Enzo. I'm with the narrator about the hairy men. He is such a happy-go-lucky guy. I love the ending with Enzo looking for another likely prospect to make "hubba hubba playtime" with. That surely means he won't bother the narrator anymore. Highly entertaining story. judi
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Yes, I'm pretty sure the narrator is free to go and learn from her lesson in peace. Enzo will always find someone to have hubba-hubba playtime with!!
Thanks for the nice review...and your generous extra star, as well. Always so appreciated. xo
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You're welcome. A delight to read. judi
Comment from jessizero
This story about the night after was very entertaining! Your narrator was likable and the situation was funny. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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This story about the night after was very entertaining! Your narrator was likable and the situation was funny. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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You are very welcome. Glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for your review!
Comment from Ulla
Hahaha, Rachelle, I loved that ending. The good Enzo was not as lost as he made her believe. It's well written, quick and to the point. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Hahaha, Rachelle, I loved that ending. The good Enzo was not as lost as he made her believe. It's well written, quick and to the point. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Nope; Enzo just knows how to play the game to perfection! Thanks for reading, Ulla. xo
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Seemed good lesson learned from this night after nightmare the protagonist wants no part of. Some Notes:
-"meringue that's been pummeled by a toddler" paints a clear image of not just what the sheet looked like, but also how the protagonist felt.
-The protagonist knew she had to "make like a tree and leave". No telling what she may have already done with Mr. Caterwauler.
Apparently not the kind of night after she wanted to remember.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Seemed good lesson learned from this night after nightmare the protagonist wants no part of. Some Notes:
-"meringue that's been pummeled by a toddler" paints a clear image of not just what the sheet looked like, but also how the protagonist felt.
-The protagonist knew she had to "make like a tree and leave". No telling what she may have already done with Mr. Caterwauler.
Apparently not the kind of night after she wanted to remember.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Nope! Hopefully, "this time" she really learned her lesson!!!!
Thanks for the terrific review.
Comment from Susan Newell
Rachelle,
This is exceptional. Being somewhat of a Yankee prude, I do so hope this is entirely fiction. I loved the way you turned him into a poodle and how you made it absolutely clear that neither of the characters had any delusions about lasting love. Well done!
Sue
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Rachelle,
This is exceptional. Being somewhat of a Yankee prude, I do so hope this is entirely fiction. I loved the way you turned him into a poodle and how you made it absolutely clear that neither of the characters had any delusions about lasting love. Well done!
Sue
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Writing is my vicarious thrill. Definitely nothing but fiction here!!!
Thanks for the very fun review!
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Good girl, good girl. :-)
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Woof!!!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was so funny, Rachelle, I laughed my socks off. The description of his hairy body, was simply hysterical. I think I'd give up on the booze if I woke up to a sight like that. And his demonstration of her hip movements! The only down side - or upside, is that she didn't remember all that 'hubba-hubba playtime! LOL! Excellent, my friend, a fabulous contest entry. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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That was so funny, Rachelle, I laughed my socks off. The description of his hairy body, was simply hysterical. I think I'd give up on the booze if I woke up to a sight like that. And his demonstration of her hip movements! The only down side - or upside, is that she didn't remember all that 'hubba-hubba playtime! LOL! Excellent, my friend, a fabulous contest entry. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Thank you!! I'm so glad you liked it. I had the best time writing it! xoxo
