Final Bouquet
He made sure I got a...8 total reviews
Comment from Quoiky
I liked your entry very much. Poor guy. Too bad he didn't have a flashlight. Sometimes, I guess ya just never know.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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I liked your entry very much. Poor guy. Too bad he didn't have a flashlight. Sometimes, I guess ya just never know.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Thank you for this exceptional review, it means a lot to me. You are right about the flashlight. :)
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
True love never to be realized. A truly sad picture you paint here. It's just as devastating to lose someone you have been with for years but to lose someone brand new and never get the chance to find out what it is all about, that is just too sad.
Nicely worded.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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True love never to be realized. A truly sad picture you paint here. It's just as devastating to lose someone you have been with for years but to lose someone brand new and never get the chance to find out what it is all about, that is just too sad.
Nicely worded.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you for this great review, I'm always glad to hear from you. :)
Comment from PENofFIRE
A well-written poem. You told your story with great rhyming. It held my attention. I would have been interested in what caused the bloody face and how did he die. It does make for a mystery and a good poem. One thing I would change is the last line, the fourth stanza, the word can't. I think it would read better "I looked back quick but "could not see."
Best wishes for winning the contest.
Pen of Fire
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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A well-written poem. You told your story with great rhyming. It held my attention. I would have been interested in what caused the bloody face and how did he die. It does make for a mystery and a good poem. One thing I would change is the last line, the fourth stanza, the word can't. I think it would read better "I looked back quick but "could not see."
Best wishes for winning the contest.
Pen of Fire
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you for this nice review, I will look over that line...I appreciate it. :)
Comment from Susan Newell
This is a beautiful poetic rendition of a tragic story with a bittersweet ending.
I like the foreshadowing of these lines:
I saw the blood drip down his face,
I flew into his cold embrace
Well done.
Sue
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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This is a beautiful poetic rendition of a tragic story with a bittersweet ending.
I like the foreshadowing of these lines:
I saw the blood drip down his face,
I flew into his cold embrace
Well done.
Sue
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you, I appreciate this nice review. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from WriterHeather
What a sad but unique story poem you have penned for the contest. It was wonderful that he came to say goodbye. Thank you for sharing. I bet this does well
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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What a sad but unique story poem you have penned for the contest. It was wonderful that he came to say goodbye. Thank you for sharing. I bet this does well
Comment Written 27-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much. Halloween is close so it inspires me. :)
Comment from jessizero
You told a beautiful story in this lovely poem, and you used the words provided very well. I loved your rhymes. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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You told a beautiful story in this lovely poem, and you used the words provided very well. I loved your rhymes. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and for this thoughtful review. :)
Comment from Frank Malley
"Final Bouquet" is a poem that asks questions, probably the most potent of starting points for a poem. As the poem continues, it becomes clear that the man in the poem has not left his lover by choice; some violent trauma has taken his life. The initial uncertainty about the evolving story creates another question: is this death a suicide? The reference to a location "along the cliff's edge" reveals that it probably is a suicide. There is finally another question implied within the poem; if "He loved me till the very end," why did he choose suicide and the pain this choice would bring to his lover?
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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"Final Bouquet" is a poem that asks questions, probably the most potent of starting points for a poem. As the poem continues, it becomes clear that the man in the poem has not left his lover by choice; some violent trauma has taken his life. The initial uncertainty about the evolving story creates another question: is this death a suicide? The reference to a location "along the cliff's edge" reveals that it probably is a suicide. There is finally another question implied within the poem; if "He loved me till the very end," why did he choose suicide and the pain this choice would bring to his lover?
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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I think it was a terrible accident. There was too much love there for it to be otherwise. Thanks for this great review.
Comment from Sally Law
This is a marvelous entry for this contest, kinda like a modern-day Romeo and Juliet except she lives to remember. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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This is a marvelous entry for this contest, kinda like a modern-day Romeo and Juliet except she lives to remember. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Thank you, your reviews always mean a lot to me. :)
