Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

I had to read this a couple of times naughty boy.You kept the flower disguised very cleverly. It could have been silk sheets.
I enjoyed this very much.


Karen

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023

Ha! Yes, this was a good one. I was surprised it didn?t place.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 17-Aug-2023

People thought sexual thoughts, realized they got hornswoggled, and were embarrassed. Karen

reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023

So?.the reader experienced exactly what I planned for them. That?s some darn good writin! Thanks for your review, my friend!

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 17-Aug-2023

Some folks are repressed. I gave up that notion long ago.
It's like telling lies. A dumb thing to do. You have to keep track of everything. Who has the time? Ha! Karen

Comment from poetwatch

Excellent

You didn't have to write in the notes, Douglas. :) I understood when you mention deceptive. Isn't it always the same? Once a flower blooms in beauty it wants to reach the heavens with a shake of the hips. Thank you for sharing your love.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2022

Thanks!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Hi and Welcome to Fanstory!
I'm glad you entered the contest and you did succeed in starting out with the description possibly of a woman and you surprise us with the flower ending.
If you read the contest directions, it says you need three stanzas. So for the contest, you need two more stanzas.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2022

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022

Thanks. My first poem ever. I'll get the hang of it.

reply by lyenochka on 02-Sep-2022

I'm sure you will get the hang of it. You might want to check out the clubs under social for practicing different genres outside of the contests.