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We Need To Invite God Back29 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, a timely poem. Your poem touches upon so many social-economic situations facing our Nation and the generations to come--
Will they have a Country? Your poem reads and flows well of special note:
There was a time that politicians, worked for what they got
An honest day with pay, before our leaders could be bought
(Author, politicians now worry about themselves first, and not We The People. It's all about keeping their job and all the perks that go with it--directly and indirectly.)
Also, a correction may be needed ? To me, the word "debt" looks like it is being spelled "dept." That may not be the case, it might be how the font is making the word appear???? My view my be incorrect.
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Hello author, a timely poem. Your poem touches upon so many social-economic situations facing our Nation and the generations to come--
Will they have a Country? Your poem reads and flows well of special note:
There was a time that politicians, worked for what they got
An honest day with pay, before our leaders could be bought
(Author, politicians now worry about themselves first, and not We The People. It's all about keeping their job and all the perks that go with it--directly and indirectly.)
Also, a correction may be needed ? To me, the word "debt" looks like it is being spelled "dept." That may not be the case, it might be how the font is making the word appear???? My view my be incorrect.
As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Sorry for the delay in my thank you message Margaret. I got so behind before surgery and now am trying to catch up a little while in the hospital. I did appreciate your feedback & kind words for this poem, just as I always appreciate you and your friendship.
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem gives the reason why our nation or any nation falls behind. We don't have faith in the people because they don't really seem to care what their constituents think. The special interest groups have way too much power now. I think your closing couplet gives a road map to change in the right direction.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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This poem gives the reason why our nation or any nation falls behind. We don't have faith in the people because they don't really seem to care what their constituents think. The special interest groups have way too much power now. I think your closing couplet gives a road map to change in the right direction.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Sorry for the delay in my thank you message Joan.. I got so behind before surgery and now am trying to catch up a little while in the hospital. I did appreciate your kind words for this poem, just as I always appreciate you and your friendship.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Socialists are notorious for spending other people's money and making good use of credit, overspending is their modus operandi. I enjoyed your poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Socialists are notorious for spending other people's money and making good use of credit, overspending is their modus operandi. I enjoyed your poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Sorry for the delay in my thank you message Dolly. I got so behind before surgery and now am trying to catch up a little while in the hospital. I did appreciate your kind words for this poem, just as I always appreciate you and your friendship.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is well-presented, Mystery Author. I liked the
rhyming couplets. Your words were well thought out and so true.
Our country, the USA, has been spiraling down for a while due to
lack of leadership and omission of God in schools etc. Those in
control, most politicians, seem to be only concerned for themselves.
Yes, the rich get richer, and the poor get poorer. It's going to take
a concerted effort to get back what we've lost, and we must start
NOW. Every day we don't, we fall further and further behind. The
future doesn't look too bright right now.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Your contest entry is well-presented, Mystery Author. I liked the
rhyming couplets. Your words were well thought out and so true.
Our country, the USA, has been spiraling down for a while due to
lack of leadership and omission of God in schools etc. Those in
control, most politicians, seem to be only concerned for themselves.
Yes, the rich get richer, and the poor get poorer. It's going to take
a concerted effort to get back what we've lost, and we must start
NOW. Every day we don't, we fall further and further behind. The
future doesn't look too bright right now.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Sorry for the delay in my thank you message Jan. I got so behind before surgery and now am trying to catch up a little while in the hospital. I did appreciate your kind words for this poem, just as I always appreciate you and your friendship.
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😊 No worries.
Comment from judiverse
I agree with your sentiments in this. The moral fiber of our country is deteriorating, and that's the root of many of our problems. You do a great job of tackling the problems of spending, student loan forgiveness, lack of real leadership, fear of Socialism. A few things to clear up in the time before the deadline. Check your use of commas. You have some that aren't needed. In first stanza, you don't need those commas after sense and money. Check for other unneeded commas. In fourth stanza, spelling. Student DEBT. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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I agree with your sentiments in this. The moral fiber of our country is deteriorating, and that's the root of many of our problems. You do a great job of tackling the problems of spending, student loan forgiveness, lack of real leadership, fear of Socialism. A few things to clear up in the time before the deadline. Check your use of commas. You have some that aren't needed. In first stanza, you don't need those commas after sense and money. Check for other unneeded commas. In fourth stanza, spelling. Student DEBT. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Judi. I am such a comma queen! Lol!
I'm afraid someone may not be able to follow my rhythm, so over use..
Thanks so much for the awesome feedback and will edit it right away.
Thanks also for the kind words my friend! They are so appreciated.
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You're welcome. It seems that the trend now is toward using fewer commas, even in places where we were accustomed to using them. judi
Comment from Sally Law
Thank you for this, mystery poet. I agree and have grandchildren whose future has been decimated. Thank goodness we know the Lord and hope in Him for an inheritance. These leaders and especially President Brandon are spending money that isn't theirs to spend. It comes from the taxpayers. They're buying votes with it and funding every kind of perversion imaginable.
I really believe this is the end of days and I've started writing about it. Hopefully I will post soon. Meantime, good luck in the contest. Thanks, again!
Blessings,
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you for this, mystery poet. I agree and have grandchildren whose future has been decimated. Thank goodness we know the Lord and hope in Him for an inheritance. These leaders and especially President Brandon are spending money that isn't theirs to spend. It comes from the taxpayers. They're buying votes with it and funding every kind of perversion imaginable.
I really believe this is the end of days and I've started writing about it. Hopefully I will post soon. Meantime, good luck in the contest. Thanks, again!
Blessings,
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Sorry for the delay in my thank you message Sally. I got so behind before surgery and now am trying to catch up a little while in the hospital. I did appreciate your kind words for this poem, just as I always appreciate you and your friendship.
Comment from Teri7
Amen! We need to invite God back to wherever he was not invited to be. Without Him our country will surely fail and fall. This is a great poem of truth you have penned. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Amen! We need to invite God back to wherever he was not invited to be. Without Him our country will surely fail and fall. This is a great poem of truth you have penned. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Sorry for the delay in my thank you message Teri. I got so behind before surgery and now am trying to catch up a little while in the hospital. I did appreciate your kind words for this poem, just as I always appreciate you and your friendship.
Comment from Boogienights
I like this very much. You present aome great ideas without getting too political or blaming. I agree with a lot of what you say, especially about getting some decent people elected. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I like this very much. You present aome great ideas without getting too political or blaming. I agree with a lot of what you say, especially about getting some decent people elected. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I'm so sorry for the delay in this thank you message. I got behind before my surgery, but I do thank you for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. So appreciated my friend!
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You had surgery!? Are you ok? I'm sorry, I didn't know, I hope all is going well with you. ❤
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You are so sweet Sharon. I had my second leg reconstructed and new knee put in, so I maybe will walk again. I had first one done in July.
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That's what I dream of doing as well. Both of my knees are bone on bone. My weight though is a factor as well as health concerns. I'm so happy for you!
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My legs have slowly deteriorated & knees bone on bone too, but I lost my ability to walk from my Lupus that destroyed the muscle, bones and joints in legs. I wish you the best too as I pray you do the knees. It will be like a dream come true. My doctors hopeful that I will be walking again by Christmas!
Comment from Janet Foor
You make some valid points. Sadly common sense is not common anymore and most people are out for number one.
But you premise of inviting God back would certainly accomplish our goal.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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You make some valid points. Sadly common sense is not common anymore and most people are out for number one.
But you premise of inviting God back would certainly accomplish our goal.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I'm so sorry for the delay in this thank you message. I got behind before my surgery, but I do thank you for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. So appreciated my friend!
Comment from John Ciarmello
I enjoyed this well-organized piece of truth and honor. It says it all quite nicely without beating around the bush. I wish you the best in the contest. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed this well-organized piece of truth and honor. It says it all quite nicely without beating around the bush. I wish you the best in the contest. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I'm so sorry for the delay in this thank you message. I got behind before my surgery, but I do thank you for your lovely review and kind words for my poem. So appreciated my friend!
