Campfire Reflections
A Contest Entry29 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Faith,
This poem shows that watching a fire can make memories come up and maybe make some of those memories that aren't needed disappear with the smoke. It could also be metaphoric for losing memories as we grow older.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats for tying for second in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Faith,
This poem shows that watching a fire can make memories come up and maybe make some of those memories that aren't needed disappear with the smoke. It could also be metaphoric for losing memories as we grow older.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats for tying for second in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Joan, for your congratulations and for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
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You?re welcome on all accounts, Liz.
Joan
Comment from country ranch writer
I love cam fires I miss them for sure being a "country girl!
"sorry to say theses days are gone forever, but got lots of memories of the fun we had while doing our stuff out in the fresh air.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I love cam fires I miss them for sure being a "country girl!
"sorry to say theses days are gone forever, but got lots of memories of the fun we had while doing our stuff out in the fresh air.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Campfires are amazing! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from Raul1
You have very good use of words in this contest. It is well written. A good fit of the syllables counted for. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Nice work! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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You have very good use of words in this contest. It is well written. A good fit of the syllables counted for. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Nice work! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
It's a good presentation and the writing follows a distinct path. I particularly like the second line. A good entry into this contest. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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It's a good presentation and the writing follows a distinct path. I particularly like the second line. A good entry into this contest. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from Dawn Munro
What memories this sweet poem evoked in ME as I read it, and wonderful imagery! I can almost smell that campfire! How I miss the outdoors and camping. Your entry should do well. Good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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What memories this sweet poem evoked in ME as I read it, and wonderful imagery! I can almost smell that campfire! How I miss the outdoors and camping. Your entry should do well. Good luck!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind words. Campfires are the best!
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Thinking about roasted marshmallows... (LOL) You're very welcome.
Comment from karenina
Wow. THIS is impactful! Excellent presentation in red and black, and really clever "S" alliteration that sizzles like the hissing of a fire on a chilly night.
How you packed all of this into twenty syllables is beyond me, but I'm impressed!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Wow. THIS is impactful! Excellent presentation in red and black, and really clever "S" alliteration that sizzles like the hissing of a fire on a chilly night.
How you packed all of this into twenty syllables is beyond me, but I'm impressed!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind words and for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your twenty syllables in this descriptive piece that could be taken different ways--as was probably your intention.
Those memories that hurt us may eventually "burn up," lose their power.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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You have made excellent use of your twenty syllables in this descriptive piece that could be taken different ways--as was probably your intention.
Those memories that hurt us may eventually "burn up," lose their power.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Is the thought as good as the 20 syllable poem? Or is the party looking into the fire as disturbed as me? (Read:Turn off the Noise of mine to understand). Recently posted.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Is the thought as good as the 20 syllable poem? Or is the party looking into the fire as disturbed as me? (Read:Turn off the Noise of mine to understand). Recently posted.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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I searched your profile for 'Turn off the Noise' but I couldn't find it.
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Try ?I Need a Rest.?
turn off the noise was the intro
Some say it's a sign of intelligence.
Others think my brain is warped.
I'd like to believe the first
but my mind itself thirsts
for downtime.
What about you?
Do thoughts pass
through your mind
as frequently as trains
come from and go to
Penn Station, N.Y.C.?
Day or night,
awake or asleep,
even when I'm by myself,
conversations churn
like fish being fed chum.
A chaotic turbulence
similar to opened floodgates
at the base of Hoover Dam
when Lake Mead is full,
or even when it's not.
I hear within such
passing thoughts as
"Thomas Jefferson
being a Huguenot,"
while I sleep.
Who does that?
Could thoughts we have,
actually, be conversations?
If not, what are they,
and how do we store more
each day we breathe?
Perhaps if I knew how much
access remained, I'd lease
some out for rent, or not,
for if I exceeded capacity
there be none left for us.
At least, as it stands
one or the other remains
in command, though,
I'm not sure if
it's the id or me.
Maybe that is the answer
why neither of us ever rests.
We both need to be vigilant
for if we'd snooze, we may lose
whatever is left in storage.
Comment from Sally Law
Beautifully penned and illustrated poem, dear Faith, in an economy of syllables. A lovely presentation too. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Beautifully penned and illustrated poem, dear Faith, in an economy of syllables. A lovely presentation too. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind words, Sally, and for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from June Sargent
This is lovely! The imagery of dancing memories swirling around in a camp fire is poignant and touching. Perfect artwork and presentation. Should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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This is lovely! The imagery of dancing memories swirling around in a camp fire is poignant and touching. Perfect artwork and presentation. Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
