The Miranda Chronicles
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with the characters' reactions to the events
of the story, Shirley. I could see Waylon kicking the bumper and
feel how he felt abandoned by Dougie. I don't believe I'd be drinking
any homemade beer made at a trailer park--yuck. Aaron, in his
own way, offers Miranda, a bit of hope. I'll be interested to find
out how this story moves forward.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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You did a great job with the characters' reactions to the events
of the story, Shirley. I could see Waylon kicking the bumper and
feel how he felt abandoned by Dougie. I don't believe I'd be drinking
any homemade beer made at a trailer park--yuck. Aaron, in his
own way, offers Miranda, a bit of hope. I'll be interested to find
out how this story moves forward.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you. This story is hitting me in spurts.i have no idea where Miranda will land. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Must be highly agitated to throw the fit he was. Probably needs anger management help.
His comments about her being trash way out of line, and should not be tolerated, regardless if he is mad about his dad apparently abandoning him.
Seems she has a multitude of troubles on her hands including being left behind by Dougie.
She needs them doors opened...real fast.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Must be highly agitated to throw the fit he was. Probably needs anger management help.
His comments about her being trash way out of line, and should not be tolerated, regardless if he is mad about his dad apparently abandoning him.
Seems she has a multitude of troubles on her hands including being left behind by Dougie.
She needs them doors opened...real fast.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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That she does. Lol. Thank you for this entertaining review.
Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
I really like your characters. Miranda seems like a strong woman who can make a difference in that kid's life. Even the "prophet" Aaron has a good heart in spite of spewing Bible verses like platitudes.
Its entirely up to you (It's)
Miranda Chronicals (Chronicles)
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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I really like your characters. Miranda seems like a strong woman who can make a difference in that kid's life. Even the "prophet" Aaron has a good heart in spite of spewing Bible verses like platitudes.
Its entirely up to you (It's)
Miranda Chronicals (Chronicles)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you. I really appreciate your feedback. And thank you for signing up to keep up with Miranda.
Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
This stuff is good, Gretchen. I only wish you would leave the reader a one paragraph summary of the previous chapter. If it was the one when Doug left her, saying he would come back for the boy, I have it floating piecemeal in my colon of a brain, but a review would be nice.
"Keep saying stuff like that and I'm gonna arrange that meeting. " [Oh, yeah! I like Miranda.]
Thanks for entertaining me again.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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This stuff is good, Gretchen. I only wish you would leave the reader a one paragraph summary of the previous chapter. If it was the one when Doug left her, saying he would come back for the boy, I have it floating piecemeal in my colon of a brain, but a review would be nice.
"Keep saying stuff like that and I'm gonna arrange that meeting. " [Oh, yeah! I like Miranda.]
Thanks for entertaining me again.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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I will try to give a leading summary in the future. This originally wasn't going to be more than a short story. But Miranda has other ideas. Thanks for the heads up.
Comment from Spitfire
Again, your breezy and funny dialogue between Aaron and Miranda. His use of cliches about God and her reaction to them is a hoot. Her call out to God about opening doors is a cliff hangar of sorts.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Again, your breezy and funny dialogue between Aaron and Miranda. His use of cliches about God and her reaction to them is a hoot. Her call out to God about opening doors is a cliff hangar of sorts.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this installment of the Miranda Chronicles
Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this post with us. It's a good addition to the previous posts. I can't wait to see what Miranda does next. I agree, she's going to continue to be responsible for Wayne.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you for sharing this post with us. It's a good addition to the previous posts. I can't wait to see what Miranda does next. I agree, she's going to continue to be responsible for Wayne.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review.
Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Gretchen! I declare you certainly must be the comeback Queen of the east coast. You made me chuckle a few times with this short essay. You have a talent gal. I enjoyed this short chapter very much! WEll done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Gretchen! I declare you certainly must be the comeback Queen of the east coast. You made me chuckle a few times with this short essay. You have a talent gal. I enjoyed this short chapter very much! WEll done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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I am particularly gifted in the smart ass comment, if I do say so myself. Thank you so much for the wonderful review and the awesome gift of stars.
Gretchen
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Yes you are! Good Job! Nancy:)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Cool. Nice chapter.
I've somehow missed the rest.
You have a very nice first person style.
angry with his dad, and probably angry at himself for trusting Dougie. - This line made me think his dad and Dougie were two different people, causing a hiccup in the narrative.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Cool. Nice chapter.
I've somehow missed the rest.
You have a very nice first person style.
angry with his dad, and probably angry at himself for trusting Dougie. - This line made me think his dad and Dougie were two different people, causing a hiccup in the narrative.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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There are 4 other parts to this. I started it as a stand alone story but it's been growing each week. Sorry for the confusion. Dad and Dougie are one and the same. Thank you so much for your kind review.
Gretchen
Comment from forestport12
Lots of good rich and realistic dialogue without tags. It really gets you in the moment. It's also a good way here that you give me more of the characters you've created by how they banter with each other. Very good!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Lots of good rich and realistic dialogue without tags. It really gets you in the moment. It's also a good way here that you give me more of the characters you've created by how they banter with each other. Very good!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you. I certainly appreciate your review and comments.
Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This is a top story. I look forward to where it is headed. A really good read and no spags anywhere to be found, hey! Keep it coming. This is my favourite kind of reading.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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This is a top story. I look forward to where it is headed. A really good read and no spags anywhere to be found, hey! Keep it coming. This is my favourite kind of reading.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Awe, thank you so much. I'm having a blast writing it. Your comments mean so much to me.
Thank you for the outstanding stars.
Gretchen
