Third Wish
a hundred word story9 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
excellent entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt entry contest
good word count and great word choices
the presentation is nice, I like the picture
you got a lot of story in 100 words, that is not easy to do
i love the ending... she was the creator
good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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excellent entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt entry contest
good word count and great word choices
the presentation is nice, I like the picture
you got a lot of story in 100 words, that is not easy to do
i love the ending... she was the creator
good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Gypsy
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Three wishes one might think would be a blessing, but Here is a classic example of just the opposite.
Para 2, 2nd sentence: SUGGEST remove (was) before (manageable)
Para 2, 2nd sentence (intergallactic) should be (intergalactic) one (l)
Para 3, 2nd sentence: (shut down) should be (shutdown) one word
A very good hidden lesson in ethics is to be careful what you ask for.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Three wishes one might think would be a blessing, but Here is a classic example of just the opposite.
Para 2, 2nd sentence: SUGGEST remove (was) before (manageable)
Para 2, 2nd sentence (intergallactic) should be (intergalactic) one (l)
Para 3, 2nd sentence: (shut down) should be (shutdown) one word
A very good hidden lesson in ethics is to be careful what you ask for.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Gary, for these corrections.
Comment from Lem Aster
I really like this concept and how you were able to cover a lot of ground in just 100 words, and provide an evocative twist on an age old question. Good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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I really like this concept and how you were able to cover a lot of ground in just 100 words, and provide an evocative twist on an age old question. Good luck!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Lem
Comment from Wendy G
This has a few layers I think, which makes it very clever, and a thought provoking short story. Well written. Sending best wishes for the 100 word dash contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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This has a few layers I think, which makes it very clever, and a thought provoking short story. Well written. Sending best wishes for the 100 word dash contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
I liked how you alluded to the three wishes tale and then finally alluded to the creation of the universe as in the first words of creation in Genesis 1. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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I liked how you alluded to the three wishes tale and then finally alluded to the creation of the universe as in the first words of creation in Genesis 1. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Helen
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Emma knew about her wishes and what mistake she did, so she tried to mend her mistake and get a relief as once the genie informed her of her good fortune in digging up the enchanted lamp, freeing him; she used her final wish and commanded, "Let there be light!"; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Emma knew about her wishes and what mistake she did, so she tried to mend her mistake and get a relief as once the genie informed her of her good fortune in digging up the enchanted lamp, freeing him; she used her final wish and commanded, "Let there be light!"; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thanks, ALD
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Interesting.
Well written. Good work.
Now that I've said what I wanted to say, I suppose I can simple dribble on until I reach the sacred one hundred and fifty characters. "Are we there yet?"
Good luck in the contest.
I liked your story!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Interesting.
Well written. Good work.
Now that I've said what I wanted to say, I suppose I can simple dribble on until I reach the sacred one hundred and fifty characters. "Are we there yet?"
Good luck in the contest.
I liked your story!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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TY, Wayne
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a great flash story!!
This is a favorite genre of mine not only to read but to write as well.
I appreciate the presentation and whimsical nature of this story.
This is clever, imaginative, and wildly creative.
Often time flash stories can read awkwardly and leave me wanting more. This story did not, I felt satisfied at the stories conclusion.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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This is a great flash story!!
This is a favorite genre of mine not only to read but to write as well.
I appreciate the presentation and whimsical nature of this story.
This is clever, imaginative, and wildly creative.
Often time flash stories can read awkwardly and leave me wanting more. This story did not, I felt satisfied at the stories conclusion.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thanks, KL
Comment from Douglas Goff
Interesting. I would have used my third wish to wish for another genie. Also, a naked genie always adds more ambiance and a general flare to the story. Seriously, interesting. Keep it up !
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Interesting. I would have used my third wish to wish for another genie. Also, a naked genie always adds more ambiance and a general flare to the story. Seriously, interesting. Keep it up !
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I would have given the genie a noticeable limp and a Detroit Tigers ball cap, but I only had a hundred words. : )
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Nicely played. You are a creative one!
