After the Storm Had Passed
Thoughts as a child about a tornado I was in.20 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This draws the reader in, who want to know where they can read them: "stories about it, telling of how my mom and I went for the ride of our lives and ended up unhurt, but with unbelievable tales" Good tongue-in-cheek humor, a little comedy relief: "or a little town where nothing ever happened, things were looking up." This actually dulled the trauma:
"Reliving it the first two or three times, I could handle, but after twenty recitations, the story was getting old." It's actually a technique called over exposure. I love that it is told through a child's perspective.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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This draws the reader in, who want to know where they can read them: "stories about it, telling of how my mom and I went for the ride of our lives and ended up unhurt, but with unbelievable tales" Good tongue-in-cheek humor, a little comedy relief: "or a little town where nothing ever happened, things were looking up." This actually dulled the trauma:
"Reliving it the first two or three times, I could handle, but after twenty recitations, the story was getting old." It's actually a technique called over exposure. I love that it is told through a child's perspective.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much Liz, for a great review. I have several storm stories in my portfolio. You can find one under "Too Hot For February" I may repost one soon.
Beth
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thank you for the reference to another storm story. I've got it on my list.
Comment from Liz Westfall
I haven't read your other stuff about the storm, but this was good. I have always wondered what it would be like to survive a tornado and lose my home. I live in NY, so I haven't even had a tornado come anywhere near where I live. I love how you made this lighthearted.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I haven't read your other stuff about the storm, but this was good. I have always wondered what it would be like to survive a tornado and lose my home. I live in NY, so I haven't even had a tornado come anywhere near where I live. I love how you made this lighthearted.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you Liz, My other stories are more serious and detailed. I may repost them at some point. That for the great review.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wonderful story! You've managed to get much mileage from this momentous event without resorting to self-plagiarism--each piece provides an independent perspective. This is fabulous. Poor guy in the doghouse!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Wonderful story! You've managed to get much mileage from this momentous event without resorting to self-plagiarism--each piece provides an independent perspective. This is fabulous. Poor guy in the doghouse!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you Liz, You are right. I have gotten a lot of mileage out of this story.
Beth
Comment from joann r romei
I really did enjoy this, especially the part about the underwear, I did read the other story and it was very frightening, I cant believe the cats didn't die.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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I really did enjoy this, especially the part about the underwear, I did read the other story and it was very frightening, I cant believe the cats didn't die.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for a great review and the six stars. It is surprising the cats were not hurt. We did lose a few chickens. There were 19 people killed in that storm so we were very fortunate.
Beth
Comment from LJbutterfly
For me, this is a fascinating story, since I grew up in a big noisy city. The only tornado I've seen was in the movies on on the TV news. I'm making a note to check out your portfolio for a description of what it was like to ride through a funnel. You experienced a true adventure.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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For me, this is a fascinating story, since I grew up in a big noisy city. The only tornado I've seen was in the movies on on the TV news. I'm making a note to check out your portfolio for a description of what it was like to ride through a funnel. You experienced a true adventure.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. The storm stories are pretty far in my portfolio. You could look at names. I think one is called "Too Hot For February.
Beth
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Tornados, and other forces of nature, are nothing to fool around with.
In Paragraph two possessions, compared to people you cared about, were just stuff that could be replaced.
"most of it's" should be most of its.
Seems you came through the experience rather unscathed, all things considered. Good for you.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Tornados, and other forces of nature, are nothing to fool around with.
In Paragraph two possessions, compared to people you cared about, were just stuff that could be replaced.
"most of it's" should be most of its.
Seems you came through the experience rather unscathed, all things considered. Good for you.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you for an excellent reviews. I'm glad you saw the misplaced punctuation it "its". I know better.
Beth
Comment from Ric Myworld
What a great story that gives a different view on your aspect of the tornado. Not only losing everything, but getting a new home that was better than the one you had. It kind of hits home with old sayings about when we lose something, something else is gained. Not the exact saying. LOL. Thanks for sharing Wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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What a great story that gives a different view on your aspect of the tornado. Not only losing everything, but getting a new home that was better than the one you had. It kind of hits home with old sayings about when we lose something, something else is gained. Not the exact saying. LOL. Thanks for sharing Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you Ric. I'm so glad you liked my story. It shows what a bored kid I was when any kind of excitement, even something that could have killed me, was a good thing.
Beth
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
A true story, we know, about a tornado, how the storm had passed, what happened, when you was only 10 year old, how fortunately you escaped, saved, experience in the family, you moved to a new house, new experience; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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A true story, we know, about a tornado, how the storm had passed, what happened, when you was only 10 year old, how fortunately you escaped, saved, experience in the family, you moved to a new house, new experience; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you for another great review. I appreciate you reviewing and commenting on my stories.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
This is a nice essay which shows a different side of you. I particularly like the second paragraph. Seems your aunt has a sense of humor about the catastrophe. Excellent descriptions of the damage done to your clothes. Love the bit about your neighbor trying to explain the panties on his floorboard. A laugh again about the piano being too heavy. Special thanks for saving those cats!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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This is a nice essay which shows a different side of you. I particularly like the second paragraph. Seems your aunt has a sense of humor about the catastrophe. Excellent descriptions of the damage done to your clothes. Love the bit about your neighbor trying to explain the panties on his floorboard. A laugh again about the piano being too heavy. Special thanks for saving those cats!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you for a great review. I'm glad that told me the things you liked about this.
Beth
Comment from Judy Lawless
You've done a wonderful job relaying this story from a different point of view, after the storm, Beth. Your honesty about how you, as a child, really felt about it all - excited instead of afraid or sad. Thanks for sharing this with us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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You've done a wonderful job relaying this story from a different point of view, after the storm, Beth. Your honesty about how you, as a child, really felt about it all - excited instead of afraid or sad. Thanks for sharing this with us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you Judy. I really appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
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You?re most welcome, Beth. :)
