The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "Stockholm Syndrome"Adventures around & upon a hill
13 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting discussion. I hadn't thought about Stockholm Syndrome as the reason they behaved well (if possible) when dropped into other lifelines.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
  |
This is an interesting discussion. I hadn't thought about Stockholm Syndrome as the reason they behaved well (if possible) when dropped into other lifelines.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad it got you to think.
Comment from aryr
A fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. This was great to read. How did they know how to play the harps of the 16th century? How did they know each other? This was indeed well put together. I am amazed! Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
|
A fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. This was great to read. How did they know how to play the harps of the 16th century? How did they know each other? This was indeed well put together. I am amazed! Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your delightful review. I always look forward to you reviews.
-
You are so welcome, Liz.
Comment from strandregs
Hi Liz
I am no author
Just an observer
You use the word some twice on this
We'd all end up in some group of homeless people living who knows where. I don't imagine they had homeless shelters back then." There was some remnant of concern in Mary Jo's voice.
The second not being the person so it's not the way they talk.
It's the way you talk.
So I think you need to change it.
I like the reference to lay lines. But never heard ' so to do' before.
Is that ancient speak?
Quite a mix up of subjects and topics which I guess are anchored for the reader's interest.
Was fore. :-))Z.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
|
Hi Liz
I am no author
Just an observer
You use the word some twice on this
We'd all end up in some group of homeless people living who knows where. I don't imagine they had homeless shelters back then." There was some remnant of concern in Mary Jo's voice.
The second not being the person so it's not the way they talk.
It's the way you talk.
So I think you need to change it.
I like the reference to lay lines. But never heard ' so to do' before.
Is that ancient speak?
Quite a mix up of subjects and topics which I guess are anchored for the reader's interest.
Was fore. :-))Z.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your observant review. I see now, that I can leave out 'some' & the 'so to do we' needs another o...'so too, do we...
I am ancient...so it may be ancient speak. lol....moohaha
Comment from Thomas Blanks
This was interesting. You are educating the reader, something I also like to do. I know much about Stockholm Syndrome, being a former FBI Special Agent. We trained in hostage situations. However, the only thing I know about the harp is that my least favorite part of Marx Brothers movies as a kid was when Harpo did a harp solo... BORING, and not funny. Ten-year-old kids didn't appreciate culture. We wanted slapstick (chasing a turkey around a hotel room) and Groucho's double-talk... "It certainly is innuendo! Love goes sailing out the door when money comes in-your-window!"
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
|
This was interesting. You are educating the reader, something I also like to do. I know much about Stockholm Syndrome, being a former FBI Special Agent. We trained in hostage situations. However, the only thing I know about the harp is that my least favorite part of Marx Brothers movies as a kid was when Harpo did a harp solo... BORING, and not funny. Ten-year-old kids didn't appreciate culture. We wanted slapstick (chasing a turkey around a hotel room) and Groucho's double-talk... "It certainly is innuendo! Love goes sailing out the door when money comes in-your-window!"
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
-
The reason we went to England in reality was because out friend Sally Ann (Cordelia) was taking harp therapy lessons. It wasquite remarkable when they demonstrated that certain chords made us restless, or sad, or joyful or peaceful. I think that is where Beethoven's music always made me depressed. It's the chords he used. The harpists take their harps into hospitals, nursing homes etc & play healing chords they discover best by observing the peacefulness or agitation levels when specific chords are played.
-
interesting
Comment from sunnilicious
Good novel installment. It's a lot to take in... The story is like a seance on the verge of a psychological thriller but set in the 16th Century. You're very creative. Plenty details but well placed. Good lead in to story from last installment. Good narration and dialogue. Keep up the good work. Nice :)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
|
Good novel installment. It's a lot to take in... The story is like a seance on the verge of a psychological thriller but set in the 16th Century. You're very creative. Plenty details but well placed. Good lead in to story from last installment. Good narration and dialogue. Keep up the good work. Nice :)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad you enjoyed it
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I have always fantasized about time travel, but Evelyn points out a very real concern. If we traveled back to any particular time in history, how much do we know about that era? I know I would be as lost as she seems to express she would be.
After Previously:
P3, s1: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
P4, s1: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
After **********
P10, s1: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
P11, s3: Add a comma after (so to)
P15, s1: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
P17, s1: (So) should be (So,) Add a comma here as a pause to set off the introductory phrase
P17, s2: (similarity) should be (similarities) To agree with "some"
P17, s2: Add a comma after (lifetime)
P27, s2: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
You write this as though you have actually experienced it. Your words ring so true that I feel like you are telling a story of what really happened to you. Are you?
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
|
I have always fantasized about time travel, but Evelyn points out a very real concern. If we traveled back to any particular time in history, how much do we know about that era? I know I would be as lost as she seems to express she would be.
After Previously:
P3, s1: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
P4, s1: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
After **********
P10, s1: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
P11, s3: Add a comma after (so to)
P15, s1: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
P17, s1: (So) should be (So,) Add a comma here as a pause to set off the introductory phrase
P17, s2: (similarity) should be (similarities) To agree with "some"
P17, s2: Add a comma after (lifetime)
P27, s2: (16th century) should be (16th-century) hyphenated
You write this as though you have actually experienced it. Your words ring so true that I feel like you are telling a story of what really happened to you. Are you?
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your involved review. I was in the convent & experienced this for the 1st four years. But my friend & believed when we actually traveled to England, that we had been there because of our emotional reactions, similar as that recorded in the first 13 chapters. Imagine, living as a monk in the 16th-century then becoming a nun in the 20th century! I hope I've got that out of my system for any future lifetimes. lol
-
Snapped in time, four centuries just like that, I think I would have a bad case of major "jet-lag."
-
lol
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this story exploring Stockholm Syndrome.
I have heard of this before but this post explained it in a creative way.
You have a wonderful imagination and I thank you got sharing it with us.
I appreciate the author notes as I have not read the other chapters.
Your writing is wildly descriptive and allowed me to follow along fairly easily not knowing who the characters were prior.
That is a sign of a writer, one that has developed the characters in a well rounded way.
The dialogue read in an authentic way and has a natural flow.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
|
I enjoyed this story exploring Stockholm Syndrome.
I have heard of this before but this post explained it in a creative way.
You have a wonderful imagination and I thank you got sharing it with us.
I appreciate the author notes as I have not read the other chapters.
Your writing is wildly descriptive and allowed me to follow along fairly easily not knowing who the characters were prior.
That is a sign of a writer, one that has developed the characters in a well rounded way.
The dialogue read in an authentic way and has a natural flow.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your delightful review.
It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from Jay Squires
This was a fine chapter. I particularly liked the Stockholm Syndrome as an explanation of their behavior in the sixteenth century. I wish there was a way you could make the ley lines sound more believable to a neophyte in spiritual sciences. A character's belief in the Michael and Mary waves doesn't translate to a belief by the reader. I realize there is the element of faith in it, but your job as a writer is to transfer that faith to the reader. With Christianity, you can get away with not doing that because nearly all readers have an experience with its mythos. I hope I'm making the distinction clear.
Here is a suggestion about one sentence: "The element that creates this syndrome is confusion regarding loyalties." [Here, Liz, I'd italicize "confusion regarding loyalties". Otherwise, you have the reader (at least this reader), trying to change "confusion" into "confusing". If you read it through a couple of times, I think you'll see what I mean.]
This is probably the most grounded that I've found your book to be. I like that.
Jay
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
|
This was a fine chapter. I particularly liked the Stockholm Syndrome as an explanation of their behavior in the sixteenth century. I wish there was a way you could make the ley lines sound more believable to a neophyte in spiritual sciences. A character's belief in the Michael and Mary waves doesn't translate to a belief by the reader. I realize there is the element of faith in it, but your job as a writer is to transfer that faith to the reader. With Christianity, you can get away with not doing that because nearly all readers have an experience with its mythos. I hope I'm making the distinction clear.
Here is a suggestion about one sentence: "The element that creates this syndrome is confusion regarding loyalties." [Here, Liz, I'd italicize "confusion regarding loyalties". Otherwise, you have the reader (at least this reader), trying to change "confusion" into "confusing". If you read it through a couple of times, I think you'll see what I mean.]
This is probably the most grounded that I've found your book to be. I like that.
Jay
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your insightful review. The improvement can be attributed to the fact, you are in my head, guiding me.
-
Awww, that's kind. Deluded, but kind, LOL.
-
lol
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed another session listening in to your ladies' group therapy. I can understand how they would have been suffering from Stockholm Syndrome. Thanks again for sharing. As always, best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
|
I enjoyed another session listening in to your ladies' group therapy. I can understand how they would have been suffering from Stockholm Syndrome. Thanks again for sharing. As always, best wishes to you.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Judy Lawless
You've done a wonderful job with this further summation, Liz. I'm always intrigued with the possibility of former and future lives, although I've never felt any connection with another life. This was a really good read.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
|
You've done a wonderful job with this further summation, Liz. I'm always intrigued with the possibility of former and future lives, although I've never felt any connection with another life. This was a really good read.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2022
-
Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad you are enjoying it. I love the Chinese culture and art but am repulsed by the cities of Hong Kong and Shanghai. I don't have a good feeling about them. I have many other clues for me anyway.
-
You?re most welcome, Liz.
-
You?re most welcome, Kate.
-
You?re most welcome, Liz.
