An Epic Tornado Tale
A 30 stanza true story in poetry31 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This is so well written. It sure is a great poem but so sorry you had to go through a bad storm such as you described. But glad that you and your family were safe from the tornado. Frightening.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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This is so well written. It sure is a great poem but so sorry you had to go through a bad storm such as you described. But glad that you and your family were safe from the tornado. Frightening.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you Rosemary. I'm not sorry I went through that storm. I was only ten but it has strengthened my faith in God throughout the years. I would take anything for the experience.
Beth
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Beth,
This is a well written story. It flows well with easy unforced rhyme. It shows the physical and emotional devastation of a tornado. It also shows how everyone shows strength in the aftermath to rebuild.
Congrats on your second place finish.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Hi Beth,
This is a well written story. It flows well with easy unforced rhyme. It shows the physical and emotional devastation of a tornado. It also shows how everyone shows strength in the aftermath to rebuild.
Congrats on your second place finish.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
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Thank you Joan. I really appreciate the review and nice comments. That was the most dramatic thing that happened in life at 10. After all these years it was fun to write about it.
Beth
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You?re welcome, Beth. Writing can be cathartic and can show the miracles even in the bad things.
Joan
Comment from Frank Malley
In about thirty stanzas, Beth Shelby writes in rhyming tetrameter about a tornado that destroyed her home when she was a child. She remembers a bunch of important details and repeatedly includes events that are thrilled with shock and uncertainty,keeping the emotional output of her poem high as the poem rolls on in tetrameter. An exceptional account!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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In about thirty stanzas, Beth Shelby writes in rhyming tetrameter about a tornado that destroyed her home when she was a child. She remembers a bunch of important details and repeatedly includes events that are thrilled with shock and uncertainty,keeping the emotional output of her poem high as the poem rolls on in tetrameter. An exceptional account!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thank you Frank, I see the two of us shared second prize. I read your story too, and I should have given you a review, because it was an excellent story and I was proud to share second place with you. Your rhyming about the toad and the winter which was fun to read.
Beth
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Thanks, Beth. Be well! Frank
Comment from Michele Harber
This is an amazing story, told with such incredible detail and passion. To tell such a painful and traumatic story is difficult enough. To do it with rhythm and rhyme is nothing short of a miracle. Congratulations on your well-deserved second-place finish!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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This is an amazing story, told with such incredible detail and passion. To tell such a painful and traumatic story is difficult enough. To do it with rhythm and rhyme is nothing short of a miracle. Congratulations on your well-deserved second-place finish!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
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Thank you Michele. It made such an impression on me as a ten year old, I still remember the all the details. I appreciate the review and and congratulations on the second place win.
Beth
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You're welcome. I appreciate your sharing such a difficult memory, and especially for doing it so movingly.
Comment from kiwisteveh
This is long but your steady rhyme and meter keep it going smoothly and you fill in lots of detail that would not have been possible in a shorter poem.
What is noticeable is the traditional story structure - building up to the storm, coming to a climax, resolution and aftermath. Great job!
Congratulations on placing in this contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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This is long but your steady rhyme and meter keep it going smoothly and you fill in lots of detail that would not have been possible in a shorter poem.
What is noticeable is the traditional story structure - building up to the storm, coming to a climax, resolution and aftermath. Great job!
Congratulations on placing in this contest.
Steve
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank you for review this long poem. I appreciate your comments and congratulations.
Beth
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"This could mean a storm" is good foreshadowing of what was to come.
S3/L4 "pinecones" should be pine cones.
Animals know when storms are brewing.
In that kind of situation all need to pitch in to make it through.
Strong rhymes throughout.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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"This could mean a storm" is good foreshadowing of what was to come.
S3/L4 "pinecones" should be pine cones.
Animals know when storms are brewing.
In that kind of situation all need to pitch in to make it through.
Strong rhymes throughout.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thank you for a great reviews. I appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Beth it's an amazing story told within a poem. It absolutely amazing you all survived. I can understand your father's anguish when he feared you had all perished. I wish you the best in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Wow, Beth it's an amazing story told within a poem. It absolutely amazing you all survived. I can understand your father's anguish when he feared you had all perished. I wish you the best in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much Ulla. I'm glad you liked my story. I really appreciate the Six stars.
Beth
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A great poem for the contest. It is a gripping narrative pushed along by the rhymes that make the story easy to follow and remember. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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A great poem for the contest. It is a gripping narrative pushed along by the rhymes that make the story easy to follow and remember. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thank you, I'm not good with free verse like you, but I seem to do okay with rhymes as long as I stay away from all the new types of rhyming poetry.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
It is a grand sharing of a perilous tornedo, truly and explicitly, rhythmically and in a flow of facts expressed, how the family members were afraid of the tornedo is passionately described; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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It is a grand sharing of a perilous tornedo, truly and explicitly, rhythmically and in a flow of facts expressed, how the family members were afraid of the tornedo is passionately described; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thank you DR. I'm glad I can count on you to read my post and give good reviews. I appreciate you.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
Very impressive. I hope you win the contest. This would be a wonderful read aloud poem at a slam with the slow build to a climax and the inclusion of dialogue.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Very impressive. I hope you win the contest. This would be a wonderful read aloud poem at a slam with the slow build to a climax and the inclusion of dialogue.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much for the nice review. It isn't so hard to turn a story into a poem but this one turned out to be pretty long.
Beth
