The Enthusiastic Helper
Getting it Wrong (274 words)11 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh geesh! When things go wrong...they REALLY go wrong, don't they???
This is yet another review I've written twice--last night--and none of them seem to have "stuck." I'm going back and hoping the third time's a charm.
It's likely my old computer but darn it! I wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed this!
Karenina
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Oh geesh! When things go wrong...they REALLY go wrong, don't they???
This is yet another review I've written twice--last night--and none of them seem to have "stuck." I'm going back and hoping the third time's a charm.
It's likely my old computer but darn it! I wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed this!
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Sep-2022
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A very clever and creative story. I truly enjoyed and got a chuckle from Ray's attempt to use his life-saving skills.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
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A very clever and creative story. I truly enjoyed and got a chuckle from Ray's attempt to use his life-saving skills.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Oh dear! He certainly meant well, and everything certainly went wrong. You told the story well, and maintained the interest. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
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Oh dear! He certainly meant well, and everything certainly went wrong. You told the story well, and maintained the interest. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the A Good Turn Gone Wrong writing prompt contest.
I took a first aid class in college and got a certification card. I was told I was obligated to use first aid when needed.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Good presentation Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand.
Good luck in the contest.
Well done.
Gypsy
Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason. Novalis
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Excellent entry for the A Good Turn Gone Wrong writing prompt contest.
I took a first aid class in college and got a certification card. I was told I was obligated to use first aid when needed.
I enjoyed reading it. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Good presentation Your writing flows naturally and it's easy to understand.
Good luck in the contest.
Well done.
Gypsy
Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason. Novalis
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
Comment from WLHall
This is very funny and well-written. No spags that I could see. Creative, a joy to read and a good length. Poor Ray, just a little too ambitious for his own good.
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This is very funny and well-written. No spags that I could see. Creative, a joy to read and a good length. Poor Ray, just a little too ambitious for his own good.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Wow! What a story? I'm sure his critical father was very unkind after this incident. The story is well-stated. The font size is great. The photo fits well. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow! What a story? I'm sure his critical father was very unkind after this incident. The story is well-stated. The font size is great. The photo fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice work. I mean nice going. I mean good writing.
Dear old Dad might not be too proud, or happy, either one.
I wish you luck in the contest. Best wishes.
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Nice work. I mean nice going. I mean good writing.
Dear old Dad might not be too proud, or happy, either one.
I wish you luck in the contest. Best wishes.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
Comment from Susan Newell
Very good entry for the contest. I'm reserving sixes because I often run out in hours. You can be assured this will be a contender in the contest. It has a good beginning, middle, and end, and is well written in terms of conveying Ray's attitude and thoughts. One "tweaking" note follows.
Sue
but he only seemed to have one -- better as: he seemed to have only one arm
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Very good entry for the contest. I'm reserving sixes because I often run out in hours. You can be assured this will be a contender in the contest. It has a good beginning, middle, and end, and is well written in terms of conveying Ray's attitude and thoughts. One "tweaking" note follows.
Sue
but he only seemed to have one -- better as: he seemed to have only one arm
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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I am most appreciative of your generous review and the improvement to my poorly-expressed line. Thank you.
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Welcome.
Comment from RodG
What an excellent example of what this prompt was asking for. I especially like your opening paragraph where you introduce Ray, explaining WHY he'd taken the course and his hopes. Good description of what he observed and how he reacted. And a terrific ironical ending. I loved this story. Rod
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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What an excellent example of what this prompt was asking for. I especially like your opening paragraph where you introduce Ray, explaining WHY he'd taken the course and his hopes. Good description of what he observed and how he reacted. And a terrific ironical ending. I loved this story. Rod
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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I always feel particularly honoured when YOU award a 6 rating to something I write, Rod. Thank you very much!
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My pleasure.
Comment from Crystal McNeil
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece. The poor kid! It is well written and I really liked the unique twist. Very well done. Good luck with the contest!
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece. The poor kid! It is well written and I really liked the unique twist. Very well done. Good luck with the contest!
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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I appreciate your generous review very much. Thank you!
