Entrapped
a 5-7-5 poem31 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Where have you been? Haven't read a post of yours, and I have you earmarked, for some time. Hope you have been well, and perhaps on a round-the-world cruise. This is good.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Where have you been? Haven't read a post of yours, and I have you earmarked, for some time. Hope you have been well, and perhaps on a round-the-world cruise. This is good.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hi Tom. Thank you for your lovely and concerned review. I am fine. So glad to know you are watching for me. I always feel among friends on FS. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
Good to see you back, Melissa! You must have been busy with all your summer gardening and apparently, reading according to this poem! Loved the internal rhyming of "cap" and "trap."
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Good to see you back, Melissa! You must have been busy with all your summer gardening and apparently, reading according to this poem! Loved the internal rhyming of "cap" and "trap."
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hi Helen. Thanks so much for your lovely words!!!
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have wasted hours reading, especially on holiday and my husband would complain that I was zoned out and in another world instead of being in the present on holiday, but I used to love lying on the beach reading, your words here reminded me of those times. Much enjoyed Melissa, I love the 1920s photograph too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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I have wasted hours reading, especially on holiday and my husband would complain that I was zoned out and in another world instead of being in the present on holiday, but I used to love lying on the beach reading, your words here reminded me of those times. Much enjoyed Melissa, I love the 1920s photograph too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hey there Dolly. Thanks for sharing that tidbit of a story about your husband. I can relate LOL. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this creative tribute to BOOKS! I especially like to see well-chosen five-syllable words in a 5-7-5. Good choice for line 3
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this creative tribute to BOOKS! I especially like to see well-chosen five-syllable words in a 5-7-5. Good choice for line 3
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
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Hi Janice. Thank you so much for your lovely words and review. Hope you are well!!!
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent satori with a delightful juxtaposition about reading books and imagination. I love the imagery of. I like the presentation too. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent satori with a delightful juxtaposition about reading books and imagination. I love the imagery of. I like the presentation too. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Hello Gypsy. Thanks so much!! I feel like my writing is a bit 'sketchy', but hopefully, I will get back to my groove... LOL. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from RodG
I think anyone addicted to reading feels as you do--captivated. Why do we write, but to capture the imaginations of our readers? I love the photo you chose to accompany this shortie. Rod
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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I think anyone addicted to reading feels as you do--captivated. Why do we write, but to capture the imaginations of our readers? I love the photo you chose to accompany this shortie. Rod
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much, Rod!! I appreciate and agree with your point :)
Melissa
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My pleasure.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
SUGAR RAY!!! Sooooo good to read your work again!! I have missed you terribly! And this poem is a perfect example of why: sweet, succinct, and memorable...for all the right reasons!! (I also love the pic you found to accentuate it.) Wonderful entry. I hope it does great in the polls. xo
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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SUGAR RAY!!! Sooooo good to read your work again!! I have missed you terribly! And this poem is a perfect example of why: sweet, succinct, and memorable...for all the right reasons!! (I also love the pic you found to accentuate it.) Wonderful entry. I hope it does great in the polls. xo
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Hello Rachelle. Thanks for your lovely review and friendship. I hope to be back to writing and mixing ideas with you all as soon as possible. I feel my writing has become a bit 'sketchy', but hopefully will get back into a groove soon. :). Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from royowen
Hi Melissa, haven't seen you for awhile. This is a lovely post, I just read a poem on old radio listening, it bought back happy memories, when young I read a lot more than now. Beautifully written my friend well done blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Hi Melissa, haven't seen you for awhile. This is a lovely post, I just read a poem on old radio listening, it bought back happy memories, when young I read a lot more than now. Beautifully written my friend well done blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Hello Roy... thank you... I also read Robyn's poem about the radio and could feel the lovely nostalgia in her writing. So appreciate you!!
Melissa
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Bless you Melissa
Comment from Mark D. R.
Melissa,
Yep, 100% agree with your sentiment. You chose good artwork to complement your verse. You did satisfy the 5-7-5, but honestly it was forced. The 'me' looked out of place. As a sentence, as written, your poem makes complete sense.
Consider alternative text, e.g.,
good books capture me
enflaming my libido (or, inner self)--
imagination
Mark
good books
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Melissa,
Yep, 100% agree with your sentiment. You chose good artwork to complement your verse. You did satisfy the 5-7-5, but honestly it was forced. The 'me' looked out of place. As a sentence, as written, your poem makes complete sense.
Consider alternative text, e.g.,
good books capture me
enflaming my libido (or, inner self)--
imagination
Mark
good books
Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thanks Mark... I reworked the verse and made it flow better... made the satori the first line, even though this isn't a Haiku. Thank you.
Melissa
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Agreed, it reads better now: Haiku satori or not (-;
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Thanks Mark... I reworked the verse and made it flow better... made the satori the first line, even though this isn't a Haiku. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from jessizero
This 5-7-5 poem was a good one! I think that, as writers, we can all relate to loving the written word. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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This 5-7-5 poem was a good one! I think that, as writers, we can all relate to loving the written word. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
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Thank you Jess.
Melissa
