Reflections
we all like to believe what we are. But are we?27 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Barry,
HAHAHA! I think we have this tendency maybe a LITTLE more when we're younger? I think as we age, we start to figure out that our hopeful thoughts don't always transition to the real world. hahaha!!
Nice - and fun! Thanks!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Barry,
HAHAHA! I think we have this tendency maybe a LITTLE more when we're younger? I think as we age, we start to figure out that our hopeful thoughts don't always transition to the real world. hahaha!!
Nice - and fun! Thanks!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Ha Ha, you are correct about the tendency being when we are younger. But we really do not know a lot about life when we are younger. We are soon taught and attitudes change. Take care and thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words above the title are thought provoking! I find these
words interesting, descriptive and creative. I pondered on these words
and thought about if this description is both outside one and also within? The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome! Great Poem!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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The author's words above the title are thought provoking! I find these
words interesting, descriptive and creative. I pondered on these words
and thought about if this description is both outside one and also within? The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome! Great Poem!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. It was interesting to write.Glad you enjoyed it. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from GWHARGIS
How very true. And yet, very rarely do I understand what they see in me. Because they see only what I allow and I know what lies beneath. Gripping poem that makes one reflect on how they are perceived. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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How very true. And yet, very rarely do I understand what they see in me. Because they see only what I allow and I know what lies beneath. Gripping poem that makes one reflect on how they are perceived. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks Gretchen. Glad you enjoyed it and I muat say I enjoyed putting it together. You have a great day. Take care
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from Julie G1
Well done, effective use of rhyming. The graphic also worked well for this reader. Good choice of vocabulary to express the meaning, clear and succinct. I hope you keep on writing for poet's glory.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Well done, effective use of rhyming. The graphic also worked well for this reader. Good choice of vocabulary to express the meaning, clear and succinct. I hope you keep on writing for poet's glory.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Julie,
Thanks for such a positive review. I enjoyed putting it together. I hope you have a wonderful day. Take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great picture for the post. To me, the poem is making the protagonist out to be a pure narcissist OR it is portraying him as living behind a mask or facade. The tear in the picture may signify that he is troubled and lonely behind his facade.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Great picture for the post. To me, the poem is making the protagonist out to be a pure narcissist OR it is portraying him as living behind a mask or facade. The tear in the picture may signify that he is troubled and lonely behind his facade.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem.Glad you enjoyed it. I like the way you think about the tear aspect of the illustration.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from lancellot
This is nicely made. I enjoyed. Just a few suggestions. See how they feel to you.
notes:
Cool, nonchalant,debonair
He was supreme,magnificent!
-watch your coma spacing-
Cool, nonchalant, and debonair
He was supremely magnificent!
He felt like ten foot tall.
-It felt like he was ten feet tall
He reflects on this, and more beside
In the mirror on the wall.
-His reflection clouded women's eyes
Even the mirror on the wall.
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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This is nicely made. I enjoyed. Just a few suggestions. See how they feel to you.
notes:
Cool, nonchalant,debonair
He was supreme,magnificent!
-watch your coma spacing-
Cool, nonchalant, and debonair
He was supremely magnificent!
He felt like ten foot tall.
-It felt like he was ten feet tall
He reflects on this, and more beside
In the mirror on the wall.
-His reflection clouded women's eyes
Even the mirror on the wall.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Also, I like your suggestions and will consider them in any editing I may do.I enjoyed putting it together.
Take care and have a great day
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
haha. That last line made me laugh out loud. I loved this. I thought the description of your poem were terrific. You do a great job of painting a picture even if it is only in his mind. Wonderful word choices. A creative post!
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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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haha. That last line made me laugh out loud. I loved this. I thought the description of your poem were terrific. You do a great job of painting a picture even if it is only in his mind. Wonderful word choices. A creative post!
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Michael,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. I know I was like this when I was younger. Glad you enjoyed the read.Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
