Staying alive
Good title, Michael10 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
I guess, we just need to keep our eyes on the African Violet if we want to get treated and survive a heart attack. LOL. Save the plants will be my new bumper sticker. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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I guess, we just need to keep our eyes on the African Violet if we want to get treated and survive a heart attack. LOL. Save the plants will be my new bumper sticker. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Lol. Not sure it works in real life! I have lost several African violets, they are quite fussy! But I am still hanging around.
Thanks for reviewing. Appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
What a remarkable story, Wendy! And I was really worried that Jenny was going to die which would have made the plant to be a bad omen. But in her case, it seemed to have the gift of prophecy and one that can be needed! Congratulations on the win!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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What a remarkable story, Wendy! And I was really worried that Jenny was going to die which would have made the plant to be a bad omen. But in her case, it seemed to have the gift of prophecy and one that can be needed! Congratulations on the win!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much for your lovely words and congratulations - and the stunning image you inserted. I love it! Hugs to you.
Wendy
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the contest. The text is large and easy to read. The message is clear with a supernatural vein running from the beginning to end of the story. It reads almost like a supernatural themed story. I am glad Jenny did not die. You have a good entry. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This is a good entry to the contest. The text is large and easy to read. The message is clear with a supernatural vein running from the beginning to end of the story. It reads almost like a supernatural themed story. I am glad Jenny did not die. You have a good entry. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much Sandra. I am glad you enjoyed it.
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You are welcome.
Comment from jessizero
This was an excellent story. I am glad that Jenny and the plant both survived and recovered. Thank you so much for sharing your well-written story here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This was an excellent story. I am glad that Jenny and the plant both survived and recovered. Thank you so much for sharing your well-written story here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you Jessi! Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"The flowers falling off" may read better as the flowers fell off.
The grandmother dying five days later a jolt out of the blue. So was her mother dying. Perhaps the violet was garnishing revenge for not being left alone?
Seemed all is well that ended well though.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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"The flowers falling off" may read better as the flowers fell off.
The grandmother dying five days later a jolt out of the blue. So was her mother dying. Perhaps the violet was garnishing revenge for not being left alone?
Seemed all is well that ended well though.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful review. Much appreciated.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Wendy, what a creative imagination you have in addition to your superb writing skills. I enjoyed this story although I admit I was getting a bit nervous as I read through understanding that the dying african violet had some kind of sixth sense regarding death. Thanks for the happy ending :)
Gale
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Wendy, what a creative imagination you have in addition to your superb writing skills. I enjoyed this story although I admit I was getting a bit nervous as I read through understanding that the dying african violet had some kind of sixth sense regarding death. Thanks for the happy ending :)
Gale
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much Gale, for a lovely review - and I am glad you enjoyed the story!
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You are so welcome :)
Comment from GWHARGIS
This had a paranormal flavor to it. Not overtly paranormal but a hint. It was a good story. Two suggestions. You don't need the section about Jenny's house having indoor plants and then her mom and grandmother having the same. You already established Jenny is a third generation plant lover. And second, put more of the tactile details in when talking about the African violet. The velvety leaves , the smell of the dirt when it's watered. It would put the reader right there. I did really like your story. Good luck in the contest.
Gretchen
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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This had a paranormal flavor to it. Not overtly paranormal but a hint. It was a good story. Two suggestions. You don't need the section about Jenny's house having indoor plants and then her mom and grandmother having the same. You already established Jenny is a third generation plant lover. And second, put more of the tactile details in when talking about the African violet. The velvety leaves , the smell of the dirt when it's watered. It would put the reader right there. I did really like your story. Good luck in the contest.
Gretchen
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you Gretchen! You are exactly right, and I have incorporated those changes, and appreciate your thoughtful reading and review, as well as the good wishes.
Comment from Thomas Blanks
Nice story - similar to stories we used to see on black and white TV shows in the 1960s like "One Step Beyond" or "Outer Limits," maybe "Twilight Zone."
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Nice story - similar to stories we used to see on black and white TV shows in the 1960s like "One Step Beyond" or "Outer Limits," maybe "Twilight Zone."
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for reviewing. Interestingly, I have never seen any of those shows!
Comment from RodG
An intriguing story you have told here of an African violet that forecast death. Fortunately Jenny recognized the "signs" in time to save her own life. I just lost a small African violet. I hope that's not foreboding. Rod
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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An intriguing story you have told here of an African violet that forecast death. Fortunately Jenny recognized the "signs" in time to save her own life. I just lost a small African violet. I hope that's not foreboding. Rod
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Lol. I?m sure you?ll be okay. I have lost many African violets in the past - they are quite fussy. But I?m still here! They?ll thrive when everything suits them, otherwise ?.
I appreciate your time and review.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is an interesting story. I love how you put Jenny's flower together with the lives of this family. It's a great idea and this was enjoyable. I could see this part of a larger story - a novel even - as it's a creative idea. Great job! An enjoyable story!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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This is an interesting story. I love how you put Jenny's flower together with the lives of this family. It's a great idea and this was enjoyable. I could see this part of a larger story - a novel even - as it's a creative idea. Great job! An enjoyable story!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much. Very encouraging comments!
