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Old Writers

Rhyming quatrains

44 total reviews 
Comment from Carol Clark2
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This is lovely. So sorry I missed reading it earlier. I like the dawn robed in velvet spring and night wind robed in indigo. Beautiful descriptions! I like the flow of ink on paper, but also appreciate the convenience and speed of my computer. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
    Hello Carol... thank you so much for your lovely review!! So glad you like it.

    Melissa
Comment from nomi338
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Old writers are able to write stories and poems that matter. Why, because our experiences give us something of interest to write about. Having vast life experiences, we have a much broader area to pull from than someone who cannot even legally vote or buy an alcoholic drink. Old writers are the very best writers by and large. An older writer with nothing of interest to write about has led a life of wasted opportunities.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    Thank you for this wise and insightful review. I really appreciate your comments on my verse :)

    Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
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Hi Melissa,
Surely you don't fall into the "Old Writers" category.
You're such a talented writer. I enjoyed your Autumn-themed poem very much. I especially enjoyed these lines,
"like autumn colors bleeding red
and sunshine's warmth on graying heads."
and,
"wild geese on misty ponds take wing;
how Night Wind's robed in indigo"
and,
"refreshing souls with sips of light ~
awakened whispers of the night."
Repeating the first two lines to finish off the poem is quite effective.
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    hello dear kb.... so glad you stopped by to give it a glance. I always value your opinion on my work. Thank you so much and a great big hug!!

    Melissa
Comment from Heather Knight
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Hi Melissa,
I think I hadn't read you for quite a while and it's a great pleasure.
Your poems (including this one) always contain some wonderful insights.
I've just reread it and apart from the subject matter, your words are beautiful and always in the right place. I don't know if I have explained very well...
Take care.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    Hello Maria... thank you so very much for your lovely review. I am so glad you enjoyed it. So good to reconnect!! I have been away for a while too and it feels so good to write again. :)

    Melissa
reply by Heather Knight on 05-Oct-2022
    How are you doing?
    Writing is like breathing for us, the problem is I usually have no time at all.
    In fact, I'm on sick leave at the moment because of work-related anxiety.
    I miss my students, but the local government keeps on adding pressure and making up stupid tasks for us to fulfill. Unnecessary read tape. My Principal doesn't help either... After last course, my hair fell out. Now I look like a soldier. I hope to get back to work soon.Fingers crossed.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    I remember you sharing a bit about your difficulties and how stressful your work is at this time. I am so sorry about that and hope your writing will help you vent and let off some steam. Just sit back and let the words heal you :). Hugs, sweet friend!! M
reply by Heather Knight on 05-Oct-2022
    Thanks, Melissa. It's a pity. I've been teaching EFL ever since I was 21 and I'm 58 now. My friends never understood my enthusiasm, but I love English and I love people so it's the perfect combination.
    I wouldn't like my last two courses to be spoiled like this.
    Thanks for your advice.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
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This is a beautiful poem. They rhyming that you used, and the imagery created by the descriptions that you use. I have read other poems but this stays with me. I like the way that you tell a story in this poem, and especially all of the descriptive words. I can picture the snowflakes that you talk about, and the glistening of winter, to me of winter snow. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    Hello Jacquelyn. Thank you so very much for your lovely review and comments on my verse. I so appreciate your point of view ... it encourages me :)

    Melissa
Comment from Fleedleflump
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Us white guys in their middle age
just grapple with the hope and rage
of understanding breaking through
the crust that youth's demise imbues
upon our bodies and our minds -
seems so unfair, this poor design
that gifts the young with energy
and steals the wise of clarity

and so, we fall on poetry
to unify us

hopefully

I very much enjoyed your poem :-)

Mike

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    Oh Mike, what a wonderful poem to use as a review. Awesome craftsmanship, my friend. Thank you so much for using it as your comments!! Loved it!

    Melissa
reply by Fleedleflump on 05-Oct-2022
    Your poem inspired me :-). I haven't been writing for a few weeks, so it's coming out in other ways.

    Mike
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are a lovely describing the colorful beauty of autumn!
I found each stanza expressed with details and a glimpse of the winter
ahead. The author's words flow and connect well. The artwork is
awesome and compliments these words.
Hope you are doing well, Melissa.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    Hello sweet Maria. Thank you so very much for your lovely words and comments. I so appreciate you and your thoughts!! Hugs!! P.s. I am doing well!

    Melissa
Comment from Frank Malley
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"Old Writers" is an excellent poem about the gifts experienced writers give to those who read them. The author uses a number of reverently expressed images to represent what older writers can present to us. The gentle tone the poem achieves through its choice of liquid words is comforting like a fireplace's glow. In stanza two, I prefer 'How since they've come to beguiled' captures the passage of time better.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    Hello Frank. Thank you so very much for your lovely words and comments. I am so happy you liked it!!

    Melissa
reply by Frank Malley on 05-Oct-2022
    Hello, Melissa. You're welcome. As an old writer, I appreciate any commendatory remarks sent toward me and my peers in the pen.
Comment from karenina
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I adore every line of this poem.

It's quietly reflective and brings such serenity...

Your AABB rhyme is impeccable.

Nothing but a six will do!

I'm so blessed to be reading this at 3:18 AM -

It's the perfect poem to take with me to dreamland!

Bravo!

Karenina-

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    Hi Karenina... I am thrilled that you liked this verse!! and, I am eternally grateful that you did so at 3:18. LOL~. Hope it sent you off for a visit to the Sandman :). Thank you so much!

    Melissa
reply by karenina on 06-Oct-2022
    Best sleep in weeks!

    (smile)
Comment from Liz Westfall
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This was a gorgeous poem. The imagery you created was lovely. I really loved your word choice and the flow. I also think the picture you chose was perfect and captured the energy of the poem. Nice job!

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
    Hello Liz. Thank you so much for your lovely thoughts and comments. I so appreciate your review!!

    Melissa