Old Writers
Rhyming quatrains44 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-You wrote an excellent poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the theme of "old writers" and the repetition
of the opening lines at the end.
-Very good nature imagery with "autumn colors"
and "crisp snowflakes."
-My favorite line is "how Night Wind's robed in indigo."
-Thanks for sharing this and have a good day and good week ahead!!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-You wrote an excellent poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the theme of "old writers" and the repetition
of the opening lines at the end.
-Very good nature imagery with "autumn colors"
and "crisp snowflakes."
-My favorite line is "how Night Wind's robed in indigo."
-Thanks for sharing this and have a good day and good week ahead!!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you, sweet friend, for your lovely review. I am very happy that you like it. Have a marvelous Monday, dear Pam. :)
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa. You wrote a lovely poem. You have a great Monday, too. We have been having a lot of rain ):
Comment from Paul McFarland
Ah, you wrote a poem about me, Melissa. How nice. Very good job with rhyme and meter. The couplet at the end is really nice, and it finishes things off effectively.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Ah, you wrote a poem about me, Melissa. How nice. Very good job with rhyme and meter. The couplet at the end is really nice, and it finishes things off effectively.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you so very much, Paul. I am delighted you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
Being a not so young writer myself, I appreciated this pleasant piece of iambic tetrameter's ability to create some delightful images.
I am only concerned that you seem to believe that we can only afford one pen between all off us. I know our pensions are insufficient but shouldn't we take our plural pens in hand?
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Being a not so young writer myself, I appreciated this pleasant piece of iambic tetrameter's ability to create some delightful images.
I am only concerned that you seem to believe that we can only afford one pen between all off us. I know our pensions are insufficient but shouldn't we take our plural pens in hand?
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I KNEW, just KNEW you would catch that intentional slip. No one else has mentioned it. LOL. I think by making it plural that it changes the entire flavor of the verse. I don't know why, but it seems to be a game changer for fluidity and flow. So, wise instructor, I plan to leave it be and hope for the best. btw, how is it going with the scholarship/Minute for Newbies. Any takers? I do plan to sign up for the class after I see how many others need the spots first. Lisa said she planned to take the class too. Thanks so much for your comments on this one!! :)
Melissa
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That is entirely your prerogative. There places where it works and places where I felt it didn't. Strange that,
The contest for the scholarship is a site contest so I don't know yet how many entrants we have. There are still 16 days to the deadline. Lisa has bought her seat. I had a pleasant surprise winning the first chapter contest because the bottom has fallen out of sterling and my dollars bought me a lot more pounds than usual - buy British!
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Hahaha... so glad the financial crisis is filling up your member dollars cache. Perhaps it will last through the purchase of seats and you will really have some funny money. LOL. Hugs!
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It's an ill wind that blows no body any good.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a delightful write Melissa, perfectly rhymed and metered and I adore the sentiments too. Your words flow like a dream and this is so melodious. A quality poem from a talented poet. A joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This is a delightful write Melissa, perfectly rhymed and metered and I adore the sentiments too. Your words flow like a dream and this is so melodious. A quality poem from a talented poet. A joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Hi there Dolly. Thank you for your lovely words and encouraging review. I am so happy you liked it!!! :)
Melissa
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A delightful poem to read and imbued with a sense of peace and all being just as it should be.
I feel the chosen image and font add to the calmness and trust depicted in the words.
As an older writer I especially enjoyed the ending couplet.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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A delightful poem to read and imbued with a sense of peace and all being just as it should be.
I feel the chosen image and font add to the calmness and trust depicted in the words.
As an older writer I especially enjoyed the ending couplet.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Hello Shirley... thank you so very much for the lovely review and words of encouragement. I value them!!!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
I suddenly realised I'm an old writer, but I'm not sure about the rest, but there's one thing fo sure Melissa, there are some old home truths that have never died yet, and you have been emphasising them here. This is beautifully written my that's a great repeating refrain taking the first two lines as a couplet for the last. Beautifully written in fine verse, articulate and great flow, and couplet rhyming. well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I suddenly realised I'm an old writer, but I'm not sure about the rest, but there's one thing fo sure Melissa, there are some old home truths that have never died yet, and you have been emphasising them here. This is beautifully written my that's a great repeating refrain taking the first two lines as a couplet for the last. Beautifully written in fine verse, articulate and great flow, and couplet rhyming. well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Hi Roy. I think that you, especially you, are adept at sharing deep truths and wisdom here on FS. Thank you so very much for your lovely review!!
Melissa
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Bless you
Comment from Thomas Blanks
'Old Writers' is a rhyming quatrain poem with elegiac or heroic stanzas using an AABB rhyme scheme. The rhymes are high quality, and iambic pentameter is in effect. Nice job.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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'Old Writers' is a rhyming quatrain poem with elegiac or heroic stanzas using an AABB rhyme scheme. The rhymes are high quality, and iambic pentameter is in effect. Nice job.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Hello Thomas. Thank you so much!!
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
So good to see you posting again, Melissa! This is such a gorgeous poem and it celebrates aging through the seasons and how older writers can share from their experiences in life and enjoy the newness of spring and grandchildren. I like how you wove the old and new, spring and winter altogether here.
My favorite stanza was:
"When dawn is bathed in velvet spring,
wild geese on misty ponds take wing;
how Night Wind's robed in indigo;
with wisdom, their pen tells us so."
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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So good to see you posting again, Melissa! This is such a gorgeous poem and it celebrates aging through the seasons and how older writers can share from their experiences in life and enjoy the newness of spring and grandchildren. I like how you wove the old and new, spring and winter altogether here.
My favorite stanza was:
"When dawn is bathed in velvet spring,
wild geese on misty ponds take wing;
how Night Wind's robed in indigo;
with wisdom, their pen tells us so."
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Hello Helen... hope you are well. Thanks for the lovely words of encouragement!!! I really appreciate your comments and point of view!! Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Theodore McDowell
I love the way you repeat an earlier line as the ending! You know I'm not a big fan of rhyme, but you pulled it off in this poem in a way that didn't feel intrusive. Felt like you were describing this old poet!!!! Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I love the way you repeat an earlier line as the ending! You know I'm not a big fan of rhyme, but you pulled it off in this poem in a way that didn't feel intrusive. Felt like you were describing this old poet!!!! Well done.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Hi Tim. Thank you so very much, my friend. I really value your comments and appreciate you!
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Melissa,
Excellent nature's imagery and nice presentation. The rhymes and meter are great, they don't sound forced. It's true that with age we become better poets and writers...it's all that wisdom and life experience. Well done.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Melissa,
Excellent nature's imagery and nice presentation. The rhymes and meter are great, they don't sound forced. It's true that with age we become better poets and writers...it's all that wisdom and life experience. Well done.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Hi Gypsy. Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments. Aging is definitely a plus when it comes to quality writing. :). So appreciate you!
Melissa
