The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Muddy Drawers"Miranda solves a mystery.
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Comment from Rachelle Allen
HAHAHAHAHAH!! You must get so sick of me starting every review like this, but, honestly, everything about this is so damn FUNNY!!! I laughed SOO HARD at the first sentence!! I knew this was going to be great, and, sure enough, it is. But then, there's that undertow with the knife, and I worry who's going to need it and why and how it will complicate/change his or her life. Oh, what a master storyteller you are, Woman!! You keep me SOOO hooked every single time!!! xo
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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HAHAHAHAHAH!! You must get so sick of me starting every review like this, but, honestly, everything about this is so damn FUNNY!!! I laughed SOO HARD at the first sentence!! I knew this was going to be great, and, sure enough, it is. But then, there's that undertow with the knife, and I worry who's going to need it and why and how it will complicate/change his or her life. Oh, what a master storyteller you are, Woman!! You keep me SOOO hooked every single time!!! xo
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you. I, honestly, have never had a story come to me the way this one is presenting itself. If you're curious to see how I envision Miranda, look up the actress Samantha Ferris. She's older now but that's how I see her. Lol. Anyhow, thank you for this engaging review. Gretchen
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, boys will be boys, right, Gretchen? Miranda seemed to be
the only sane one at the pond that day. Waylon's found a buddy
of sorts, and Aaron's found someone he can impress what little
knowledge of real life he has. You did a great job sharing the
collection of the pond water and discovery of the cars. I could see
more chapters headed in that direction. Miranda showed signs of
a strong woman. I enjoyed your continuing story and wonder what's
next.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Well, boys will be boys, right, Gretchen? Miranda seemed to be
the only sane one at the pond that day. Waylon's found a buddy
of sorts, and Aaron's found someone he can impress what little
knowledge of real life he has. You did a great job sharing the
collection of the pond water and discovery of the cars. I could see
more chapters headed in that direction. Miranda showed signs of
a strong woman. I enjoyed your continuing story and wonder what's
next.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Lol. I'm wondering as well. This thing started as a character study but the response to it was overwhelming. I just dove right in. Thank you so much for this wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Sugarray77
Gretchen, this is fine, fine writing and I love the storyline that you have chosen. Great job on all points and on keeping my complete interest until the end. I really enjoyed reading it.
Melissa
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Gretchen, this is fine, fine writing and I love the storyline that you have chosen. Great job on all points and on keeping my complete interest until the end. I really enjoyed reading it.
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for this great review. Glad you enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really like this story and I like the characters. Aaron is growing on me. He's authentic. This is a good write.
they swim toward the overgrown marshgrass (marsh grass, but here in Texas probably alligators there too)
"Figures," Aaron laughs. (period after 'Figures' laugh isn't a speech tag.)
It just irritates me to no end that men will stand by a damned car but not by their women. (I have a feeling Aaron might be an exception to that rule.)
Aaron leans close to Waylon and I know they're talking about something but I guess they don't want me to know. (comma needed after 'Waylon' and one after 'something')
They look terrible and I'll let you guess how they smell. (comma needed after 'terrible')
e blushes. "We could get it to go," he says . (period after 'go' and omit 'he says')
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I really like this story and I like the characters. Aaron is growing on me. He's authentic. This is a good write.
they swim toward the overgrown marshgrass (marsh grass, but here in Texas probably alligators there too)
"Figures," Aaron laughs. (period after 'Figures' laugh isn't a speech tag.)
It just irritates me to no end that men will stand by a damned car but not by their women. (I have a feeling Aaron might be an exception to that rule.)
Aaron leans close to Waylon and I know they're talking about something but I guess they don't want me to know. (comma needed after 'Waylon' and one after 'something')
They look terrible and I'll let you guess how they smell. (comma needed after 'terrible')
e blushes. "We could get it to go," he says . (period after 'go' and omit 'he says')
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for the grammatical help. I kinda like Aaron as well. But he probably wouldn't be good for Miranda. Lol. Gretchen
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You're probably right about that. But he's a great character.
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Lol. Tried to nominate you for reviewer and it said no. You've already nominated this person. Just know I tried. I really appreciate the help
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Not a problem. Thank you for the thought. I appreciate it.
Comment from Ric Myworld
There is never a dull moment when the good ol' boys get something in their heads, the young and the older one who never grow up. I'm not included of course. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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There is never a dull moment when the good ol' boys get something in their heads, the young and the older one who never grow up. I'm not included of course. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Lol. I can tell you are dignified by your reviews. 😉. Great review and self revolation. Gretchen
Comment from Brett Matthew West
First paragraph provides back story and a good lead-in for what is to come.
Told in colorful lingo such as "Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum" to describe Aaron and Waylon.
Men and cars. She is so right, some men will stand by their car and not their woman.
Interesting to see what will happen next.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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First paragraph provides back story and a good lead-in for what is to come.
Told in colorful lingo such as "Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum" to describe Aaron and Waylon.
Men and cars. She is so right, some men will stand by their car and not their woman.
Interesting to see what will happen next.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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She knows what she's talking about. Especially with men. Thanks so much for the read and review. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
Okay, I'm hooked on this story. You write with wit and clever narrative. I'm drawn into every chapter. The characters Waylon and Aaron are spontaneous, which raises the heat of every moment. Love it! Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Okay, I'm hooked on this story. You write with wit and clever narrative. I'm drawn into every chapter. The characters Waylon and Aaron are spontaneous, which raises the heat of every moment. Love it! Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Awe, thank you so much. I will try not to disappoint. Thank you for the uplifting review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
I've met girls like Miranda, they seem to attract men like Dougie, and despite themselves, they will probably be cursed by young men like Waylon and Aaron, and despite themselves are quite maternal, and probably high quality people, needed by mere males, beautifully written Gretchen. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I've met girls like Miranda, they seem to attract men like Dougie, and despite themselves, they will probably be cursed by young men like Waylon and Aaron, and despite themselves are quite maternal, and probably high quality people, needed by mere males, beautifully written Gretchen. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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There are girls that are called loser magnets. They thrive on drama and the thought that they can "fix" him. Never works in their favor but hope springs eternal. Lol. Thank you for your excellent review. Gretchen
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Yes, it starts at a young age, that?s why young drop kicks get nice girls
Comment from Wendy G
I'm enjoying your story a lot. Poor Miranda. Strong woman, speaks her mind, but has a hare-brained young man and an impressionable teenager to cope with. Vivid writing - I could see them all quite clearly, wet and smelly, and Miranda muttering about their idiocy! Lol.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I'm enjoying your story a lot. Poor Miranda. Strong woman, speaks her mind, but has a hare-brained young man and an impressionable teenager to cope with. Vivid writing - I could see them all quite clearly, wet and smelly, and Miranda muttering about their idiocy! Lol.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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She was one step away from joining them. Not to dive around but to drag them out. Lol. Thank you for this wonderful feedback. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
This is really picking up some momentum, Gretchen. I like the character, Aaron. He does seem immature, to be sure, and speaks before he thinks things through. I was thinking as I read that Aaron never said whether the bodies had ever been recovered from the pond. I'd think an attempt would have been made to recover the bodies ... but then, they were bootleggers. Anyway, you've got my attention!
Jay
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This is really picking up some momentum, Gretchen. I like the character, Aaron. He does seem immature, to be sure, and speaks before he thinks things through. I was thinking as I read that Aaron never said whether the bodies had ever been recovered from the pond. I'd think an attempt would have been made to recover the bodies ... but then, they were bootleggers. Anyway, you've got my attention!
Jay
Comment Written 02-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I'm sure there are some surprises in that sunken car. Not sure about bodies. Lol. Thanks for the awesome feedback. Gretchen
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Well if anyone would know it's you! I'll take that as a negatory!
