A Service Attended
A Can't Miss Opportunity15 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
That was an unexpected ending . I can see why you won first prize. I like surprise at least on paper.
The narrative flowed well.
I want to be cremated and no service in church.
Once pa and I had attended a funeral of friend. Her father had died.
It was in the city of Novara and I was worried we would have trouble finding the church and a place to park.
Oddly we not only found the church minutes after we entered the city ( on the main road) but there was one parking spot vacant right opposite the church . I couldn't believe our luck.
The crowd outside was slowly moving in .. we stayed on the edge and were the second last to reach the entrance .. I was bent down about to write my name in the funeral guestbook at the door when my father said STOP
He pointed to the funeral poster.. the deceased was a woman .. we were at the wrong funeral. Figures.
Turned out that there is two churches in Novara with the same name .
We got back in the car and further up the long busy main road we found the right Santa Maria church .. mass had already started when we walked in.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Ciao!
That was an unexpected ending . I can see why you won first prize. I like surprise at least on paper.
The narrative flowed well.
I want to be cremated and no service in church.
Once pa and I had attended a funeral of friend. Her father had died.
It was in the city of Novara and I was worried we would have trouble finding the church and a place to park.
Oddly we not only found the church minutes after we entered the city ( on the main road) but there was one parking spot vacant right opposite the church . I couldn't believe our luck.
The crowd outside was slowly moving in .. we stayed on the edge and were the second last to reach the entrance .. I was bent down about to write my name in the funeral guestbook at the door when my father said STOP
He pointed to the funeral poster.. the deceased was a woman .. we were at the wrong funeral. Figures.
Turned out that there is two churches in Novara with the same name .
We got back in the car and further up the long busy main road we found the right Santa Maria church .. mass had already started when we walked in.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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That?s funny. I am not requesting a service. Dead is dead. Remember me how you like. 😎
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I don?t want so called family relatives weeping 🐊 tears at my funeral yet now don?t even have the time of day to return a call.
Bill Gates says the next pandemic will be in 2025.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=Qk9Nd4uhJQg
No wonder I can?t sleep☹️
This comment hit the nail:
"The vaccine was not brought in for COVID.
COVID was brought in for the vaccine. Once you realize that, everything else makes sense." ~ Dr. Reiner Fuellmich
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It is scary out there
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
Wow, wow, wow! I am wordless! Your writing reveals a very wealthy message, with only 100 words. Oh and how you connected what no time truly means. Wow
We all use that so often as an excuse. This has true death and meaning. I LOVE IT! You have such a GREAT. UNDUPLICATED TALENT/GIFT from God!
Amen
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Wow, wow, wow! I am wordless! Your writing reveals a very wealthy message, with only 100 words. Oh and how you connected what no time truly means. Wow
We all use that so often as an excuse. This has true death and meaning. I LOVE IT! You have such a GREAT. UNDUPLICATED TALENT/GIFT from God!
Amen
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Goodness. I thank you deeply. Means a great deal. I keep trying. I am a bit clumsy but certainly look forward to the next effort.
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You are so humble. You do not even know how Great your writings are.
Write on My Friend. I did not have any 6 stars left. You definitely deserved 10!
Thank you for sharing your talent!
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One more word, lol. PROUND, You Are!
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Oh my goodness. My arms just populated with excited hair follicles. You are so nice.
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Lol. Remain humble!
Cool fun!
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, that was a surprising ending! And to be at one's funeral affirms life after death as the narrator is clearly noticing all who were there. I also am glad you heard that beautiful song at church per your notes.
Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Oh, that was a surprising ending! And to be at one's funeral affirms life after death as the narrator is clearly noticing all who were there. I also am glad you heard that beautiful song at church per your notes.
Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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That is very nice of you. Thanks so much.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I think since COVID church attendance has gone downhill. I'm not sure why, but I believe it has. Maybe people got out of practice. I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I think since COVID church attendance has gone downhill. I'm not sure why, but I believe it has. Maybe people got out of practice. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Excellent story. You pulled it off in exactly one hundred words! Good work.
I suppose you 'could' say that you were 'compelled' in this case.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Excellent story. You pulled it off in exactly one hundred words! Good work.
I suppose you 'could' say that you were 'compelled' in this case.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Yes, I believe that is correct.
Comment from Dr. Von
I like your brave story. Imagination is vital to writing a solid storyline. Good job setting up the reader for the surprise ending. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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I like your brave story. Imagination is vital to writing a solid storyline. Good job setting up the reader for the surprise ending. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much.
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You are welcome.
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It tied for first. Very pleased!
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Good on you.
Comment from lancellot
Oh... so this guy is dead, and his ghost just appeared in church for his funeral. I see. This is a flash fiction sort of entry. Very interesting.
I think this will do well in the contest. It is different.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Oh... so this guy is dead, and his ghost just appeared in church for his funeral. I see. This is a flash fiction sort of entry. Very interesting.
I think this will do well in the contest. It is different.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Nice. Thank you. You are correct about death.
Comment from Wendy G
A very clever entry, and well written. The only thing I would change is the word "seated" as, if it was your funeral, you wouldn't be seated, but lying in a casket or coffin. To make up for subtracting a word you could add "as" before "it was my funeral". Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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A very clever entry, and well written. The only thing I would change is the word "seated" as, if it was your funeral, you wouldn't be seated, but lying in a casket or coffin. To make up for subtracting a word you could add "as" before "it was my funeral". Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Good idea. Thanks.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry read well, Mystery Author, except for the
incomplete second sentence. You set up the ending well. It
was unexpected. Your notes were informative. I believe many
readers enjoy an image with the works they review. However,
I know that's your choice.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Your contest entry read well, Mystery Author, except for the
incomplete second sentence. You set up the ending well. It
was unexpected. Your notes were informative. I believe many
readers enjoy an image with the works they review. However,
I know that's your choice.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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I haven't figured that process out yet. Thanks for the note.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
-Excellent poem entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt contest.
- it's pretty scary
-Nice presentation and picture.
-Your descriptive words flow well expressing a clear mental image. Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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-Excellent poem entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt contest.
- it's pretty scary
-Nice presentation and picture.
-Your descriptive words flow well expressing a clear mental image. Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Your insights are appreciated.
