I Think I'm One-ing With You
A caveman Ohmie and May story.6 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
I like your new word. It ties in with the marriage ceremony where "the two shall become one". Your story shows what "one-ing" is all about. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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I like your new word. It ties in with the marriage ceremony where "the two shall become one". Your story shows what "one-ing" is all about. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
This shows such dedication to your characters that you bring them to present what love is. But for May and Ohmie, it doesn't stay at an infatuation level, it grows to deep love and "oneness." I like the way you have them reminisce and keep them moving while talking.
Best wishes in the contest!
she had no real business trapsing that direction. (traipsing)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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This shows such dedication to your characters that you bring them to present what love is. But for May and Ohmie, it doesn't stay at an infatuation level, it grows to deep love and "oneness." I like the way you have them reminisce and keep them moving while talking.
Best wishes in the contest!
she had no real business trapsing that direction. (traipsing)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
And thanks for the catch.
Comment from jessizero
This was a wonderful story! I fell in love with the story as they expressed their love for each other. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This was a wonderful story! I fell in love with the story as they expressed their love for each other. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you!
And thank you for the six stars!
Comment from royowen
What a sweet story, when Ohmie and May became "one". I love these stories, it reminds me of a childhood crush I had many years ago, such an innocent time, among my later, "not so innocent" times later. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : A sideways gla(n)ce at May.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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What a sweet story, when Ohmie and May became "one". I love these stories, it reminds me of a childhood crush I had many years ago, such an innocent time, among my later, "not so innocent" times later. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : A sideways gla(n)ce at May.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
I sometimes think Advanced Editor plays with my spelling/typos.
smiley face here
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Of course?what else? Heh heh
Comment from irishauthorme
Interesting story.
I liked the exchange between May and Ohmie, typical of young people trying to find each other, and themselves.
I wondered about the teaching of letters and numbers, considering the primitive setting.
Good conclusion, satifying.
irish
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Interesting story.
I liked the exchange between May and Ohmie, typical of young people trying to find each other, and themselves.
I wondered about the teaching of letters and numbers, considering the primitive setting.
Good conclusion, satifying.
irish
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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My 'School Daze' story. (fiction)
Thank you for the review.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very sweet and well written story about Ohmie and May. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words and the art work you used. This is a very good entry for the New Word for Falling in Love. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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This is a very sweet and well written story about Ohmie and May. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words and the art work you used. This is a very good entry for the New Word for Falling in Love. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 03-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
And thank you for the review.
