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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
This picture looks almost like a fantasy seen. If it is raining and the sky is really that green then I think she should run for her real house. A green sky usually means a tornado is on its way.
I think it should be pit-a-pat.
Also, for some trees and leaves would be slant or partial rhyme.
Cool new form
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Hi MariVal,
This picture looks almost like a fantasy seen. If it is raining and the sky is really that green then I think she should run for her real house. A green sky usually means a tornado is on its way.
I think it should be pit-a-pat.
Also, for some trees and leaves would be slant or partial rhyme.
Cool new form
Joan
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Joan. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. I corrected the error :)
Gypsy hugs
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You're most kindly welcome, MariVal.
Joan
Comment from Heather Knight
Hi there,
As usual, you've done great. Maybe one day I'll be brave enough to post one of this.
I like the onomatopoeia, I've always thought it's more fun in English than in Spanish.
The topic is also great. I never had a tree house (we lived in a flat), but I always dreamt of having one.
When my kids were little, I remember reading Magic Tree House to them.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Hi there,
As usual, you've done great. Maybe one day I'll be brave enough to post one of this.
I like the onomatopoeia, I've always thought it's more fun in English than in Spanish.
The topic is also great. I never had a tree house (we lived in a flat), but I always dreamt of having one.
When my kids were little, I remember reading Magic Tree House to them.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Heather. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. You can write Japanese poetry, I have faith in you. :) I never had a tree house but I would love to have one.
Gypsy hugs
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Me too, even now. And it'd be possible because now I have a garden.
But I think I'll have to make do with a shed.
Or maybe when I have grandchildren, it will provide a great excuse to convince my husband ;)
And thanks for believing in me.
Comment from royowen
Do you think of the tree house, I think that's the child in you, there's something about living in a tree house, which was a part of my childhood that still appeals to me today. Beautifully written, Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Do you think of the tree house, I think that's the child in you, there's something about living in a tree house, which was a part of my childhood that still appeals to me today. Beautifully written, Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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I would have loved a tree house when I was little. I made houses where I could... dug-out holes in the ground (when farmers prepared the ground for trees), crates, boxes, sheets tents, etc.
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Thomas Blanks
I used to have a tree house, and I stayed in it in the rain. I lined it with plastic sheeting that I got out of the dumpster at a carpet store down the block. Mom yelled, "Come in out of that rain!" I yelled back, "I ain't in the rain. My tree house is dry!" Thank you for the memories. Thomas
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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I used to have a tree house, and I stayed in it in the rain. I lined it with plastic sheeting that I got out of the dumpster at a carpet store down the block. Mom yelled, "Come in out of that rain!" I yelled back, "I ain't in the rain. My tree house is dry!" Thank you for the memories. Thomas
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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I'm glad it brought you good memories, Thomas. Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Sugarray77
A lovely and fantastical read, Gypsy. The artwork is perfect for setting up the poem and lending a bit of whimsy to your verse. I enjoyed your use of onomatopoeia as it brought sound alive in my head. :). Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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A lovely and fantastical read, Gypsy. The artwork is perfect for setting up the poem and lending a bit of whimsy to your verse. I enjoyed your use of onomatopoeia as it brought sound alive in my head. :). Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Melissa,
Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Part of our poetry unit in first grade was to write a poem using sounds. My first graders didn't do so well with it. I feel partly because there weren't a lot of child friendly poems to illustrate that to them. This one would have been perfect.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Part of our poetry unit in first grade was to write a poem using sounds. My first graders didn't do so well with it. I feel partly because there weren't a lot of child friendly poems to illustrate that to them. This one would have been perfect.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Barbara, I like playing with word sounds. It was fun. (*<>*)
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a really good ekphrastic poem. The artwork is magical as one can imagine how nice to be inside a tree house.
Your good us of onomatopoeia makes the rain a friend visitor and it is most gentle and polite.
Much enjoyed.
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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This is a really good ekphrastic poem. The artwork is magical as one can imagine how nice to be inside a tree house.
Your good us of onomatopoeia makes the rain a friend visitor and it is most gentle and polite.
Much enjoyed.
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Gloria. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
MariVal ❤️
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". -- Novalis
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your onomatopoeic poem in your ekphrastic cinquain tanka! I certainly helps us feel and see and hear what it must be like being in that treehouse when it rains.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Enjoyed your onomatopoeic poem in your ekphrastic cinquain tanka! I certainly helps us feel and see and hear what it must be like being in that treehouse when it rains.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Big sister, thank you very much for your time and kind review, helpfull feedback.
Marival ❤️
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and very well written Cinquain Tanka (Ekphrastic). You used very good descriptive words and amazing imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, teri
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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and very well written Cinquain Tanka (Ekphrastic). You used very good descriptive words and amazing imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, teri
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Teri. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". -- Novalis
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your new type of poem- excellent idea- Excellent picture presentation- built a tree house for my kids in the big almond tree- never looked like this - wow! Poem flows very well in the new format- has a kind of musical quality I enjoy- reminds of my time in the jungle- wet noises- good job with supporting notes as well- nice job
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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I like your new type of poem- excellent idea- Excellent picture presentation- built a tree house for my kids in the big almond tree- never looked like this - wow! Poem flows very well in the new format- has a kind of musical quality I enjoy- reminds of my time in the jungle- wet noises- good job with supporting notes as well- nice job
Comment Written 04-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Yes, this picture of tree house is fantasy i found in devientart.comThank you very much, ap. I appreciate that you took the time to read my poem. Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review!
Gypsy "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". -- Novalis
