The Aged
Short verse31 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
Your poem is the most meaningful. We need trees so much. Your poem enlightens, followed the rules, and is topped with a unique picture. You really have a wonderful presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Your poem is the most meaningful. We need trees so much. Your poem enlightens, followed the rules, and is topped with a unique picture. You really have a wonderful presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review!!
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your rhyming 1-6-1 poem!! I like that you illustrated the poem with that famous ancient pine tree. We humans also can be bent by life's changing winds. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Great job with your rhyming 1-6-1 poem!! I like that you illustrated the poem with that famous ancient pine tree. We humans also can be bent by life's changing winds. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you sweet Helen for your lovely comments... although, it is a juniper tree (juniperus cypressacaea)... wouldn't you love to press and dry one of those??? !!! Hugs!
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Oh! I thought it was the famous Bristlecone pine tree that one that's name Methuselah. Thanks for the tree information! I'm back home now and can see better than on my phone.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Yes, people will comment on how great someone older looks for their age. They may look great on the outside, but the body feels the pains, the sore joints and the back. I just hope I do not bend over like that tree, lol. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Yes, people will comment on how great someone older looks for their age. They may look great on the outside, but the body feels the pains, the sore joints and the back. I just hope I do not bend over like that tree, lol. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you Carolyn. I hope I don't bend over either ~ whew! Glad you liked this short verse :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from karenina
Interesting image! I find these 1-6-1 forms very difficult so here's to you for jumping into the contest...
I always though of distend as "to boost not swell" -- maybe that's my RN training...
(smile)
Sure enough, it's a synonym for stretch so "pfft" to medical training!
You message is wise.
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Interesting image! I find these 1-6-1 forms very difficult so here's to you for jumping into the contest...
I always though of distend as "to boost not swell" -- maybe that's my RN training...
(smile)
Sure enough, it's a synonym for stretch so "pfft" to medical training!
You message is wise.
Karenina
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thanks so very much!!
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You're welcome!
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your poetry. It's beautifully written. Well done. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your poetry. It's beautifully written. Well done. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much!
Comment from nomi338
Increasing age may cause us to bend, totter when we walk, stand unsteadily, dimly see the things we look at, struggle to completely and clearly hear words directed toward us. We the aged deal with all of these challenges. Despite this we are still here, even mourning the demise of some young enough to be our grandchildren. Consider this the next time you make fun of an oldster.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Increasing age may cause us to bend, totter when we walk, stand unsteadily, dimly see the things we look at, struggle to completely and clearly hear words directed toward us. We the aged deal with all of these challenges. Despite this we are still here, even mourning the demise of some young enough to be our grandchildren. Consider this the next time you make fun of an oldster.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Liz Westfall
I didn't realize there were so many kinds of syllable-based poems. 2-4-2, 1-6-1.. This was perfect. The picture and the poem are so closely paired. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I didn't realize there were so many kinds of syllable-based poems. 2-4-2, 1-6-1.. This was perfect. The picture and the poem are so closely paired. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much Liz!!
Comment from Sanku
You have managed to infuse a lot of meaning into a short verse of 1-6-1. Old soul distends,bends is a hard hitting image .all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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You have managed to infuse a lot of meaning into a short verse of 1-6-1. Old soul distends,bends is a hard hitting image .all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Sanku!
Comment from Michael Cassar
Powerful symbolism. Picture portrays beauty of the well endowed old tree, bowing to the strength of winds. Similar process the human body follows as the forces of aging blow in its direction
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Powerful symbolism. Picture portrays beauty of the well endowed old tree, bowing to the strength of winds. Similar process the human body follows as the forces of aging blow in its direction
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Michael!
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Mu pleasure
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the rhyme.
-Effective imagery describes the impact of
the winds on this tree.
-Good use of personification with "old soul."
-Good opening and closing lines, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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-Good image and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the rhyme.
-Effective imagery describes the impact of
the winds on this tree.
-Good use of personification with "old soul."
-Good opening and closing lines, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much sweet Pam!
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You are very welcome.
