The Aged
Short verse31 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is a lovely, amazing picture, and I can say exactly the same words for your 1-6-1 poem. I don't think I've ever read one of these small poems that works so well, with so few words as yours has. Very well done! Good luck in the contest. I think it's a winner. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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That is a lovely, amazing picture, and I can say exactly the same words for your 1-6-1 poem. I don't think I've ever read one of these small poems that works so well, with so few words as yours has. Very well done! Good luck in the contest. I think it's a winner. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Sandra!!
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
I enjoy the imagery. The poem works perfectly with the photo. Rhyming "winds" with "distends" and "bends" is a little bit forced but I think works. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I enjoy the imagery. The poem works perfectly with the photo. Rhyming "winds" with "distends" and "bends" is a little bit forced but I think works. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Charles!
Comment from Wendy G
Stunning image of the tree suffering from the effects of powerful wind. Change does distend and alter the shape of all one knows. It's not quite a perfect rhyme with lines two and three, but it is meaningful. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Stunning image of the tree suffering from the effects of powerful wind. Change does distend and alter the shape of all one knows. It's not quite a perfect rhyme with lines two and three, but it is meaningful. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much Wendy!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
The poem "The Aged" is a 1-6-1 with a requirement that all three lines rhyme. In the poem, the subject is an old tree evergreen tree of some kind near the ocean. It is bent over in its age.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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The poem "The Aged" is a 1-6-1 with a requirement that all three lines rhyme. In the poem, the subject is an old tree evergreen tree of some kind near the ocean. It is bent over in its age.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Thomas!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great entry for the contest - you nailed the form love it also loved the image that you chose for the contest. somes up the feeling of the poem very well.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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great entry for the contest - you nailed the form love it also loved the image that you chose for the contest. somes up the feeling of the poem very well.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much Jake!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a great example of a 1-6-1 verse.
Using seven words to express a complex concept is not easy.
This verse explores reincarnation.
I interpreted this as the process of someone passing, their soul travels, (bends, distends,) into another person.
I know some do not believe in reincarnation, but I have a personal experience.
My son was born, as my father was on his death bed.
I was standing next to his bed when he died holding my newborn son.
I believe his soul stretched into my son.
To this day, he is truly
an "old soul," as the saying goes.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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This is a great example of a 1-6-1 verse.
Using seven words to express a complex concept is not easy.
This verse explores reincarnation.
I interpreted this as the process of someone passing, their soul travels, (bends, distends,) into another person.
I know some do not believe in reincarnation, but I have a personal experience.
My son was born, as my father was on his death bed.
I was standing next to his bed when he died holding my newborn son.
I believe his soul stretched into my son.
To this day, he is truly
an "old soul," as the saying goes.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you KL!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, this is really lovely. I'm not sure if "winds" rhymes with "distends" although it might be simply a matter of my Canadian accent... I thought to mention my concern simply because I love the poem! Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Wow, this is really lovely. I'm not sure if "winds" rhymes with "distends" although it might be simply a matter of my Canadian accent... I thought to mention my concern simply because I love the poem! Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Hello Dawn... thank you. I will double check the pronunciation, but here in the south it rhymes... but, I will check. Thank you.
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You are very welcome. :)
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written 1 6 1 poem. Great choice of rhyming words. Winds distends and bends.Great photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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This is a nicely written 1 6 1 poem. Great choice of rhyming words. Winds distends and bends.Great photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you Joanne!
Comment from GWHARGIS
A double meaning was what I got from this. The natural element of the tree or bush that changes its growth pattern to the constant pressure of the elements. Then the person who changes over time either physically or mentally. Outside forces at work. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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A double meaning was what I got from this. The natural element of the tree or bush that changes its growth pattern to the constant pressure of the elements. Then the person who changes over time either physically or mentally. Outside forces at work. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you Gretchen!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the 1-6-1 poetry contest. It reminds me of what older people must do to live in a technological and computerized world. The text is large and easy to read and understand. The visual fits well. I would remove the lone comma. It's not needed for this short poem. You have a good entry. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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This is a good entry to the 1-6-1 poetry contest. It reminds me of what older people must do to live in a technological and computerized world. The text is large and easy to read and understand. The visual fits well. I would remove the lone comma. It's not needed for this short poem. You have a good entry. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much Sandra.
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You are welcome.
