The Aged
Short verse31 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
That's an amazing picture and you managed to bring it to life with your words here, the power of the wind is unbelievable and can tear down trees in its wake, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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That's an amazing picture and you managed to bring it to life with your words here, the power of the wind is unbelievable and can tear down trees in its wake, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much Dolly!!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are descriptive and creative. I pondered on old souls feeling the stretching and expanding. I thought about our recent hurricane here in Florida and how like age - we have no control! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and goes well with the words of this poem.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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The author's words are descriptive and creative. I pondered on old souls feeling the stretching and expanding. I thought about our recent hurricane here in Florida and how like age - we have no control! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and goes well with the words of this poem.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you Maria!!
Comment from dragonpoet
This picture could show what a hurricane or tornado could do to an old tree. But it could also be metaphoric for the way our beliefs and bodies change or bend as we grow older.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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This picture could show what a hurricane or tornado could do to an old tree. But it could also be metaphoric for the way our beliefs and bodies change or bend as we grow older.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much Joan!
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Don't mention it.
Joan
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What an amazing tree. It's a perfect metaphor for the old age. With the sunset, another metaphor for getting old, you did well here. You have used a double metaphor but only have enough syllables to say one.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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What an amazing tree. It's a perfect metaphor for the old age. With the sunset, another metaphor for getting old, you did well here. You have used a double metaphor but only have enough syllables to say one.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much, Lisa!
Comment from royowen
The ability of things to survive is incredible, that old tree, is the pinnacle of metaphor material for the poet, it reveals the ability of nature to bend, but the ability to survive in marvellous, well done, great rhyming, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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The ability of things to survive is incredible, that old tree, is the pinnacle of metaphor material for the poet, it reveals the ability of nature to bend, but the ability to survive in marvellous, well done, great rhyming, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much!
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Welcome
Comment from Marienkiefer
A very nice poem on how age and experiences has given rise flexibility and resilience.
-Imagery is very strong in this poem.
-Reflective
-Great use of existing space to convey a theme and message.
All the best.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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A very nice poem on how age and experiences has given rise flexibility and resilience.
-Imagery is very strong in this poem.
-Reflective
-Great use of existing space to convey a theme and message.
All the best.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Brandon Clark
For the challenge of only 8 total syllables, you nailed it creatively and the message (as I take from it) of having to change and bend, despite age, is one that can be difficult sometimes but usually rewarding in the end. Great image as well!
Thanks for sharing and excellent job!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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For the challenge of only 8 total syllables, you nailed it creatively and the message (as I take from it) of having to change and bend, despite age, is one that can be difficult sometimes but usually rewarding in the end. Great image as well!
Thanks for sharing and excellent job!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you Brandon.
Comment from Susan Newell
This 1-6-1 is original and thought provoking. Sometimes it is better to bend with the winds and survive, than to stand firm and be vanquished. This one is a contender for sure.
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This 1-6-1 is original and thought provoking. Sometimes it is better to bend with the winds and survive, than to stand firm and be vanquished. This one is a contender for sure.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you!
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Welcome.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 1-6-1 poem you penned for the writing prompt. You used great descriptive words and very neat imagery that went well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very well written 1-6-1 poem you penned for the writing prompt. You used great descriptive words and very neat imagery that went well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you Teri.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1, The Aged, has the proper formatting and finds a great visual to represent the concept of surviving through all that life throws at us. The trees that bend -- remain.
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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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This 1-6-1, The Aged, has the proper formatting and finds a great visual to represent the concept of surviving through all that life throws at us. The trees that bend -- remain.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, Bill... can always count on you to see it clearly!
