Bamboo Moon
a 5-7-5 poem23 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Sugarray!
I should be asleep but I'm restless . I'm glad I took a peek at fanstory.
Your words describe well the calming vibe one feels just looking at the beautiful water
painting your chose.
I would love to lull in all that blissfulness, peacefulness, weightlessness.
A Bamboo grove is very striking ,it's such an
unique plant .. it takes up to 5/7 years to ground its roots and then suddenly it starts to shoot up very fast , nearly a metre per DAY. Yes you read right PER DAY.
It is very hard yet its long stalks sway in the breeze.
In winter the snow makes the stalks bend but come Spring they spring back with ease never breaking.
The power/ strength to spring back from adversity can be a metaphor for us when we face the many trials in our life.
I'll try to get some sleep now,
Notte!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Ciao Sugarray!
I should be asleep but I'm restless . I'm glad I took a peek at fanstory.
Your words describe well the calming vibe one feels just looking at the beautiful water
painting your chose.
I would love to lull in all that blissfulness, peacefulness, weightlessness.
A Bamboo grove is very striking ,it's such an
unique plant .. it takes up to 5/7 years to ground its roots and then suddenly it starts to shoot up very fast , nearly a metre per DAY. Yes you read right PER DAY.
It is very hard yet its long stalks sway in the breeze.
In winter the snow makes the stalks bend but come Spring they spring back with ease never breaking.
The power/ strength to spring back from adversity can be a metaphor for us when we face the many trials in our life.
I'll try to get some sleep now,
Notte!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Ciao Franca! I hope you rested well! Thank you for your lovely words. I didn't know all of those fun facts about bamboo. I'm so glad you shared them with me. I so appreciate you and wish you a buona notte!!
Melissa
Comment from rspoet
Hello Melissa,
This is a wonderful traditional haiku (5-7-5) you've written with excellent imagery and connection in lines one and two. The marvelous satori line invites reflection and extends the poem beyond the words.
Bamboo is a significant element in Asian culture.
In Philippine mythology, the first man (Strong) and the first woman (Beautiful) emerged from within the hollow of bamboo.
It is a symbol of person's soul.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Hello Melissa,
This is a wonderful traditional haiku (5-7-5) you've written with excellent imagery and connection in lines one and two. The marvelous satori line invites reflection and extends the poem beyond the words.
Bamboo is a significant element in Asian culture.
In Philippine mythology, the first man (Strong) and the first woman (Beautiful) emerged from within the hollow of bamboo.
It is a symbol of person's soul.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you Robert. I really appreciate your thoughts on this haiku. I am always unsure if I get the tone right and use a significant satori. I have even taken to reading famous haiku and writing practice verses that shall never see the light of day LOL. Have a lovely day! :)
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa,
This haiku shows how much you learn in quiet times. The moon inspires us to introspection and meditation. Both can help us grow.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Hi Melissa,
This haiku shows how much you learn in quiet times. The moon inspires us to introspection and meditation. Both can help us grow.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you Joan!!
Melissa
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My pleasure, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from jessizero
This poem has a very serene feel to it. I think the picture of the soft green bamboo added to the poem. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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This poem has a very serene feel to it. I think the picture of the soft green bamboo added to the poem. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you Jess. I so appreciate your comments.
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Bamboo Moon, has the right set up and creates a scene where one can find his/her center and allow peace to enter and spread.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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This 5-7-5, Bamboo Moon, has the right set up and creates a scene where one can find his/her center and allow peace to enter and spread.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much Bill!
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork, Melissa.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-It is also a good haiku with effective nature and seasonal imagery
describing this special moon.
-A very good satori line, as well.
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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-Nice artwork, Melissa.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-It is also a good haiku with effective nature and seasonal imagery
describing this special moon.
-A very good satori line, as well.
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Hello Pam. So glad you liked these meditative haiku. Thank you!
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa.
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Your 5-7-5 beautifully captures the mood from the painting. I've not yet ventured into the land of haiku,5-7-5 or any of its three-lined cousins. I don't know if I could handle the restraints. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Your 5-7-5 beautifully captures the mood from the painting. I've not yet ventured into the land of haiku,5-7-5 or any of its three-lined cousins. I don't know if I could handle the restraints. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you Charles. I hope you do test the waters of haiku because it is challenging and demanding ~ especially if done well.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
I was just picturing myself meditating by the lake on a cool autumn day. Guess we're in a similar mood. Lovely presentation for the contest. Should do well.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I was just picturing myself meditating by the lake on a cool autumn day. Guess we're in a similar mood. Lovely presentation for the contest. Should do well.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you June. So glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written 5-7-5 poem. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. It has a peaceful and calm appearance. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This is a beautifully written 5-7-5 poem. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. It has a peaceful and calm appearance. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Joanne. So glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Lovely work. I'd never heard of a bamboo moon, but there are several different designations for moon. Lovely imagery of the moon and the thought that is provokes meditation. Great use of illuminating, as you can appreciate the double meaning of the word. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Lovely work. I'd never heard of a bamboo moon, but there are several different designations for moon. Lovely imagery of the moon and the thought that is provokes meditation. Great use of illuminating, as you can appreciate the double meaning of the word. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Hi Judi. So glad you enjoyed it. Thank you.
Melissa
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You're welcome. Beautifully written. judi
