The End
A man changes once he knows the truth.6 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written story you have penned for the Religious War Story contest. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from your words and dialogue. Best part was the ending! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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This is a very well written story you have penned for the Religious War Story contest. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from your words and dialogue. Best part was the ending! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading my story. And thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
What a marvelous, well written story of gory war and glory to God thereafter. You should get all the votes, I think, unless one doesn't read yours or votes for their own. Then again, I haven't read any others, yet.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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What a marvelous, well written story of gory war and glory to God thereafter. You should get all the votes, I think, unless one doesn't read yours or votes for their own. Then again, I haven't read any others, yet.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful review. Could I suggest that you not read any others? Just joking... thank you for reading mine.
Comment from Ben1
I really enjoyed this story. As tragic as the beginning was it really had a nice and hopeful ending. I really enjoy the setting and the spun you took on the contest. I like how you showed God as one of piece and joy, which differentiates him from the Roman gods. It was really well written, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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I really enjoyed this story. As tragic as the beginning was it really had a nice and hopeful ending. I really enjoy the setting and the spun you took on the contest. I like how you showed God as one of piece and joy, which differentiates him from the Roman gods. It was really well written, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your very kind review and generous rating.
Comment from leather
Because the conclusion of this story tells us a new life is forming for Marcelus, the title might fit better if it were called, The Beginning. This certainly fits the requirements of a religious story and is free of spelling errors.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Because the conclusion of this story tells us a new life is forming for Marcelus, the title might fit better if it were called, The Beginning. This certainly fits the requirements of a religious story and is free of spelling errors.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from heavenempress
Wonderful piece of work. Excellent English command. Keep it up! I liked the way Marcelus restored hope and turned to a God of peace. Highly recommend your work to others
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Wonderful piece of work. Excellent English command. Keep it up! I liked the way Marcelus restored hope and turned to a God of peace. Highly recommend your work to others
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting story that might have a chance of being purchased by one of the adult Sunday School magazines. You've made it believable that Marcelus might be sorry for what has happened and might want to find God. You do need to watch your spelling: "dev(a)station" and Marcelus "(k)new", Caesar. The second, third, and fourth sentence from the end should be in the same paragraph. Best of luck with this.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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This is an interesting story that might have a chance of being purchased by one of the adult Sunday School magazines. You've made it believable that Marcelus might be sorry for what has happened and might want to find God. You do need to watch your spelling: "dev(a)station" and Marcelus "(k)new", Caesar. The second, third, and fourth sentence from the end should be in the same paragraph. Best of luck with this.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind review and generous rating. And thank you for pointing out the errors. I have made the changes.
