Do not tell Dad
Just being a good caddie.6 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
I say your guardian Angel did overtime.
I can imagine how devastated your mamma would have been had you not retrieved it.
Maybe giving it to a nine year old to keep safe was not the wisest thing to do.
During the back track you must have been worried to death.
I wonder why your mamma took it off in the first place ? Wedding rings are smooth and don't hook onto anything .. and usually they are well fitting .
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Ciao!
I say your guardian Angel did overtime.
I can imagine how devastated your mamma would have been had you not retrieved it.
Maybe giving it to a nine year old to keep safe was not the wisest thing to do.
During the back track you must have been worried to death.
I wonder why your mamma took it off in the first place ? Wedding rings are smooth and don't hook onto anything .. and usually they are well fitting .
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Her ring had a Diamond on it. Not your typical gold wedding band. It was uncomfortable to have on and play golf at the same time. Thanks for reading.
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Prego !
Of course , it could easily hook on to something or get knocked and finish up damaged (sigh)
Comment from RodG
I am surprised how easily I could visualize this scene of a nine-year-old boy stealthily stalking backwards on the fairway, retracing his steps while looking for--and finding--his mother's ring. Well done!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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I am surprised how easily I could visualize this scene of a nine-year-old boy stealthily stalking backwards on the fairway, retracing his steps while looking for--and finding--his mother's ring. Well done!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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It was unsettling for a wee lad. Thanks for the nice review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sweet and endearing story and I adored the sentiments here and you were lucky to find you Mum's wedding ring in the grass! I bet she gave you such a big hug, much enjoyed, happy memories, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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A sweet and endearing story and I adored the sentiments here and you were lucky to find you Mum's wedding ring in the grass! I bet she gave you such a big hug, much enjoyed, happy memories, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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that she did. Thank you for reading
Comment from Dr. Von
This is a story that radiates with connection and heart. These personal memories are challenging to share in less than a novel format. Transition stories are weighted with important details that sharpen in hindsight. You wrote this one with powerful insight and revelation. Good on you. Thank you for sharing your gift.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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This is a story that radiates with connection and heart. These personal memories are challenging to share in less than a novel format. Transition stories are weighted with important details that sharpen in hindsight. You wrote this one with powerful insight and revelation. Good on you. Thank you for sharing your gift.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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You make me want to write. I am finding a new joy. Thank you.
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LOL. You are a writer. You are welcome.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well written and presented.
The image is ethereal which mirrors the sentiment left.
Flash stories sometimes feel as though details are omitted due to word restrictions, however this story left me satisfied.
I am sorry for your loss.
I hope your readers find comfort in this wee story.
I love that you saved the phone call.
Good luck in the contest, and thanks for sharing your story.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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This is well written and presented.
The image is ethereal which mirrors the sentiment left.
Flash stories sometimes feel as though details are omitted due to word restrictions, however this story left me satisfied.
I am sorry for your loss.
I hope your readers find comfort in this wee story.
I love that you saved the phone call.
Good luck in the contest, and thanks for sharing your story.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much. The 100 word limit does restrict some character development for sure but as you nicely pointed out, you get the picture. I'll call this one my 100 word 'senyru'
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:)
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, I guess you're saying someone, perhaps Tim who stayed bedside, called you on the phone and then rang the crystal bell as you had instructed?
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Hmm, I guess you're saying someone, perhaps Tim who stayed bedside, called you on the phone and then rang the crystal bell as you had instructed?
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Yes, it was actually my sister Marianne who had arrived from Tucson an hour too late to see mom. She called me. I only had 100 words. I could have written 1000. Appreciate your read. Thank you.
