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Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi MariVal,
This is a well done 2-4-2 poem. I like the alliteration, personification and internal rhyme in the last line. The first two lines a good description of the scene in the artwork.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
    Joan,

    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by dragonpoet on 28-Oct-2022
    You are most kindly welcome, Gypsy.
    joan
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hi Gypsy, your 2-4-2 poem is filled with vivid imagery. I especially liked:

aflame at dusk
(Good word usage)

Well chosen photo and beautiful presentation. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.

Still getting caught up from being away. Xo. Margaret ~ LateBloomer

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 16-Oct-2022
    it's always so good to hear from you. I appreciate the exceptional review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from karenina
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I think trees become old because they have learned to bow with the wind rather than break... This is how they reach the "dusk" of their years, much like we humans. There are reflections here that are beautiful on the surface, and more so as metaphors!

Karenina

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
    Dear karenina, yes, you understand my haiku perfectly. Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
reply by karenina on 13-Oct-2022
    Guess what? I'm behind again!

    It's the story of my life!

    Loved this one!
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Gypsy,

Good idea for this contest entry. Succinctly said, but the imagery is expansive. The Fall oft provides us this beautiful glimpse at dusk. You got it right!

Mark

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
    Mark,

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your haiku poem- good picture presentation- good theme- tree still picking up light at days end- bowing to the sun as it leaves the day - clever

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
    Ap,

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
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The aesthetics are just stunning. The text is beautifully stated. You have done a fine job on this 2-4-2 poetry contest entry. Good luck with the contest. You have the possible winning entry.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
    Ms Sandy

    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 12-Oct-2022
    You are most welcome. Did you get a chance to read the comments for the poem I dedicated to you?
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
    What? No. But I'm really behind in my reviewing. I'll look for it.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2022
    I just read your poem and reviewed it. I went through the comments and most were kind but a few were really rude. You have a very distinctive style that shine through your poem. You're always advocating for injustices and bring the unspoken into the light. Well done, Ms Sandy.
Comment from lyenochka
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So happy that you have entered this contest, MariVal!
Gorgeous poem with gorgeous illustrations and alliteration and imagery. I like the contrasting feel of "aflame at dusk."
Hope this does well in the contest!

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
    Big sister,

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review. I always appreciate your insightful feedback. Love you. ❤️

    Marival hugs
Comment from JoannaN
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This is a good entry for the 2-4-2 contests (I've just counted the syllables).
I like the poem, its message and the accompanying graphic. The colours are well-matched with the pictures.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from HarryT
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Love the line, "aflame at dusk" and the homophones in the last line. Well done. One does not even need the picture, the words create the vision in one's mind.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
    Harry

    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from jessizero
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I like the last line "boughs bow" and your depiction of the tree as "aflame." You really do have a way with this type of poetry. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2022

reply by the author on 12-Oct-2022
    Jessi

    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs