The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Help Needed (Miranda)"Miranda solves a mystery.
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
"had he know Aaron's" should be had he known Aaron's.
Seemed Aaron is not satisfied with the lifestyles of the rich, buying a trailer and wanting to furnish in Thrift Shop deluxe.
Appears Miranda is conflicted with the "new" Aaron and how she feels about him.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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"had he know Aaron's" should be had he known Aaron's.
Seemed Aaron is not satisfied with the lifestyles of the rich, buying a trailer and wanting to furnish in Thrift Shop deluxe.
Appears Miranda is conflicted with the "new" Aaron and how she feels about him.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Thank you for catching the spag. Don't think Miranda is really interested in Aaron romantically. Just another complication in her life.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Okay! Very nice segue. I like that you have BIGGIE chapter than a calm one so we can all get our bearings a little...and then anticipate what's to come, see if we'll guess right, etc.
You're doing such a nice job with this, Gretchen. Very professional, letter-perfect, fun, all your characters staying true to their personalities, great dialogue. You have a hit here; you honestly do. xo
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Okay! Very nice segue. I like that you have BIGGIE chapter than a calm one so we can all get our bearings a little...and then anticipate what's to come, see if we'll guess right, etc.
You're doing such a nice job with this, Gretchen. Very professional, letter-perfect, fun, all your characters staying true to their personalities, great dialogue. You have a hit here; you honestly do. xo
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much. I'm thinking this is a bit different than my normal fare. It's been fun. Miranda says all the things I can't. That's liberating. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
Hey, Gretchen, tell me something. When you were away from Fanstory (I think it was about three years since I was reviewing your stories here), were you still writing? Regularly? I can't imagine how you could not have been writing during your hiatus since your skills in narrative and characterization have really blossomed. And you WERE a good writer back then. Now, though there's a real sense of professionalism to your writing.
Looks like my hunch last week was right. Miranda's going to get something going with Aaron.
Jay
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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Hey, Gretchen, tell me something. When you were away from Fanstory (I think it was about three years since I was reviewing your stories here), were you still writing? Regularly? I can't imagine how you could not have been writing during your hiatus since your skills in narrative and characterization have really blossomed. And you WERE a good writer back then. Now, though there's a real sense of professionalism to your writing.
Looks like my hunch last week was right. Miranda's going to get something going with Aaron.
Jay
Comment Written 16-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2022
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I didn't pick up a pen in those three years. I just started writing again in January of 2022. Thank you though. And you just never know about Aaron and Miranda. I have a new sense of feeling about writing. Write from the heart.
This review means a lot to me Jay. Thank you.
Gretchen
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with this chapter, Gretchen. I enjoyed
reading it. It seemed liked all three of the main characters
have mellowed a little. Miranda is a bit more open to listening
to Aaron and understanding Waylon. Waylon has settled into
a routine that hopefully will help him adjust better. Aaron seemed
like he was trying to come across not to needy, but genuinely
asking a favor. Your lines flowed smoothly with great details.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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You did a great job with this chapter, Gretchen. I enjoyed
reading it. It seemed liked all three of the main characters
have mellowed a little. Miranda is a bit more open to listening
to Aaron and understanding Waylon. Waylon has settled into
a routine that hopefully will help him adjust better. Aaron seemed
like he was trying to come across not to needy, but genuinely
asking a favor. Your lines flowed smoothly with great details.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much. I was afraid this chapter would come off boring but I wanted to flesh Aaron out a little more. Thank you so much for the feedback. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yep, Miranda has her hands full, as she has from the beginning. But having a pitiful puppy who is crazy about you isn't the worst thing you can do. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Yep, Miranda has her hands full, as she has from the beginning. But having a pitiful puppy who is crazy about you isn't the worst thing you can do. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Not the worst but adds a new complication. Lol. Thank you so much for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
After reading this post, I actually feel sorry for Miranda. I didn't before. I know she couldn't help her circumstances, but yet she was tough and dealing with them. This time I feel sorry for her.
Ive been here for almost thirty minutes. (I've)
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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After reading this post, I actually feel sorry for Miranda. I didn't before. I know she couldn't help her circumstances, but yet she was tough and dealing with them. This time I feel sorry for her.
Ive been here for almost thirty minutes. (I've)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank you. She will muddle through. I feel confident in that. Thank you so much for catching the spag and the nice review. Gretchen
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I am sure she will Miranda is a strong character.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
She needs to go with them to keep watch over them. Who knows, they might find Waylon's dad in Haynes Pond. Maybe that's why he hasn't called. Just kidding. I think you said he packed a bag. I like the way she talked to herself. I know a couple who have an age difference like Miranda and Aaron. In fact I know two such couples and they are both very happily married.
Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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She needs to go with them to keep watch over them. Who knows, they might find Waylon's dad in Haynes Pond. Maybe that's why he hasn't called. Just kidding. I think you said he packed a bag. I like the way she talked to herself. I know a couple who have an age difference like Miranda and Aaron. In fact I know two such couples and they are both very happily married.
Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Hadn't thought about Dougie in Haynes Pond. Would be an interesting twist. 🤔. Thank you so much again for the review and stars. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
Well, it is awfully nice that Aaron is so civilized to want to walk Miranda home. But she's right next door. And it is big progress that Waylon worried about her and waited up for her. I loved that her reflection talks back to her!
He reaches out impulsively. "Will you help me? (This should be a new paragraph because Miranda was just talking before this.)
that bad once i think about it (I)
"Nothings wrong. (Nothing's)
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Well, it is awfully nice that Aaron is so civilized to want to walk Miranda home. But she's right next door. And it is big progress that Waylon worried about her and waited up for her. I loved that her reflection talks back to her!
He reaches out impulsively. "Will you help me? (This should be a new paragraph because Miranda was just talking before this.)
that bad once i think about it (I)
"Nothings wrong. (Nothing's)
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the spag check. I've since corrected. Thank you again for the wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
She's almost talking herself into a corner, but she can't help herself she may be street wise, but her feeling heart will possibly lead herself into trouble. And that is why she's such a great central character, the narrative revolves around her. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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She's almost talking herself into a corner, but she can't help herself she may be street wise, but her feeling heart will possibly lead herself into trouble. And that is why she's such a great central character, the narrative revolves around her. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much. I think she's afraid of falling for someone again. Don't think she's even entertaining the thought about Aaron. Thank you for this wonderful review. Gretchen
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She cautions
Comment from Wendy G
I like the dialogue in her head, her self evaluation and her honesty. I like the subtle changes in both her relationships, with Waylon (waiting up for her) and Aaron. I like that there is no clear-cut resolution, and that's why I am looking forward to reading more of your well written work.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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I like the dialogue in her head, her self evaluation and her honesty. I like the subtle changes in both her relationships, with Waylon (waiting up for her) and Aaron. I like that there is no clear-cut resolution, and that's why I am looking forward to reading more of your well written work.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review and the extra star. I'm so glad you're enjoying this. Loving the feedback. Gretchen
