Iron-Coated Marshmallow Love
Life in a single parent household38 total reviews
Comment from kiwisteveh
I was a little confused by this at first - taking it too literally I guess - but I get it now.
What I want to do,
and suppose to do
are siblings but not twins.
I enjoyed the riff on parenthood - lots of joys, lots of stress intermingled and we never do quite as well as we would like to.
Steve
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I was a little confused by this at first - taking it too literally I guess - but I get it now.
What I want to do,
and suppose to do
are siblings but not twins.
I enjoyed the riff on parenthood - lots of joys, lots of stress intermingled and we never do quite as well as we would like to.
Steve
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem. That phrase means they are not exactly a lot. Sometimes we do things because they need to be done, not because we want to.
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Yes, I did get the point on a second reading - probably the strong point of the poem - great metaphor, especially since the topic is parenthood!
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Thank you for reading it a second time to get better understanding.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I am sure that being a single mom brings many trying days. But if you love your child, you will be thankful, too. Like your poem, it tells us what you want, need and that's no man.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I am sure that being a single mom brings many trying days. But if you love your child, you will be thankful, too. Like your poem, it tells us what you want, need and that's no man.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Well, I wouldn't go so far as to say I don't enjoy the company of male companionship. It's just hard to find one in a rural area. Thanks for your comments and review.
Comment from Teri7
I like the title to your poem. You used very good descriptive words telling of life in a one parent household and how the child had to do things earlier in life than most children their age. Very good poem. thank you for sharing. Teri
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I like the title to your poem. You used very good descriptive words telling of life in a one parent household and how the child had to do things earlier in life than most children their age. Very good poem. thank you for sharing. Teri
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
I really enjoyed reading this. I liked the flow of it, and also the rhyming that you used. I loved how you talked about doing the best that you can, and the way that you talked about lessons of independence. And the last line especially about sharing love. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I really enjoyed reading this. I liked the flow of it, and also the rhyming that you used. I loved how you talked about doing the best that you can, and the way that you talked about lessons of independence. And the last line especially about sharing love. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from Marin Beck
Hello,
What phenomenal work. The title and perfect image that you chose for your work drew me in immediately, and I was in no way disappointed by what I found. Your combination of traditional childhood rhymes juxtaposed with harsh realities is a moving technique, and you weave in and around symbolism and metaphor with the literal. Overall, I adore this work, and I think you do the role of a divorced mom incredible justice with this poem.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Hello,
What phenomenal work. The title and perfect image that you chose for your work drew me in immediately, and I was in no way disappointed by what I found. Your combination of traditional childhood rhymes juxtaposed with harsh realities is a moving technique, and you weave in and around symbolism and metaphor with the literal. Overall, I adore this work, and I think you do the role of a divorced mom incredible justice with this poem.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Marin,
Thank you for your heartfelt comments and the review rating. I appreciate both.
Comment from Barbara Peabody Pouliot
Beautiful. Really beautifully written. I love the photo. Your work is always a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing
All the Best to You Always
Good Luck
Be Well
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Beautiful. Really beautifully written. I love the photo. Your work is always a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing
All the Best to You Always
Good Luck
Be Well
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Ms. Barbara,
Thank you for being so supportive of my work. I appreciate the exceptional rating. I appreciate you.
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I appreciate you. All your help, pointers, support and most of all your truth
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You are welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
Teaching responsibility and independence to children, and having them share the load, is part of being a good and wise mother. By circumstances you had to show tough love - seemingly demanding, but within, your heart is as soft as a marshmallow. I love the grit and strength in your words. To survive you both had to be tough. I thought the second part was particularly good, defying anyone to criticise. They haven't walked in your shoes, and you are doing your best - and a great job. Well done! Excellent writing, very authentic very meaningful.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Teaching responsibility and independence to children, and having them share the load, is part of being a good and wise mother. By circumstances you had to show tough love - seemingly demanding, but within, your heart is as soft as a marshmallow. I love the grit and strength in your words. To survive you both had to be tough. I thought the second part was particularly good, defying anyone to criticise. They haven't walked in your shoes, and you are doing your best - and a great job. Well done! Excellent writing, very authentic very meaningful.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Wendy thank you for your supportive comments and review.
Comment from TPAC
The thought conveyed make me consider the awareness of the child of your situation, making her to advance quickly in her maturity to even the board smoothing given efforts. A positive read containing a deep message of independence. All viewpoints given in my opinion prevailing this work.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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The thought conveyed make me consider the awareness of the child of your situation, making her to advance quickly in her maturity to even the board smoothing given efforts. A positive read containing a deep message of independence. All viewpoints given in my opinion prevailing this work.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from lancellot
Very true. Sounds very familiar to me. I was a single dad. My son could all those things at that age too, do his own laundry, cook even. I didn't feel bad for myself. It was the choice I made in choosing the wrong woman. But, we move on and do our best.
Great work.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Very true. Sounds very familiar to me. I was a single dad. My son could all those things at that age too, do his own laundry, cook even. I didn't feel bad for myself. It was the choice I made in choosing the wrong woman. But, we move on and do our best.
Great work.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Mr. L. thank you for sharing and understanding. We manage to do what needed to be done. I appreciate the exceptional rating especially from a writer like you. Thanks
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Fierce. Fervent. Determined. Hard on the outside but soft on the inside. The poem wraps an arm around your daughter and raises a middle finger to the world. You and your girl are gonna be just fine. There is much to admire about this poem, but particularly the masterfully frenzied way you establish moods.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Fierce. Fervent. Determined. Hard on the outside but soft on the inside. The poem wraps an arm around your daughter and raises a middle finger to the world. You and your girl are gonna be just fine. There is much to admire about this poem, but particularly the masterfully frenzied way you establish moods.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Charles,
Thank you so much for your supportive words and review. Both are appreciated. Sadly, my daughter died in a falling accident in 2006 at 22 years old.
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Sandra, I'm sorry you had to (and continue to) experience such a tragic loss. I am hopeful that your writing and sharing helps in your grieving and healing process. Prayers to you.
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Thank you, Charles. On page 3 of my portfolio is a writing entitled R.I.P. Daughter and a poem entitled Back Away from the Brink.
