The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Healing Takes Place"Adventures around & upon a hill
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Comment from Jasmine Girl
Did you make the following up?
That doctrine is called traducianism."
It's interesting that you can make up religions like that. I suggest you move the character introduction to the end so it doesn't take up so much space.
Well done and keep writing.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Did you make the following up?
That doctrine is called traducianism."
It's interesting that you can make up religions like that. I suggest you move the character introduction to the end so it doesn't take up so much space.
Well done and keep writing.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. Helen/Lyenockcha looked it up for so I researched it further. That would be quite an act of neologism. My imagination isn't that good.
Comment from Tiffany Lee
I'm not sure what I just read. The language was a bit odd but it stayed the same throughout. From what I gathered, maybe these women are dead? Not sure it's something I'd normally buy and read but I'd give it a try.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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I'm not sure what I just read. The language was a bit odd but it stayed the same throughout. From what I gathered, maybe these women are dead? Not sure it's something I'd normally buy and read but I'd give it a try.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your interested review. It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
Comment from papa55mike
This is an interesting storyline, and I wonder what character I would come back to. What a wonderfully written chapter. Please check this line; her questioning, "So each of you stand. Please eliminate the spaces after so and ad a comma. "So, each of you. Best of luck with the rest of your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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This is an interesting storyline, and I wonder what character I would come back to. What a wonderfully written chapter. Please check this line; her questioning, "So each of you stand. Please eliminate the spaces after so and ad a comma. "So, each of you. Best of luck with the rest of your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 25-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your observant & involved review.
Comment from lancellot
A very interesting chapter. We got a lot on theory or perhaps that has been proven. I would suggest looking over your introductory speech tags.
notes:
helpful. " I can give some theological
-helpful, "I can give some theological
Somara continued to {elaborate. "Druzism} believes when we die
-Somara continued to elaborate, "Druzism believes when we die
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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A very interesting chapter. We got a lot on theory or perhaps that has been proven. I would suggest looking over your introductory speech tags.
notes:
helpful. " I can give some theological
-helpful, "I can give some theological
Somara continued to {elaborate. "Druzism} believes when we die
-Somara continued to elaborate, "Druzism believes when we die
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Enjoyable read, the dialogue is fluid, though it lacks some punch to avoid monotony. The first part seemed more intellectual discussion on reincarnation etc., but the whole chapter gives a clear picture of things to come. I would like to read the next..
Good job!!
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Enjoyable read, the dialogue is fluid, though it lacks some punch to avoid monotony. The first part seemed more intellectual discussion on reincarnation etc., but the whole chapter gives a clear picture of things to come. I would like to read the next..
Good job!!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your interested review. It is difficult coming in cold. If you are interested, it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. The ladies recently returned from the 16th -century. The Tor hold a lot of trauma because that is where the leaders of the monastery were hanged. Then the monks, all of the characters were beheaded in the 16th-century. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
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I'll read, for sure! Thanks for sharing
Mario
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I'll read, for sure! Thanks for sharing
Mario
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I'll make sure I read the other chapters. Thank you for responding!
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remember, no reviews needed
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***hugs***
Comment from aryr
This indeed was a fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. I was totally surprised that all three ladies were instantly healed at the same time. What a miracle? I can't wait to see what the next chapter brings. Blessings n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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This indeed was a fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. I was totally surprised that all three ladies were instantly healed at the same time. What a miracle? I can't wait to see what the next chapter brings. Blessings n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad you are still enjoying it.
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Can't wait to the next chapter? You are so welcome, Liz.
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***YaY***
Comment from Judy Lawless
It's interesting that the women experienced healing while talking to the newcomers, as is the information about how walking in the labyrinth seemed to calm them. Perhaps Cordelia is right, that is what they too need to do. Well written, Liz.
One little typo: "you won't have to take the time trip, we seemed to have (to have) done." remove this second 'to have'
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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It's interesting that the women experienced healing while talking to the newcomers, as is the information about how walking in the labyrinth seemed to calm them. Perhaps Cordelia is right, that is what they too need to do. Well written, Liz.
One little typo: "you won't have to take the time trip, we seemed to have (to have) done." remove this second 'to have'
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. The 'to have to have' would be pronounced ' to have to uv' That may be Vermont dialect...lol
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You're welcome, Liz. Yes, I remember hearing people speak that way even here in Ontario, but it just sounds wrong these days. lol
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***smile***
Comment from jessizero
I am glad the women are accepting of their past lives. As you said, they might not have been believers before, but they certainly are now. I look forward to seeing their reactions at the place where the lines cross. Thanks for always sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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I am glad the women are accepting of their past lives. As you said, they might not have been believers before, but they certainly are now. I look forward to seeing their reactions at the place where the lines cross. Thanks for always sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This was an enjoyable chapter. I enjoyed the conversation and learned a little along the way as well. Looking forward to that climb to the steeple and what that will unveil for them. An enjoyable read that is well written!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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This was an enjoyable chapter. I enjoyed the conversation and learned a little along the way as well. Looking forward to that climb to the steeple and what that will unveil for them. An enjoyable read that is well written!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the enjoyable review, it's nice to know who people are affected by it.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
They are getting the entire story put together. There is certainly a good reason to get to the top of the Tor. There are a few things you might want to change: . . . evidence that we (indeed) . . . . . . each of you (stood)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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They are getting the entire story put together. There is certainly a good reason to get to the top of the Tor. There are a few things you might want to change: . . . evidence that we (indeed) . . . . . . each of you (stood)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your alert review. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
