Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 86 "I am Indigo"Musings of an old man - 2022
33 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
Your poem lent a rebellious character to the color indigo. It is a mysterious blue. I liked the comparison to the other colors of the rainbow. This was a fun read that had a lesson woven in. Great job on this one. Gretchen
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Your poem lent a rebellious character to the color indigo. It is a mysterious blue. I liked the comparison to the other colors of the rainbow. This was a fun read that had a lesson woven in. Great job on this one. Gretchen
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Gretchen, Thank you for the nice validation and good wishes.
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the repetition in this free verse poem about your favorite color.
It is good personification and good information on what the color stands
for.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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I like the repetition in this free verse poem about your favorite color.
It is good personification and good information on what the color stands
for.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Joan, Thank you for the nice validation and good wishes.👍👍🙏🙏🎶🎶
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You're welcome on both accounts.
Joan
Comment from karenina
How inventive! I haven't noticed this contest ~ I love the idea of choosing one's favorite color and writing poetically about it. Giving the color its voice is a very clever take. I enjoyed your poem ~ and I'd like to get to know "Indigo" better! I can check out my local rainbow, I presume?
(smile)
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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How inventive! I haven't noticed this contest ~ I love the idea of choosing one's favorite color and writing poetically about it. Giving the color its voice is a very clever take. I enjoyed your poem ~ and I'd like to get to know "Indigo" better! I can check out my local rainbow, I presume?
(smile)
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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🤞🤞🤞I truly hope the next rainbow is consumed with indigo friend.!
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Thanks! Thanks for the crossed fingers! How adorable...
Comment from LJbutterfly
Indigo, a rich dark purplish blue is one of my favorite colors, and symbolizes wisdom and intuition, especially during meditation. I love that your poem distinguishes indigo from blue, purple, Paris blue and teal. Your most important message is that indigo IS a rainbow color. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Indigo, a rich dark purplish blue is one of my favorite colors, and symbolizes wisdom and intuition, especially during meditation. I love that your poem distinguishes indigo from blue, purple, Paris blue and teal. Your most important message is that indigo IS a rainbow color. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you, thank you!
Comment from royowen
You certainly do creat a case for indigo, and you've woven a very neat triple stanzed effort with this one my friend, I love the repeating lines that quite definitely reenforce your great work, excellent entry, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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You certainly do creat a case for indigo, and you've woven a very neat triple stanzed effort with this one my friend, I love the repeating lines that quite definitely reenforce your great work, excellent entry, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your kind validation.
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Most welcome
Comment from jacquelyn popp
This was a very nice poem. I enjoyed reading it. Very well done, and I liked how you repeated within a rainbow in each of the parts of your poem
with the 3 verses. I think they are called stanzas?? Anyhow your words flowed throughout the poem and made it very enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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This was a very nice poem. I enjoyed reading it. Very well done, and I liked how you repeated within a rainbow in each of the parts of your poem
with the 3 verses. I think they are called stanzas?? Anyhow your words flowed throughout the poem and made it very enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you for reading and commenting on my entry.
Comment from leather
You found a great illustration and used a background color to match. Your spelling was error-free, and the verse was nicely formatted. I suggest only one word be considered for rewording, which is in the first sentence of the second stanza. Consider changing the word "no" to the word 'not.'
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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You found a great illustration and used a background color to match. Your spelling was error-free, and the verse was nicely formatted. I suggest only one word be considered for rewording, which is in the first sentence of the second stanza. Consider changing the word "no" to the word 'not.'
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Leather, thank you! Thank you 🙏
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author,
I love your favorite color! Indigo is a pretty one for sure! Are you sure it's not Curillin? (sorry... had to go there) ;)
I did find one line to be a bit on the awkward side; "Not Arctic blue too!" In a poem where other things don't rhyme, you don't want to toss one in. It makes the reader think they're going to find more, or that you've forgotten to do them in other places.
Is there a format to this poem? If there is, you may want to include it in your notes, so the reader knows what to look for. You seem to begin to follow one form, then don't anymore. It's a little confusing.
On the brighter side, it was fun to read about how indigo was within the rainbow, but usually overlooked because of the blue and the violet... but it's still there! You did a good job with it overall, and it was a fun read. :) Susan
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Hello Author,
I love your favorite color! Indigo is a pretty one for sure! Are you sure it's not Curillin? (sorry... had to go there) ;)
I did find one line to be a bit on the awkward side; "Not Arctic blue too!" In a poem where other things don't rhyme, you don't want to toss one in. It makes the reader think they're going to find more, or that you've forgotten to do them in other places.
Is there a format to this poem? If there is, you may want to include it in your notes, so the reader knows what to look for. You seem to begin to follow one form, then don't anymore. It's a little confusing.
On the brighter side, it was fun to read about how indigo was within the rainbow, but usually overlooked because of the blue and the violet... but it's still there! You did a good job with it overall, and it was a fun read. :) Susan
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Susan, you are profoundly correct! I did make a needed change. 🙏🙏🙏🎶🎶
Comment from HarryT
Nice write about the indigo color. Have only one question, second stanza. I would check the word "to," I believe it should be too meaning also. The poem flows well and the structure of three lines works.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Nice write about the indigo color. Have only one question, second stanza. I would check the word "to," I believe it should be too meaning also. The poem flows well and the structure of three lines works.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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harry, you are so correct!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this favorite color contest entry with us. I am familiar with indigo, but you've put an entirely new light on it. I will look at it differently from now on. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing this favorite color contest entry with us. I am familiar with indigo, but you've put an entirely new light on it. I will look at it differently from now on. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thank you Barbara!
