Sad song, sad life
A favorite song causing heartache35 total reviews
Comment from estory
This is quite a poignant portrait of grief. All the details you give in the lonely man drinking by himself or up at the bar, listening to those songs that remind him of his lost love bring up the emotions in your readers. There's also a great personal touch to the voice that makes this so authentic to us readers. estory
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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This is quite a poignant portrait of grief. All the details you give in the lonely man drinking by himself or up at the bar, listening to those songs that remind him of his lost love bring up the emotions in your readers. There's also a great personal touch to the voice that makes this so authentic to us readers. estory
Comment Written 01-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2022
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Thank you story for your very kind comments.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from royowen
It's a little unusual that wives go before their husbands, but certainly in this case it was so. I remember Eddie Fisher very well indeed, he married Elizabeth Taylor, after dumping the scrumptious Debbie Reynolds. This is beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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It's a little unusual that wives go before their husbands, but certainly in this case it was so. I remember Eddie Fisher very well indeed, he married Elizabeth Taylor, after dumping the scrumptious Debbie Reynolds. This is beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thank you Roy, for your kind comments. I appreciate it.
Blessings
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Well done
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a heartfelt entry to the Special Song contest. You tell with clarity the heartache you father felt long after your mother had died. The plot moves at a good pace. There are only three things I wished you had shared in your story or AN. First, how old were you seeing your father suffering. Secondly, how did you feel losing your mom, and lastly tell who the folks in the photo are. I assume it's you and your dad. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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This is a heartfelt entry to the Special Song contest. You tell with clarity the heartache you father felt long after your mother had died. The plot moves at a good pace. There are only three things I wished you had shared in your story or AN. First, how old were you seeing your father suffering. Secondly, how did you feel losing your mom, and lastly tell who the folks in the photo are. I assume it's you and your dad. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind comments. I appreciate it .
To answer your questions. I wanted it to be about my father.
I wrote previously wrote 2 posts. One that showed me under age 9 a confused kid at my mother's wake. The other was 2 months after her death dad not being able to handle Christmas told me about Santa. If I had put these in my notes it may identify me. Dad grieved for 30 years until his death at 65. I was 37 at his passing.
Best wishes
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Thank you for your reply to my questions. After the contest contact me so I nay read the other two posts. Good luck!
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Through the eyes of a seven
Year old, and Dad is Santa are the 2 stories.
My mother died in childbirth when I was seven.
She lived her young childhood in a orphanage. So Christmas a big deal to her. She made sure her 4 kids had the toys she never had.
Best wishes
Mary
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What a sad but beautiful story. As the saying is stated coal was a diamond who did well under pressure. Your mom was a diamond. No wonder your father loved her so much. She knew in her core the power of a family,
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Thank you Sandra for your very special and kind comments. I am deeply appreciative.
Best wishes
Mary
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I was touched in my core by your writing. Please read in my portfolio on page three RIP Daughter and Back Away from the Brink.
Comment from Annmuma
A sad, but well written story. It is tragic when one gets lost in the grief and is unable to muster up the strength to pull out all those good memories to fill the pockets of sadness. Good entry and good luck. ann
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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A sad, but well written story. It is tragic when one gets lost in the grief and is unable to muster up the strength to pull out all those good memories to fill the pockets of sadness. Good entry and good luck. ann
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your review and kind comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read my story.
Best wishes
Comment from nomi338
One of my favorite songs is Ruby it's you. I do not know who sings it, I do not know many of the worlds. I just love the way the singer says 'They say Ruby you're like a dream, not always what you seem." and then end line of "Ruby it's you." I do not have a sad memory attached to the song, it is just a favorite of mine. I suppose I should look it up on Youtube or something and listen to the whole song. LOL.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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One of my favorite songs is Ruby it's you. I do not know who sings it, I do not know many of the worlds. I just love the way the singer says 'They say Ruby you're like a dream, not always what you seem." and then end line of "Ruby it's you." I do not have a sad memory attached to the song, it is just a favorite of mine. I suppose I should look it up on Youtube or something and listen to the whole song. LOL.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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How about Ray Charles! Thank you for the review
Best wishes
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Thank you, I will try that.
Comment from mermaids
Your story takes the reader back to another place and time. The reader feels your father's sadness and loss. Music often makes us re-live emotions such as sadness. I am sure many can relate to your father's grief and sadness over the loss of your mother.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Your story takes the reader back to another place and time. The reader feels your father's sadness and loss. Music often makes us re-live emotions such as sadness. I am sure many can relate to your father's grief and sadness over the loss of your mother.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your review and very kind comments. I appreciate them.
My very best wishes,
Comment from Douglas Goff
This was a very sad story. I can't imagine that the dead want us pining away after them long after they are gone.
Its also funny how songs can have such an impact on us.
Anyways, this is well written and I didn't see any errors. Thanks for giving us a peel into your past.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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This was a very sad story. I can't imagine that the dead want us pining away after them long after they are gone.
Its also funny how songs can have such an impact on us.
Anyways, this is well written and I didn't see any errors. Thanks for giving us a peel into your past.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Thank you Douglas. I appreciate your review and comments.
My very best wishes
Comment from Brandon Clark
That certainly is sad. However, reading between the lines, I would say your mother must have been quite a woman and your father revered her so much it hurt...especially passing away before him. Thanks for sharing such a personal story and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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That certainly is sad. However, reading between the lines, I would say your mother must have been quite a woman and your father revered her so much it hurt...especially passing away before him. Thanks for sharing such a personal story and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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Thank you Brandon, thank you not only for your review, but your very kind words and insight. I appreciate it.
Best wishes,
Comment from Mabaker12
I had a gentleman for a Dad. He carried around his neck the burden of a alcoholic wife, and an Institutionalised child due entirely to his wife not capable due to drink. His loyalty split the booze won. But today I still think of me with love and respect. I resonate with your dad 100%. Mabaker12
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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I had a gentleman for a Dad. He carried around his neck the burden of a alcoholic wife, and an Institutionalised child due entirely to his wife not capable due to drink. His loyalty split the booze won. But today I still think of me with love and respect. I resonate with your dad 100%. Mabaker12
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2022
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I truly appreciate your review and thank you for the six stars.
Our dads may not have been perfect, however, we see through the flaws and know we loved them dearly and they loved us with all their hearts.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I made a few suggestions, below, you might want to consider. Especially if this is for a contest.
I did enjoy reading your story. It's very sad, especially because he seemed to still feel the pain decades after your mother passed. This must have been tough to write; thank you for sharing.
Comma after dog and before Skootch in first paragraph.
Space between 10, and 20, - it almost looks like one number at first glance.
Capitalize If I Ever Needed You, as you have the other song titles.
If the line that begins, "But this one chorus from this one Eddie Fisher . . ." - if that is intended as a new paragraph, Add a space after the last paragraph. Same with the next to the last paragraph - capitalize your song title.
I would increase the font size a little, as well. I've noticed that quite a few here on FanStory have trouble with the smaller font size and won't bother to read it if it's a task.
Good luck in the contest.
Pam
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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I made a few suggestions, below, you might want to consider. Especially if this is for a contest.
I did enjoy reading your story. It's very sad, especially because he seemed to still feel the pain decades after your mother passed. This must have been tough to write; thank you for sharing.
Comma after dog and before Skootch in first paragraph.
Space between 10, and 20, - it almost looks like one number at first glance.
Capitalize If I Ever Needed You, as you have the other song titles.
If the line that begins, "But this one chorus from this one Eddie Fisher . . ." - if that is intended as a new paragraph, Add a space after the last paragraph. Same with the next to the last paragraph - capitalize your song title.
I would increase the font size a little, as well. I've noticed that quite a few here on FanStory have trouble with the smaller font size and won't bother to read it if it's a task.
Good luck in the contest.
Pam
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2022
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Thank you
