Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 88 "Angel's Sprinkling Gold Dust"Musings of an old man - 2022
28 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a wonderful take on the subject of dust. I liked the upbeat feeling to this. Loved that you described the first light as gray then it turned silver. Very vivid to me. Loved this. Great job on your poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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This was a wonderful take on the subject of dust. I liked the upbeat feeling to this. Loved that you described the first light as gray then it turned silver. Very vivid to me. Loved this. Great job on your poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Gretchen, thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written poem you have penned for the free verser club challenge with the topic of dust. You used great descriptive words and very imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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This is a very beautiful and very well written poem you have penned for the free verser club challenge with the topic of dust. You used great descriptive words and very imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
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Thanks Teri!
Comment from Willie P. Smith
JLR, I'm a rhyming poetry writer, however this is absolutely beautiful.
I read it three times and with each read it got better. What a unique and
beautiful way to describe God's creations. Exceptional in every way.
Willie
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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JLR, I'm a rhyming poetry writer, however this is absolutely beautiful.
I read it three times and with each read it got better. What a unique and
beautiful way to describe God's creations. Exceptional in every way.
Willie
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Willie, Wow! I am honored by your six-star validation! Thank you,sir!
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You are welcome, very deserved. Willie
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a powerful poem about the power of God and our creator. You put so neatly and it's so full of positive spirit. I like all the alliteration in the poem, too.
Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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What a powerful poem about the power of God and our creator. You put so neatly and it's so full of positive spirit. I like all the alliteration in the poem, too.
Well done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Dust event in The Fabulous Free Versers Club challenge.
I enjoyed reading your free verse poem about the origin of earth. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Good presentation Your writing flows and it's easy to understand.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Excellent entry for the Dust event in The Fabulous Free Versers Club challenge.
I enjoyed reading your free verse poem about the origin of earth. I also enjoyed your unique style and well chosen words.
Good presentation Your writing flows and it's easy to understand.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
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My friend, thank you!
Comment from SLMorrical
I really liked reading this. I can picture the moon a big gold circle letting lose gold dust down to he surface. This flows well and was a great read. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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I really liked reading this. I can picture the moon a big gold circle letting lose gold dust down to he surface. This flows well and was a great read. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your cub poem was well done, JLR. I enjoyed reading it. This
format seems to be your forte. Your words flowed smoothly
with some alliteration and they created great imagery. I liked
the story told of the creation of the Earth, moon, and stars.
The use of the gold font for the words gold was clever and
made an impact. The picture was beautiful and supportive of
your well-chosen words.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Your cub poem was well done, JLR. I enjoyed reading it. This
format seems to be your forte. Your words flowed smoothly
with some alliteration and they created great imagery. I liked
the story told of the creation of the Earth, moon, and stars.
The use of the gold font for the words gold was clever and
made an impact. The picture was beautiful and supportive of
your well-chosen words.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Jan! I appreciate and enjoy the club challenges.
Comment from lyenochka
This is a lovely way to describe creation and we are all made of that star dust. I especially liked "a resounding bang rang " which I took to refer to the "Big Bang" theory. Great response to the Free Verse challenge!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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This is a lovely way to describe creation and we are all made of that star dust. I especially liked "a resounding bang rang " which I took to refer to the "Big Bang" theory. Great response to the Free Verse challenge!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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thank you lyenochka, I appreciate your validation.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautifully worded poem, JLR. The text is a great size for reading. The message is comforting even to a pessimist like me. I enjoyed reading it. I love your use of the word numinous. I have only two suggestions that you MAY consider. Firstly, in lines two and three you use devoid and void. Perhaps find another word for one of them so it's not a repetitive area. Secondly, since you use the word gold in your poem twice, I would make the text gold or yellow. That color also would match perfectly your fabulous golden moon. Good luck with your club entry.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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This is a beautifully worded poem, JLR. The text is a great size for reading. The message is comforting even to a pessimist like me. I enjoyed reading it. I love your use of the word numinous. I have only two suggestions that you MAY consider. Firstly, in lines two and three you use devoid and void. Perhaps find another word for one of them so it's not a repetitive area. Secondly, since you use the word gold in your poem twice, I would make the text gold or yellow. That color also would match perfectly your fabulous golden moon. Good luck with your club entry.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Sandra, great input! Thank you!
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You are welcome. Great poem!
Comment from Brandon Clark
Very interesting poem! Your descriptions are bang on and the presentation is perfect as well. Enjoyed reading it very much. I really liked the part where you say, "God, in his numinous presence..." I have to admit numinous was not in my mental dictionary but will be now, so thank you for that and thank you for posting!!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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Very interesting poem! Your descriptions are bang on and the presentation is perfect as well. Enjoyed reading it very much. I really liked the part where you say, "God, in his numinous presence..." I have to admit numinous was not in my mental dictionary but will be now, so thank you for that and thank you for posting!!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2022
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That is great Brandon! Write away...
