The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Fool on a Washer (Miranda)"Miranda solves a mystery.
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Comment from Rachelle Allen
I am honestly covered in goosebumps, Gretchen!! This is all getting SO very exciting now!!
I love Miranda so much: 'I choke back a laugh. "You need higher standards, Aaron." ' Priceless!!
Well, you know what I'm going to say next: Can't wait for the next chapter!!! You're doing such great things with this book! xo
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I am honestly covered in goosebumps, Gretchen!! This is all getting SO very exciting now!!
I love Miranda so much: 'I choke back a laugh. "You need higher standards, Aaron." ' Priceless!!
Well, you know what I'm going to say next: Can't wait for the next chapter!!! You're doing such great things with this book! xo
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you very, very much. I feel like things are starting to accelerate now. I really appreciate your wonderful review and rating. Gretchen
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I agree. It's feeling like "Game on!!"
Comment from lyenochka
I can see that Aaron is getting closer and closer to expressing his feelings for Miranda. But is it really the Fed's car or is it Missy's husband? She didn't want them poking around there...
Suggestions:
"You ready for this," Aaron says, (question mark)
leave the mosquito free cab. (mosquito-free)
"Miranda, what could go wrong." (question mark)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I can see that Aaron is getting closer and closer to expressing his feelings for Miranda. But is it really the Fed's car or is it Missy's husband? She didn't want them poking around there...
Suggestions:
"You ready for this," Aaron says, (question mark)
leave the mosquito free cab. (mosquito-free)
"Miranda, what could go wrong." (question mark)
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you for spotting those spags. I need all the help I can get. Thank you for your excellent review and comments. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Wow, that was something unexpected. Finding a body down there, and now the police are involved, and as a potential crime scene, they'll have have to leave any evidence down there I'm afraid, so what is he doing? Beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
Typo : it wasn't just my uncle(')s car. 2: Time(')s up...
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Wow, that was something unexpected. Finding a body down there, and now the police are involved, and as a potential crime scene, they'll have have to leave any evidence down there I'm afraid, so what is he doing? Beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
Typo : it wasn't just my uncle(')s car. 2: Time(')s up...
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Roy. I appreciate this fine review. Gretchen
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Well done
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Well done
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is very well written and extremely interesting. I tried to find mistakes but failed.
Now I want to go back and read what I've missed. Keep up the good work!
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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This is very well written and extremely interesting. I tried to find mistakes but failed.
Now I want to go back and read what I've missed. Keep up the good work!
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much. There are always mistakes but I leave finding them to the professionals. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an interesting chapter. However, your hour went far too quickly. You timed them at 5 mins plus 4 plus 20 seconds. i.e. less than 10 mins plus faffing time. You need to sort that issue out to make your scene credible. Also I think you need to remind the reader what Guy is teaching them. Kate xx
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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This is an interesting chapter. However, your hour went far too quickly. You timed them at 5 mins plus 4 plus 20 seconds. i.e. less than 10 mins plus faffing time. You need to sort that issue out to make your scene credible. Also I think you need to remind the reader what Guy is teaching them. Kate xx
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Ok. Got it. That was the guy's name. Guy. Lol. Thanks for your review and help
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Yes I know it was his name. But what was he doing there?
