The Beast
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Beast Ch.2"A killer with no motive - can it even be?
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Comment from Faith Williams
Wow! That is a well-written, attention-grabbing chapter you've got here. I definitely want to know what happens next.
Two really small things--where it says, 'What fewer of you know..." might not "What few of you know..." work better? Something about 'fewer' made me pause when reading.
The other is about "your man for all things pathology and coroner relations." Would "related" work better?
Great start to your NaNoWriMo. Looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Wow! That is a well-written, attention-grabbing chapter you've got here. I definitely want to know what happens next.
Two really small things--where it says, 'What fewer of you know..." might not "What few of you know..." work better? Something about 'fewer' made me pause when reading.
The other is about "your man for all things pathology and coroner relations." Would "related" work better?
Great start to your NaNoWriMo. Looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much, Faith :-). I really wanted a stark contrast between this and the first chapter, which was deep first person PoV. By contrast, the cops are social creatures, albeit ones locked into the most extreme case of their careers. Many thanks for the pointers, and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it!
Mike
