The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "The End of the Story"Adventures around & upon a hill
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Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter was another well written rich in theme and Imagery.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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This chapter was another well written rich in theme and Imagery.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your affirming review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Very nice story. I think I commented on it before. I like the style, the rhythm and the pace of the story. I am more of a standard fiction type but this one was so pleasant to read.
Very well done!!
Mario
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Very nice story. I think I commented on it before. I like the style, the rhythm and the pace of the story. I am more of a standard fiction type but this one was so pleasant to read.
Very well done!!
Mario
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind involved review.
Comment from lancellot
An interesting conclusion. I would suggest going over this again, with an eye on speech tags and punctuations. But it was a good story. Well done.
I know I often have varied tones of buzzing in my ears, but this sounds different.["]
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"I thought it was my tinnitus. Yuh, I thought the altitude was affecting my tinnitus, and I thought my stress was agitating mine."
- Did all three really say all of this?
that she would absolve you of any wrongdoings.["]
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I have become accustomed to in this century.["]
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One fact is clear to me, things will continue to become easier.["]
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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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An interesting conclusion. I would suggest going over this again, with an eye on speech tags and punctuations. But it was a good story. Well done.
I know I often have varied tones of buzzing in my ears, but this sounds different.["]
-add
"I thought it was my tinnitus. Yuh, I thought the altitude was affecting my tinnitus, and I thought my stress was agitating mine."
- Did all three really say all of this?
that she would absolve you of any wrongdoings.["]
-add
I have become accustomed to in this century.["]
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One fact is clear to me, things will continue to become easier.["]
-add (I think)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your observant review. I will attend to your suggestions
Comment from prettybluebirds
This whole story is weird. I missed previous parts of it so maybe that is part of my problem with understanding the story. It is well executed and the font is large and easy to read. Nice work.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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This whole story is weird. I missed previous parts of it so maybe that is part of my problem with understanding the story. It is well executed and the font is large and easy to read. Nice work.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind effort to review this chapter. You are coming in cold. This is the time some feel a need to be cruel. These ladies are healing from trauma from having been vortexed into a monastery in the 16th century. You are welcome to peruse the previous chapters with no need to review. Just enjoy. The first chapters are about an actual trip I took to England. From 18 on is about being in the 16th -century.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Sorry I'm late getting to this Liz. I've been busy with other things this week and have fallen behind. This is a good chapter, a summation of what has passed and how there is now a new balance in the lives of these women. I like this sentence: "We don't change our tasks, lightening our burden from lifetime to lifetime,"
Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Sorry I'm late getting to this Liz. I've been busy with other things this week and have fallen behind. This is a good chapter, a summation of what has passed and how there is now a new balance in the lives of these women. I like this sentence: "We don't change our tasks, lightening our burden from lifetime to lifetime,"
Well done.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm so glad you got to see the resolution. I'm moving onto Be Wee With Bea Part 3. I don't know if you have read any of it. You are welcome to scan through my autobiographical allegory. You meet Bea & you know more about me. Part 1 --Early part of my life . Part 2 More recent part & Part 3 is now
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You're most welcome, Liz. It was an interesting tale. I'm not familiar with Be Wee With Bea. I assume it was posted before I became a member. I will look it up at some point later. I'm having trouble keeping up with reading, reviewing and writing so I've decided when my full membership comes up for renewal, sometime this month, I won't be renewing it. I will still read things I've been following, but won't be reviewing. I want more time to work on my own writing and get back to some other projects I've neglected. Not to say I won't be back at some future time. :)
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I will miss you terribly, Pisces. I do understand. For me, being on here has inspired me to continue writing. I've had caring proofreading by members such as you.
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Thanks, Liz. I've enjoyed my time on here and will miss the contact with all the friends I've made, but I feel my writing isn't gaining any popularity, and I struggle to know what to write, so for now I think I'll try to get my fiction novel edited over the winter, and try to come up with some new ideas for other stories. I have had many encouraging role models for sure.
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We'll still have exchanges til then
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For sure!
Comment from Dr. Von
The writing is clear and flows smoothly. I like the rich descriptive words you chose to keep the reader engaged in the story. It is an interesting chapter that is well-written. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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The writing is clear and flows smoothly. I like the rich descriptive words you chose to keep the reader engaged in the story. It is an interesting chapter that is well-written. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. You are coming cold on the story. This is the time some reviewers are cruel. Thank you for your kindness.
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You are very welcome. Kindness is always in order. Especially when the writing is good. LOL
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Comment from Gunner Lil
A very good chapter. An easy read with nice pace and flow. This reader enjoyed it very much.
Excellent dialog to move the story along.
Outstanding sensory description.
When speaking about 'clearly Renaissance musical instruments' maybe a mention what they were.
Thank you!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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A very good chapter. An easy read with nice pace and flow. This reader enjoyed it very much.
Excellent dialog to move the story along.
Outstanding sensory description.
When speaking about 'clearly Renaissance musical instruments' maybe a mention what they were.
Thank you!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind involved review. Coming in cold on the last chapter of a book is difficult. This is when many tend to give cruel reviews. But like you,when I'm unsure of someone's plot or the point of the book, I find the positive aspects of the writing. Thank you for that. If you care to, youcan read any previous chapters, such as when the time warp took place in chapter 18 or the remarkable true events before that. There is noneed to write a review, just enjoy.
Comment from lyenochka
Congratulations!! You have finished this book and shared all kinds of different things such as the Michael and Mary lines, the historical realities of what happened in Henry VIII's time period, the possibility of traducianism and how that might affect people's lives as they interrelate. I liked the analogy of the Escher painting and the visual and audial cues in this ending!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Congratulations!! You have finished this book and shared all kinds of different things such as the Michael and Mary lines, the historical realities of what happened in Henry VIII's time period, the possibility of traducianism and how that might affect people's lives as they interrelate. I liked the analogy of the Escher painting and the visual and audial cues in this ending!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is a wonderful summary review. I might copy it with your permission.
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Glad you liked it! Of course, you can use it if it helps!
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Thank you
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting ending and good luck for all the characters as the 16th century will no longer threaten them with return. Are the same ladies off to another adventure?
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is an interesting ending and good luck for all the characters as the 16th century will no longer threaten them with return. Are the same ladies off to another adventure?
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Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. No, my next project is Be Wee With Bea Part 3
The Tor was based on my trip to England 20+ years ago. All of it was factual until the time warp.
Comment from Jay Squires
To me, this is the best book I've read of yours, by far. It seems obvious from this, and from the previous book about the travelers who picked up the Native American guide who was conversant in his people's spiritual mysteries, that your meta story rotates around a similar spiritually metaphysical structure.
it occurred to me, as a friend once said, 'what goes down must come up.' [First time I'd heard of the reversal. I like it!]
So, what's on your creative agenda next?
Jay
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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To me, this is the best book I've read of yours, by far. It seems obvious from this, and from the previous book about the travelers who picked up the Native American guide who was conversant in his people's spiritual mysteries, that your meta story rotates around a similar spiritually metaphysical structure.
it occurred to me, as a friend once said, 'what goes down must come up.' [First time I'd heard of the reversal. I like it!]
So, what's on your creative agenda next?
Jay
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your loyal following & reviews. Thank you also for your compliments.
My next project is Be Wee With Bea Part 3 This series follows aspects of my life in allegorical form.
