The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Putting out Fires (Miranda)"Miranda solves a mystery.
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I liked this chapter very much, Gretchen. It had a complete
different, but still great, feel to it. I liked how it showed the
feelings of the three main characters. Waylon seemed to have
matured a bit as he took in all that had happened. Aaron seemed
to be harboring something from his past which caused the reaction
to Ed's death. Miranda showed ore of her caring side as the result
of the same. She and her mother have each other figured out, but
still care for one another. I don't believe Mitch and Miranda will
become a pair. I believe Mitch sees her as one he can trust--almost
like an informant but ever now and then he throws in a bit of accusations
to make it look good.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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I liked this chapter very much, Gretchen. It had a complete
different, but still great, feel to it. I liked how it showed the
feelings of the three main characters. Waylon seemed to have
matured a bit as he took in all that had happened. Aaron seemed
to be harboring something from his past which caused the reaction
to Ed's death. Miranda showed ore of her caring side as the result
of the same. She and her mother have each other figured out, but
still care for one another. I don't believe Mitch and Miranda will
become a pair. I believe Mitch sees her as one he can trust--almost
like an informant but ever now and then he throws in a bit of accusations
to make it look good.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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I do like how the chemistry is between Mitch and Miranda. Don't know where it's going but who knows. Thanks so much for this insightful review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
This is a six star development if ever there was one. I love your characters. I've said that before, but they come off so delightfully well (to a student-writer). There is so much to learn from how you massage your characters into and out of situations and they grow so enormously in the process. Aaron is one of those characters. He started out a "creep" in his own right and now I find him worthy of my true love, Miranda! I feel like a daddy letting them go on the first date and not be cleaning the shotgun when he brings her home.
Great job, Gretchen. Start looking for a market for this one.
Jay
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is a six star development if ever there was one. I love your characters. I've said that before, but they come off so delightfully well (to a student-writer). There is so much to learn from how you massage your characters into and out of situations and they grow so enormously in the process. Aaron is one of those characters. He started out a "creep" in his own right and now I find him worthy of my true love, Miranda! I feel like a daddy letting them go on the first date and not be cleaning the shotgun when he brings her home.
Great job, Gretchen. Start looking for a market for this one.
Jay
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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You are making me blush. I'm stoked you are enjoying this story. But you, my friend, are no student. So cut that crap. Lol. Thank you so much for this awesome review and wonderful rating. I greatly appreciate it. Gretchen
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No, no, I do learn from good writing. From yours, I learn timing from your exquisite dialogue.
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That's why Fanstory is a good place. We can learn from each other.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I don't see normal in Miranda's near future or either far future for that matter. LOL I am really liking this story. i kind of like the sheriff and Miranda together, is he married? I remember he has children. Thank you for sharing it with us. This is another really good read.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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I don't see normal in Miranda's near future or either far future for that matter. LOL I am really liking this story. i kind of like the sheriff and Miranda together, is he married? I remember he has children. Thank you for sharing it with us. This is another really good read.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for this review. I like Mitch too. Think he would be good for Miranda. But I honestly don't know what is going to happen. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Love it! So I take it they didn't mention the other body they found. I love the way Miranda treats every situation. I know that she is a reflection of your personality and I would love to be your best friend. lol. The conversations are so real and meaningful in this chapter. Well done, Gretchen. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Love it! So I take it they didn't mention the other body they found. I love the way Miranda treats every situation. I know that she is a reflection of your personality and I would love to be your best friend. lol. The conversations are so real and meaningful in this chapter. Well done, Gretchen. Nancy:)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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They kept the reason for their diving adventure to themselves. That's going to be another chapter. Thanks so much for another wonderful review and the extra star. Appreciate it very much. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
Loved this chapter, Gretchen. Your wit is abounding, and a smile comes to my lips with every read. The hallmark card comment made me chuckle. Brilliant, my friend! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Loved this chapter, Gretchen. Your wit is abounding, and a smile comes to my lips with every read. The hallmark card comment made me chuckle. Brilliant, my friend! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much, John. I really appreciate your awesome review. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
This was a great chapter. Well done, once again. The hand down in his pants...my goodness! You are graphic at times, hehe. Keep it all coming. No spags.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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This was a great chapter. Well done, once again. The hand down in his pants...my goodness! You are graphic at times, hehe. Keep it all coming. No spags.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much. I'm really happy you're enjoying this. Reviews like yours are inspiring and keep me writing. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Another well-written chapter with more developments - is the cop really interested in her? That would possibly complicate matters. Her mother knows her daughter through and through - it's one drama to the next. A fine read.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Another well-written chapter with more developments - is the cop really interested in her? That would possibly complicate matters. Her mother knows her daughter through and through - it's one drama to the next. A fine read.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for this awesome review. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
It's nice that Miranda can be so frank and open with her mother. It seems her mother knows her pretty well. I sure hope Aaron showers before eating dinner with them. Waylon did. I wonder why Aaron thought that Mitch was interested in Miranda. Relationships are getting complicated!
Suggestion:
"Yes. I'm still taking care of that boy?" (period instead of question mark)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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It's nice that Miranda can be so frank and open with her mother. It seems her mother knows her pretty well. I sure hope Aaron showers before eating dinner with them. Waylon did. I wonder why Aaron thought that Mitch was interested in Miranda. Relationships are getting complicated!
Suggestion:
"Yes. I'm still taking care of that boy?" (period instead of question mark)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the spag check. I appreciate it. I'm glad you are enjoying this odd little story. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
What truly is normal in anyone's life. I mean, just when we think things are going along with some semblance of normal, we know everything is about to blow all to hell. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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What truly is normal in anyone's life. I mean, just when we think things are going along with some semblance of normal, we know everything is about to blow all to hell. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Normal is boring. Always was always will be. Thanks for this great review. Gretchen
Comment from lancellot
This is a good chapter. Speaking of chapters, just so people don't skip or miss one, will you be placing this in book form?
notes:
"He was. Did I like him? No. Do I think he deserved to die? No."
- At first I thought this didn't make any sense. Why tell Aaron all that, if not say he deserved it? Then, I got it. This shows that Miranda does stupid things just like normal people. Good idea.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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This is a good chapter. Speaking of chapters, just so people don't skip or miss one, will you be placing this in book form?
notes:
"He was. Did I like him? No. Do I think he deserved to die? No."
- At first I thought this didn't make any sense. Why tell Aaron all that, if not say he deserved it? Then, I got it. This shows that Miranda does stupid things just like normal people. Good idea.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2022
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Miranda is just like the rest of us. Doing the best she can. Thank you again for this wonderful review. Gretchen
