Suffering is...
Life is full of suffering.29 total reviews
Comment from Leah M Hege Scott/LeeStarr
This piece creates imagery with each word. The cumulative effect combines all the raw feeling embedded in each of those images. Over all it made me sad. I felt the author intended to evoke at least that response, so good work! Free style it is. I missed the structure tho.
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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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This piece creates imagery with each word. The cumulative effect combines all the raw feeling embedded in each of those images. Over all it made me sad. I felt the author intended to evoke at least that response, so good work! Free style it is. I missed the structure tho.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Structure is the cross. It is free style. Thank you for reading.
Comment from J L Graves
This is a profound, both in words and in pictures. It speaks so much to the human condition and the suffering all around. The outline of the cross in the form of the words gives an extra edge. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This is a profound, both in words and in pictures. It speaks so much to the human condition and the suffering all around. The outline of the cross in the form of the words gives an extra edge. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thanks so much. I will agree. :-)
Comment from Mariana Convery
I really like this. I'm generally not a fan of free form, but I like the fact that you use a Whitmanesque quality of cataloging without adding any commentary. It's simply ubiquitous. Love how you played with the font. Really great job with this.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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I really like this. I'm generally not a fan of free form, but I like the fact that you use a Whitmanesque quality of cataloging without adding any commentary. It's simply ubiquitous. Love how you played with the font. Really great job with this.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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That?s very nice. Thank you
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Mankind has been causing suffering and death since the beginning of time. Your presentation, words, and placing all the suffering in the shape of a cross are brilliant and creative.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Mankind has been causing suffering and death since the beginning of time. Your presentation, words, and placing all the suffering in the shape of a cross are brilliant and creative.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your poem, Kaiku.
I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation was
awesome. I like the idea of a shape poem, and
the words you chose fit the theme well.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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You did a great job with your poem, Kaiku.
I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation was
awesome. I like the idea of a shape poem, and
the words you chose fit the theme well.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you. For me the ?shape? poem all started many years ago when reading, ?A Leaf Falling?
The words of the poem fell like a leaf. It has just stuck with me.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. Man has been suffering and doing each other wrong since the beginning of time. I don't know what it'll take to stop it. I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. Man has been suffering and doing each other wrong since the beginning of time. I don't know what it'll take to stop it. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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You are welcome. Thank you for reading.
Comment from susand3022
We'd like to think that there is always hope, Author, after all, it was the only thing left at the bottom of Pandora's box. I'm beginning to wonder, these days, if someone's gotten hold of said box, and just tossed the lid to one side.
Susan
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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We'd like to think that there is always hope, Author, after all, it was the only thing left at the bottom of Pandora's box. I'm beginning to wonder, these days, if someone's gotten hold of said box, and just tossed the lid to one side.
Susan
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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For sure. Thank you for your thoughts.
Comment from Bill Schott
This concrete poem, Suffering is..., lists all of the horrors we may know or simply remember at once. Mankind, featured at the end, may be the basis of all suffering.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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This concrete poem, Suffering is..., lists all of the horrors we may know or simply remember at once. Mankind, featured at the end, may be the basis of all suffering.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you have now 5 votes!
Life is full of suffering and what makes it even more so tragic is that it doesn't have to be that way , but our leaders are corrupt and greed fuels most of people s actions.
We even go against our own well-being .. we continue to exploit Mother Nature s resources and now we reap what we have sown: pollution , climate change.
Our planet is dying and if our leaders don't start caring , man s sufferings will be more.
PS: you didn't put on your list FAMINE in Africa .
You put war shouldn't that englobe Ukraine?
DISEASE : There is another serious out break of Ebola in Uganda.
Child labour ??
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Ciao poet, you have now 5 votes!
Life is full of suffering and what makes it even more so tragic is that it doesn't have to be that way , but our leaders are corrupt and greed fuels most of people s actions.
We even go against our own well-being .. we continue to exploit Mother Nature s resources and now we reap what we have sown: pollution , climate change.
Our planet is dying and if our leaders don't start caring , man s sufferings will be more.
PS: you didn't put on your list FAMINE in Africa .
You put war shouldn't that englobe Ukraine?
DISEASE : There is another serious out break of Ebola in Uganda.
Child labour ??
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Yes, there are a number of missing parts to the cross. Thank you
Comment from Wendy G
I can see why all those things are included on your list of people or things to do with suffering. Yet some are the causes of suffering, others are the recipients of injustices leading to suffering. They are not differentiated, and I wonder if they should be?
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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I can see why all those things are included on your list of people or things to do with suffering. Yet some are the causes of suffering, others are the recipients of injustices leading to suffering. They are not differentiated, and I wonder if they should be?
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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You are correct. The overall message is that we suffer from many different angles and reasons. Thank you for your comments.
