Vibrations
A Diatelle Poem28 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you have two votes now!
Something fresh and original. Very enjoyable.
The orchestra and its many opponents. Love how each instrument entices the next one to follow suit .
Each has its own unique sound and together they create a beautiful melody.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Ciao mystery poet, you have two votes now!
Something fresh and original. Very enjoyable.
The orchestra and its many opponents. Love how each instrument entices the next one to follow suit .
Each has its own unique sound and together they create a beautiful melody.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Tempests, Gracias
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Sorry for typo .
Components not opponents.
Comment from Celyn
This poem certainly fulfills the requirements of a diatelle poem and describes the beginning of a piece of music well. I like your use of words such as zing, teasing and seducing, and your rhyming is good throughout except you have used 'in' twice as a rhyme alongside 'within'. I would have tried to make the rhyming a bit more varied if I could.
Good luck with it
Celyn
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This poem certainly fulfills the requirements of a diatelle poem and describes the beginning of a piece of music well. I like your use of words such as zing, teasing and seducing, and your rhyming is good throughout except you have used 'in' twice as a rhyme alongside 'within'. I would have tried to make the rhyming a bit more varied if I could.
Good luck with it
Celyn
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Celyn thanks
Comment from Wendy G
Very nice! I really like your diatelle, and particularly your theme. It's supported by a fine image, a good choice. Sending best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Very nice! I really like your diatelle, and particularly your theme. It's supported by a fine image, a good choice. Sending best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the validation and good wishes.
Comment from Heather Burroughs
This is a great poem and meets the criteria of the contest. For me, the font was a little difficult to read but other than that it's beautifully written. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This is a great poem and meets the criteria of the contest. For me, the font was a little difficult to read but other than that it's beautifully written. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Sorry the font was an issue, thanks for your feedback.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I enjoyed reading. It seems to me, I am not a poet, though, that you met the poetic form, and nothing seemed forced.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I enjoyed reading. It seems to me, I am not a poet, though, that you met the poetic form, and nothing seemed forced.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you Barbara!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a lovely poem, enhanced by the picture. Such a difficult poem to write-and you really did it well. I could hear each instrument clearly. One suggestion: In the longest line, if the subject is oboe and French horn, the verb that follows would be "are."
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This is a lovely poem, enhanced by the picture. Such a difficult poem to write-and you really did it well. I could hear each instrument clearly. One suggestion: In the longest line, if the subject is oboe and French horn, the verb that follows would be "are."
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Verna, thank you for your honest and thoughtful feedback.
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
It seems I am introduced to a new form of poetry almost weekly on Fanstory. A diatelle is something that I did not know existed. You appear to have nailed the form requirements and did so with a poem that I found to be quite entertaining. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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It seems I am introduced to a new form of poetry almost weekly on Fanstory. A diatelle is something that I did not know existed. You appear to have nailed the form requirements and did so with a poem that I found to be quite entertaining. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Charles, hang around, you will surely see modern and archaic poetry challenges throughout the year. FS is truly a great platform with so much talent displayed from the closet writer to the published professional.
Comment from Janet Foor
It was a joy to read your diatelle poem for the Diatelle poem contest. The theme and the presentation were excellent along with the well chosen words to bring the orchestra alive.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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It was a joy to read your diatelle poem for the Diatelle poem contest. The theme and the presentation were excellent along with the well chosen words to bring the orchestra alive.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Janet, thank you.
Comment from royowen
This is a great description of a classical instrument group with some strings, wind and of course, the piano to give it a complete instrument to lead this orchestral group, beautifully written my friend, exact syllable count Ana articulate delivery, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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This is a great description of a classical instrument group with some strings, wind and of course, the piano to give it a complete instrument to lead this orchestral group, beautifully written my friend, exact syllable count Ana articulate delivery, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Smiling back with a bit of Leonard Cohan belting out some sounds in the background.
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Oh yeah
Comment from JoannaN
This poem has a nice rhytm and a good graphical structure to accompany it. This is also very musical and smooth, I can imagine a little song created exactly in the way you describe in your poem. Good job :)
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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This poem has a nice rhytm and a good graphical structure to accompany it. This is also very musical and smooth, I can imagine a little song created exactly in the way you describe in your poem. Good job :)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Joanna, thanks
