The Walkers
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Comment from Zue65
Wow, this is really interesting. My very first encounter of a story about a war between God's warriors and Satan's demons. The writer has a prolific imagination, indicative of his creative craftmanship. I will look forward to your next post. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Wow, this is really interesting. My very first encounter of a story about a war between God's warriors and Satan's demons. The writer has a prolific imagination, indicative of his creative craftmanship. I will look forward to your next post. Keep writing.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words! I'll be by to read.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from BethShelby
I always enjoy reading this story. It is different for other things we read on FanStory. You are doing a good job with it as these characters are always walking and fighting demons.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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I always enjoy reading this story. It is different for other things we read on FanStory. You are doing a good job with it as these characters are always walking and fighting demons.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2022
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Hi, Beth/. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Douglas Goff
You are a creative mind aren't you.
Couple of fine tune suggestions:
Dibs on the water," Cal starts to peel off her weapons and then stops. "I don't have any other clothes."
(water." Cal starts ) no action speaking word so use a period
"Yes, you do," Michael points to the lean-to. "Everything you and Cris left in Tennessee is in there."
(you do." Michael points)
Period instead of comma for same reason above.
Also:
People almost always speak in contractions because it comes naturally:
They will be able to triangulate our
(They'll)
He whispers, "Well, we're on high alert in this area, and that will make things interesting."
(that'll)
Just my two cents.
Awesome chapter. Very interesting work you are doing here. Thanks!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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You are a creative mind aren't you.
Couple of fine tune suggestions:
Dibs on the water," Cal starts to peel off her weapons and then stops. "I don't have any other clothes."
(water." Cal starts ) no action speaking word so use a period
"Yes, you do," Michael points to the lean-to. "Everything you and Cris left in Tennessee is in there."
(you do." Michael points)
Period instead of comma for same reason above.
Also:
People almost always speak in contractions because it comes naturally:
They will be able to triangulate our
(They'll)
He whispers, "Well, we're on high alert in this area, and that will make things interesting."
(that'll)
Just my two cents.
Awesome chapter. Very interesting work you are doing here. Thanks!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2022
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Hi, Douglas. Thank you for your kind words and help with this chapter. It's deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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This was a great read!
Comment from BOO ghost
The angels and walkers? Sounds like an intriguing novel. I'm curious.
Now, for the meat and potatoes. Thanks for posting the cast of characters. Good idea. It helps. I just kinda jumped in. BOO is guilty as sin for missing a few chapters. But I been gone years and joined a few moons ago. I can't expect to know what's transpiring missing chapters.
The Warriors stand before their final destination after traveling eight thousand four hundred miles from a small town in Tennessee.
Wow! They must sailed on a cog ship to cross the Atlantic.
"I thought central Mississippi was the worst place I've seen, but it was nothing like this."
Hahaha! I got to chuckle. BOO lives in northern Mississippi. I concur, it's not the best state to I live in.
Story flows nicely. Seems like Armageddon is on the horizon and angels battle demons at the Euphrates river in Iraq. Persia.
"The Holy Spirit flows through you, Cris. I think you're right, and he'll be back."
Right! the devil will be back with a vengeance..You can only lock him into purgatory for a season. He's in dreams too! He's a wizard.
Nice chapter. I would have to rewind and start on chapter one to not be lost. Nice plot. Like the abundance of characters. I like lots of characters in books. Good luck finishing this gem!
Count your lucky stars!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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The angels and walkers? Sounds like an intriguing novel. I'm curious.
Now, for the meat and potatoes. Thanks for posting the cast of characters. Good idea. It helps. I just kinda jumped in. BOO is guilty as sin for missing a few chapters. But I been gone years and joined a few moons ago. I can't expect to know what's transpiring missing chapters.
The Warriors stand before their final destination after traveling eight thousand four hundred miles from a small town in Tennessee.
Wow! They must sailed on a cog ship to cross the Atlantic.
"I thought central Mississippi was the worst place I've seen, but it was nothing like this."
Hahaha! I got to chuckle. BOO lives in northern Mississippi. I concur, it's not the best state to I live in.
Story flows nicely. Seems like Armageddon is on the horizon and angels battle demons at the Euphrates river in Iraq. Persia.
"The Holy Spirit flows through you, Cris. I think you're right, and he'll be back."
Right! the devil will be back with a vengeance..You can only lock him into purgatory for a season. He's in dreams too! He's a wizard.
Nice chapter. I would have to rewind and start on chapter one to not be lost. Nice plot. Like the abundance of characters. I like lots of characters in books. Good luck finishing this gem!
Count your lucky stars!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Hi, BOO. I've always wanted to say that. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from royowen
Our heroes are in Northern India, in the southern part of the Himalayas on a trail of the evil one and all his antics, antiquity and wicked doings, but our heavenly host will sort out all these problems, well done Mike, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Our heroes are in Northern India, in the southern part of the Himalayas on a trail of the evil one and all his antics, antiquity and wicked doings, but our heavenly host will sort out all these problems, well done Mike, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Hi, Roy. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Most welcome Mike
Comment from Wendy G
I haven't read any of the previous chapters so I'm coming in cold - but I found it very different from just about everything else I have read, and it was both original and intriguing. The incorporation of a visible spiritual reality is a great idea. You write very well and clearly, and I am looking forward to reading more.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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I haven't read any of the previous chapters so I'm coming in cold - but I found it very different from just about everything else I have read, and it was both original and intriguing. The incorporation of a visible spiritual reality is a great idea. You write very well and clearly, and I am looking forward to reading more.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thanks again!
Comment from wierdgrace
I forgot to save my comment, I just got back to fanstory so I am behind in reading, I will start this book, well done, it made me want to read the past chapters, and the ending, thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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I forgot to save my comment, I just got back to fanstory so I am behind in reading, I will start this book, well done, it made me want to read the past chapters, and the ending, thank you for sharing
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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you are so welcome, can't wait to read all
Comment from country ranch writer
Put a Sex warning on your story if talking about sex in your story fir we gave you readers. The portal can be dangerous .
Satan is up to his trucks,
11/14/2022--5:15 pm
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Put a Sex warning on your story if talking about sex in your story fir we gave you readers. The portal can be dangerous .
Satan is up to his trucks,
11/14/2022--5:15 pm
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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hugs
Comment from country ranch writer
Put a Sex warning on your story if talking about sex in your story fir we gave you readers. The portal can be dangerous .
Satan is up to his trucks,
11/14/2022--5:15 pm
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Put a Sex warning on your story if talking about sex in your story fir we gave you readers. The portal can be dangerous .
Satan is up to his trucks,
11/14/2022--5:15 pm
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thanks again!
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hugs
