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Comment from Ulla
Marival, it's such a wonderful tanka poem. Your words are magic and the pivot line is so well executed that's it's hardly noticeable. I loved the imagery. So many could learn from this, me included. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Marival, it's such a wonderful tanka poem. Your words are magic and the pivot line is so well executed that's it's hardly noticeable. I loved the imagery. So many could learn from this, me included. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much, Ulla, you are very kind and I appreciate your time and effort. Have an awesome day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
These first two lines are perfect for imagery:
Dusk slips through the window
dressed in silver dust and dreams
The writing doesn't get any better than that. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I really enjoyed the complete package.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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These first two lines are perfect for imagery:
Dusk slips through the window
dressed in silver dust and dreams
The writing doesn't get any better than that. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I really enjoyed the complete package.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Muchisimas gracias, Barbara, It's always good to hear from you and I appreciate all your reviews. Have a wonderful weekend!
Gypsy hugs
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe
Comment from BOO ghost
I read the author notes and it helps tremendously. You are some posting machine!
My two cents worth...nice alliteration trio in the first stanza. I don't use alliteration writing prose. The fundamental rules say no alliterations writing prose.
A pretty presentation. You are good at blending word colors. You a word weaver. Create a bouquet of words. Wish I knew more about a Tanka. I haven't written poems in years. But I do recall some types of poetry. I'm no master any longer. No sense in posting poems now when the year is almost up! Boy, I can see it's a competition to get trophies. Everyone wants to be #1 and get that trophy. Good luck!
BOOTASTIC!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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I read the author notes and it helps tremendously. You are some posting machine!
My two cents worth...nice alliteration trio in the first stanza. I don't use alliteration writing prose. The fundamental rules say no alliterations writing prose.
A pretty presentation. You are good at blending word colors. You a word weaver. Create a bouquet of words. Wish I knew more about a Tanka. I haven't written poems in years. But I do recall some types of poetry. I'm no master any longer. No sense in posting poems now when the year is almost up! Boy, I can see it's a competition to get trophies. Everyone wants to be #1 and get that trophy. Good luck!
BOOTASTIC!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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word weaver... i love that name... thank you!
Thank you very much, Boo, It's always good to hear from you and I appreciate all your reviews. Have a wonderful weekend!
Gypsy hugs
"Love the ones who understand you and forget the ones that don't." - Nikki Rowe
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Well, tomorrow is the last day for my murder contest entry. I will have to go to the library. I am limited on my android and can't add cool pictures or add a video link. Looks generic right now. I am earning member cent pumps. I been gone too many years. A heap of my loyal fans left or died. It seems. So, I'm not expecting to win. I'm posting out of self satisfaction. You enjoy your weekend, gypsy Queen 👑
Comment from lyenochka
As always you invoke all the senses from vision of dusk "dressed in silver dust" and the sound of "woken by pebbles on glass" as the lover gets the attention of the beloved throwing pebbles on the glass windows to commence their "clandestine love."
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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As always you invoke all the senses from vision of dusk "dressed in silver dust" and the sound of "woken by pebbles on glass" as the lover gets the attention of the beloved throwing pebbles on the glass windows to commence their "clandestine love."
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much, big sister. I'm glad you got the meaning of the pebbles on the glass, I don't think everybody gets it.
Love,
Marival ❤️
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I had to think about it, and then it hit me - Oh! That's right! The window!
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your exceptional Tanka poem- good picture presentation- intelligent poem - ties itself to the picture- excellent metaphors- dust -dressed in silver dust- like last rays of sunlight shinning through- clandestine- nice - describing secret - defined in notes-and my favorite- love woken by pebbles hitting the glass- very nice work!! Good job
AP
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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I like your exceptional Tanka poem- good picture presentation- intelligent poem - ties itself to the picture- excellent metaphors- dust -dressed in silver dust- like last rays of sunlight shinning through- clandestine- nice - describing secret - defined in notes-and my favorite- love woken by pebbles hitting the glass- very nice work!! Good job
AP
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Ap, thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words. I appreciate it.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Very well done!!
The poem takes us out of the ordinary life and clearly describes the feeling and expectation of ( clandestine) love coming with dusk.
I liked it.
Mario
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Very well done!!
The poem takes us out of the ordinary life and clearly describes the feeling and expectation of ( clandestine) love coming with dusk.
I liked it.
Mario
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from JoannaN
This is a gentle, delicate poem. You succeeded in capturing the lovely, short scene of a day tranforming into a night, like a meeting of two lovers. Your tankas have a great quality to them.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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This is a gentle, delicate poem. You succeeded in capturing the lovely, short scene of a day tranforming into a night, like a meeting of two lovers. Your tankas have a great quality to them.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2022
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
