Stories from Morrison
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bill,
The Three Little Pigs was never this good!
Loved the names of the trio of aliens, as well as what they made their shelters from. I must say, they are truly crafty, and opportunistic. They probably found all their building supplies at the dump.
But it makes me wonder. Why not stay in their spaceship? Did they crash and burn at a Roswell ranch?
I can't imagine their "wolf" was a snake. You probably wrote this in code, eh? And the snake is code for "men in black". Those aliens didn't stand a chance with those hoodlums.
"Before we die, I need to tell you guys something," said Handsome Hal.
So, this is the unanswered question. It zipped over my head. I can't imagine what Hal was going to tell his buddies. Are you going to let the secret out of the bag?
You have quite an imagination, Bill. I'm impressed. There must be more to this story, or is there less to this story???
Thanks for sharing!
Kimbob
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Hi Bill,
The Three Little Pigs was never this good!
Loved the names of the trio of aliens, as well as what they made their shelters from. I must say, they are truly crafty, and opportunistic. They probably found all their building supplies at the dump.
But it makes me wonder. Why not stay in their spaceship? Did they crash and burn at a Roswell ranch?
I can't imagine their "wolf" was a snake. You probably wrote this in code, eh? And the snake is code for "men in black". Those aliens didn't stand a chance with those hoodlums.
"Before we die, I need to tell you guys something," said Handsome Hal.
So, this is the unanswered question. It zipped over my head. I can't imagine what Hal was going to tell his buddies. Are you going to let the secret out of the bag?
You have quite an imagination, Bill. I'm impressed. There must be more to this story, or is there less to this story???
Thanks for sharing!
Kimbob
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Was it that you picked out everyone's name, including your own?
Ghoul Stool Vegematic Handsome Hal
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I went for a 3-mile walk on the Grand Bay Trail, Bill, and I think I figured it out. You were making a point that aliens have been visiting Earth since God created Adam and Eve. That naked woman was Eve. And this alien picnic happened before the snake tempted Eve with the forbidden fruit. That's why she was naked. It was after she ate the fruit that she knew she was naked. Snakes will eat anything. They don't even chew.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
You know Bill, I have to say your story and take on the Three Little Pigs, give me a moment to pause not because I did not understand or wonder what the hell... But I found it imaginative, clever, and reminds me of the "Farside" comics that I could not get enough of.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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You know Bill, I have to say your story and take on the Three Little Pigs, give me a moment to pause not because I did not understand or wonder what the hell... But I found it imaginative, clever, and reminds me of the "Farside" comics that I could not get enough of.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Mary
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Bill,
I like your well-told story with a twist on the 3 little pigs fable.
You write well, Bill.
Good luck in the contest and all of your writing.
Blessings, Cindy
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Bill,
I like your well-told story with a twist on the 3 little pigs fable.
You write well, Bill.
Good luck in the contest and all of your writing.
Blessings, Cindy
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Cindy.
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You?re, Welcome, Bill.
Comment from royowen
What a brilliant and hilarious story my friend, just love the name of "Four-handfuls-of-ghoul-stool, and Handsome Hal, and particularly the brilliant and cunning snake, who's a real survivor, he'll never be hungry, well done Bill, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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What a brilliant and hilarious story my friend, just love the name of "Four-handfuls-of-ghoul-stool, and Handsome Hal, and particularly the brilliant and cunning snake, who's a real survivor, he'll never be hungry, well done Bill, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Roy, for the great review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
It's official. You have a weird imagination and I love it! I loved the random lady walking by. The line "Not by the fibers on our ventral mandibles." is a cracker as is the ending that wraps it up with such finality. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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It's official. You have a weird imagination and I love it! I loved the random lady walking by. The line "Not by the fibers on our ventral mandibles." is a cracker as is the ending that wraps it up with such finality. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Malcolm, for the great review.
Comment from J L Graves
This is a hilarious story. I loved the play on the Three Little Pigs. The names fit the characters, and it flowed smoothly and delightfully. Thank you for sharing! It made my day!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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This is a hilarious story. I loved the play on the Three Little Pigs. The names fit the characters, and it flowed smoothly and delightfully. Thank you for sharing! It made my day!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thanks, JL.
Comment from eliz100
I am one of the people who does not know the answer, I am feeling a little inferior. Is this the same snake from the previous story? Your story is well written and I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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I am one of the people who does not know the answer, I am feeling a little inferior. Is this the same snake from the previous story? Your story is well written and I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Yes, Handsome Hal would have chosen his own name and given the others their less than stellar ones.
Comment from susand3022
Bill, you're killing me here! Really, the names you come up with. What are you on? "What's-this-in-the-Vegimatic?" That's just too much! What were you doing... cleaning the kitchen cupboards?
Susan :)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Bill, you're killing me here! Really, the names you come up with. What are you on? "What's-this-in-the-Vegimatic?" That's just too much! What were you doing... cleaning the kitchen cupboards?
Susan :)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Just thought it funny at the time.
Comment from BethShelby
I know these stories are designed to make me crack up laughing. Other than that there is a lot I don't know, like what you were drinking when you composed them. Whether or not the snake is the protagnist in all the stories and who is Morrison? I enjoyed this fresh take on the three little pig story. One of the funnest lines was when the naked lady walked by from the creation story.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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I know these stories are designed to make me crack up laughing. Other than that there is a lot I don't know, like what you were drinking when you composed them. Whether or not the snake is the protagnist in all the stories and who is Morrison? I enjoyed this fresh take on the three little pig story. One of the funnest lines was when the naked lady walked by from the creation story.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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The collection of stories requires naming a book to put them in. I thought that Morrison would fit in somewhere, but I have since reconsidered. I'll likely change the title.
Comment from BOO ghost
I hate a slithering snake. A naked lady came by, but that's another story. Hahaha!
Kinda reminds me of the big bad wolf and three pigs. The snake is the wolf and the aliens are the pigs.
Nice dialogue.
Bad ending for the aliens.
BOOtastic!
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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I hate a slithering snake. A naked lady came by, but that's another story. Hahaha!
Kinda reminds me of the big bad wolf and three pigs. The snake is the wolf and the aliens are the pigs.
Nice dialogue.
Bad ending for the aliens.
BOOtastic!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2022
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Thanks, Boo. I may give the aliens a better ending. : )
