My Effort
Living in general is hard.5 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I like it. And I'm not even a poet.
I especially like how I can interpret it a number of ways.
I most especially like your rhyming of suffer and hug her. That works uniquely great!
asume (assume)
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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I like it. And I'm not even a poet.
I especially like how I can interpret it a number of ways.
I most especially like your rhyming of suffer and hug her. That works uniquely great!
asume (assume)
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your comment. I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem. Having to interpret poems in many ways always intrigued me. The half rhymes oddly come naturally. Usually I read my poems outloud and it helps with trying to improve the flow. Thanks for the help (assume). I did press spell check and forgot to check myself.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, Daniel. Welcome to FanStory and congratulations with jumping into this contest with your first post.
There is a touch of 'stream of consciousness' about your poem which marks it as different from the usual Minute poems we see here. That and the half-rhymes you use may give the judges food for thought. It may also make it a little harder for the average Joe to understand fully as the meaning is open to interpretation in places.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Hi, Daniel. Welcome to FanStory and congratulations with jumping into this contest with your first post.
There is a touch of 'stream of consciousness' about your poem which marks it as different from the usual Minute poems we see here. That and the half-rhymes you use may give the judges food for thought. It may also make it a little harder for the average Joe to understand fully as the meaning is open to interpretation in places.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you. I saw Fanstory in my email yesterday and thought, why not. I have been on other sites but trying a little bit of everything to pursue my dream as a writer. I enjoy the half-rhymes. I try to include them in any poem I can. It's fascinating. Having different views in a poem, I feel, brings a lot of character into the poem. Thank you once ahead and hope to see your comment on a future post. I appreciate that you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think this is a very personal write about your life Daniel and we carve out a life and can never assume anyone is our friend until they show us kindness. Once we have a friend we need to nurture that mutual friendship. Your syllable count is perfect and you include near rhymes here. I know metre is not required for the contest, but some kind of rhythm helps a poem pop and this is missing here. I wish you luck with your writing and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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I think this is a very personal write about your life Daniel and we carve out a life and can never assume anyone is our friend until they show us kindness. Once we have a friend we need to nurture that mutual friendship. Your syllable count is perfect and you include near rhymes here. I know metre is not required for the contest, but some kind of rhythm helps a poem pop and this is missing here. I wish you luck with your writing and welcome to Fanstory, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your comment. Yes this was actually personal. Holding friendship is tough to keep but with the wrong person it can change alot of views going forward. Writing and venting go hand in hand I feel like from my experience. I tried hard with the rhythm but I had not much time since I only discovered this website last night. I am happy with the results and zealous that I finished in time. I am glad that you enjoyed my poem. Thank you once again for your honesty and feedback.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a Minute Poetry Contest Entry about life.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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This is a Minute Poetry Contest Entry about life.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned most Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your comment. I am usually used to 1,000 word stories like on Reedsyprompts. I appreciate that you enjoyed the read. I tried my best to fit so much into a minute poem and happy with the result. Thank You once again.
Comment from Gloria ....
Very well done here, Daniel. Your theme is original and includes a wide view of your life or a life.
Excellent slant rhymes making your minute poem a strong contender in the contest.
Welcome to FanStory. I am sure you will enjoy your time here, and best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Very well done here, Daniel. Your theme is original and includes a wide view of your life or a life.
Excellent slant rhymes making your minute poem a strong contender in the contest.
Welcome to FanStory. I am sure you will enjoy your time here, and best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your comment. Yes this does revolve around my life in a sense. This is my first poem written on this page. I am happy people are enjoying the poem. Thank you for the read I will look forward into using this site a bit more often.
