What Do You Think ?
Dialogue Contest16 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed reading this conversation between these two characters. Who knows what could have happened if they had chosen to follow the light instead of just going out for ice cream? Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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I enjoyed reading this conversation between these two characters. Who knows what could have happened if they had chosen to follow the light instead of just going out for ice cream? Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2022
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The bigger challenge was to find nothing more than what they saw for they had agreed to be home by ten. Thanks for the read and comment.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Writing dialog only isn't an easy task. But it sure gets easier when your breezing through the lines on your way to Ben and Jerry's for a dip or two. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Writing dialog only isn't an easy task. But it sure gets easier when your breezing through the lines on your way to Ben and Jerry's for a dip or two. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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I see and thank you for staying busy today. It would be so easy to fall asleep on the sofa listening to endless football calls. I know. It's what I've been doing since 1pm
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice concept.
I doubt that a speaker (dialogue only) would say "I. D. K."
What if it is overcast? And raining? - Read this aloud and see if you wouldn't contract 'it is'.
Besides, mother told us to be in by ten. - I've never met anyone who would say 'mother' like this. But maybe it's just me. Maybe most people say "Mother told us..."
Being kids, I'd guess that the answer to your last question would be Sonic, Tastee Freeze, Dairy Queen...
Sorry, but I just don't hear kids on bikes speaking like this.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Nice concept.
I doubt that a speaker (dialogue only) would say "I. D. K."
What if it is overcast? And raining? - Read this aloud and see if you wouldn't contract 'it is'.
Besides, mother told us to be in by ten. - I've never met anyone who would say 'mother' like this. But maybe it's just me. Maybe most people say "Mother told us..."
Being kids, I'd guess that the answer to your last question would be Sonic, Tastee Freeze, Dairy Queen...
Sorry, but I just don't hear kids on bikes speaking like this.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Your first two suggestions were spot on and I have updated them.
Re-reading your suggestion from Ben and Jerry's is not uncommon in New Hampshire which is what I thought of with the posted picture. In suburban areas Dairy Queen would be likely, too.
Comment from karenina
Great idea to utilize the two fonts! A feel good piece just right to give me the warm fuzzies as I tuck into bed this very early Thanksgiving morning. (1:08 AM!)
Such innocence! Such light hearted banter!
I'm with you, Tom...
First star...every night...same wish.
(Peace!)
Sorry I blew through my six stars as I was so excited to be up and online again!
I'll make it up to you...
Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours!
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Great idea to utilize the two fonts! A feel good piece just right to give me the warm fuzzies as I tuck into bed this very early Thanksgiving morning. (1:08 AM!)
Such innocence! Such light hearted banter!
I'm with you, Tom...
First star...every night...same wish.
(Peace!)
Sorry I blew through my six stars as I was so excited to be up and online again!
I'll make it up to you...
Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours!
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Sleep tight and don't let the bedbugs bite, ya.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written dialogue you have penned for the contest. You used very good dialogue that read really smooth. The art work you chose went very well with your words. I used to wish on stars when I was little. I still love looking at the stars now. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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This is a very well written dialogue you have penned for the contest. You used very good dialogue that read really smooth. The art work you chose went very well with your words. I used to wish on stars when I was little. I still love looking at the stars now. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the read and comment. Happy Thanksgiving.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your fun contest entry, Tom.
I liked the way you formatted the lines
with the 2 fonts. The story was fun to
read--sounded just like real conversation.
I liked the picture. This reminded me of the
movie ET where they're flying through space
and the boy is on his bicycle.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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I enjoyed your fun contest entry, Tom.
I liked the way you formatted the lines
with the 2 fonts. The story was fun to
read--sounded just like real conversation.
I liked the picture. This reminded me of the
movie ET where they're flying through space
and the boy is on his bicycle.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
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Comment Written 23-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2022
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I always appreciate your reading me. Thanks. Have a grand Thanksgiving Day.
