Execution
An Indian massacre and its aftermath3 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice story (after a very bad start regarding the dead Indians)
the Colonel could fell the hatred of the company - feel?
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
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Very nice story (after a very bad start regarding the dead Indians)
the Colonel could fell the hatred of the company - feel?
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
Comment from Cass Carlton
Very good. Indeed. There are a few Spags which I have noted. Good Luck in the contest
he re(p)lied
sergeant spelt incorrectly
given "to" the firing squad
the colonel could "feel" the hatred You have written "fell"
cheers Cass
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Very good. Indeed. There are a few Spags which I have noted. Good Luck in the contest
he re(p)lied
sergeant spelt incorrectly
given "to" the firing squad
the colonel could "feel" the hatred You have written "fell"
cheers Cass
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have misspelled (fell) should be (feel) he could (feel) the hatred. Other than that, it is a lovely and well-executed story. I love the ending. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
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You have misspelled (fell) should be (feel) he could (feel) the hatred. Other than that, it is a lovely and well-executed story. I love the ending. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2022
