An Everyday Man
Narrative Poem about a Simple Man~28 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I find these prompts so interesting! So many ways to approach the seemingly odd sets of words and phrases and here you've put together a fine portrait of an unassuming man ~ someone who might be looked beyond, or over. Nice touch to highlight the phrases in a subtle way as you wrote. It's so nice to be able to track the phrases! Not sure if this one has come up for a vote or not, but this certainly appeals to me!
Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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I find these prompts so interesting! So many ways to approach the seemingly odd sets of words and phrases and here you've put together a fine portrait of an unassuming man ~ someone who might be looked beyond, or over. Nice touch to highlight the phrases in a subtle way as you wrote. It's so nice to be able to track the phrases! Not sure if this one has come up for a vote or not, but this certainly appeals to me!
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2022
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Boogienights won this one. I placed second. It's hard to win if she enters. Guess, I should be glad for second best. Thanks for the review.
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This is a winner in my book, Sandra. Exquisitely written! Love your photo by the way!
Comment from sunnilicious
Those are a lot of phrases to fit in... You accomplished it well. Everybody would like their children happy in marriage. Mark sounded like a handful. This alliteration stood apart as memorable to me: closely cropped crewcut. Best of luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Those are a lot of phrases to fit in... You accomplished it well. Everybody would like their children happy in marriage. Mark sounded like a handful. This alliteration stood apart as memorable to me: closely cropped crewcut. Best of luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 05-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is fantastic. I love the story you wove of this man whom I could completely picture and understand. He would be an everyman, but you made him stand out as special because you explained his backstory so beautifully.
Another fantastic example of your eagle eye for details and understanding humankind. xo
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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This is fantastic. I love the story you wove of this man whom I could completely picture and understand. He would be an everyman, but you made him stand out as special because you explained his backstory so beautifully.
Another fantastic example of your eagle eye for details and understanding humankind. xo
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Rach, for your supportive review.
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Always my pleasure!! I love your writing. xo
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Thank you
Comment from JLR
Sandra, want a lovely read this was this early am! As is anticipated when reading your offerings you always present a sweet gift all packaged with a ribbon and bow. such is the case with this "Everyday man" which you have woven in all the required phrases creating a take about the average "Joe Blow" that just makes his life simple, contained and plows through from day to day whatever comes his way. Fun, thank you!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Sandra, want a lovely read this was this early am! As is anticipated when reading your offerings you always present a sweet gift all packaged with a ribbon and bow. such is the case with this "Everyday man" which you have woven in all the required phrases creating a take about the average "Joe Blow" that just makes his life simple, contained and plows through from day to day whatever comes his way. Fun, thank you!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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JLR, I have missed seeing you on the site. Hope all is well. I appreciate your supportive comments and exceptional rating.
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Sandra, Thank you for asking. I am well, my absence is due to me jumping into the deep end of the pool without water wings. I have been working on a project for the Heroic Sonnet contest, a 7 part Italian sonnet as well as a Valentines Day love sonnet. The catch stone is I am NOT a sonnet writer, my genre is Free Verse typically. Probably more than you wanted to know? but again thank you, you are a great addition to FS.
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Never more than I want to know. i don't do chit-chat. i come from a genuine "want to know spot". I know we overextend ourselves because we love poetry and hate to say NO to poetic ventures. You will be a success. I speak it into being. Say that in the mirror every morning.
Comment from JoannaN
1) Congratulations on your 100th post on Fan Story :)
2) This was a hard task, and you managed it well, this poem contains all the phrases needed, but they work well with the rest and do not look strange.
3) Mark is an everyman, there are plenty of guys alike him.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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1) Congratulations on your 100th post on Fan Story :)
2) This was a hard task, and you managed it well, this poem contains all the phrases needed, but they work well with the rest and do not look strange.
3) Mark is an everyman, there are plenty of guys alike him.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the congrats and for the review. Yes, Mark is like many men we know.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You have painted a portrait of this ordinary man, using simple descriptions that allow us to know him and the small world he inhabits. What you see is what you get. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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You have painted a portrait of this ordinary man, using simple descriptions that allow us to know him and the small world he inhabits. What you see is what you get. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much, Ginda for your review.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
It takes a good deal of effort and thought to use this odd collection of somewhat 'unpoetic' words! Yet the writer succeeds in using them quite naturally in the context of the poem! More of a sense of rhythm would add to the overall effect.
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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It takes a good deal of effort and thought to use this odd collection of somewhat 'unpoetic' words! Yet the writer succeeds in using them quite naturally in the context of the poem! More of a sense of rhythm would add to the overall effect.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thanks for the review. What would you suggest creating more rhythm in my free verse poem?
Comment from lyenochka
You created a familiar portrait of this "Everyday Man" in your free verse while naturally weaving in those required phrases into your narrative poem. I think this will do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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You created a familiar portrait of this "Everyday Man" in your free verse while naturally weaving in those required phrases into your narrative poem. I think this will do well in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much for your review. People tend to like more whimsical poems than serious.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very nicely done! I enjoyed this immensely. It was not only creative (what choice did you have with those phrases), but this makes complete and total sense.
I salute you and appreciate your work!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Very nicely done! I enjoyed this immensely. It was not only creative (what choice did you have with those phrases), but this makes complete and total sense.
I salute you and appreciate your work!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much for your review. People tend to like more whimsical poems than serious.
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I enjoy both but my poetry is mostly nonsensical
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I enjoy both but my poetry is mostly nonsensical
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My poetry is raw and real! However, funny poetry makes me laugh.
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Yes it is. Raw, real, and real good!!!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like your story and the words fit nicely in each paragraph. Also, you highlighted the words, so they are easily readable. The story about this everyday man is quite interesting.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Like your story and the words fit nicely in each paragraph. Also, you highlighted the words, so they are easily readable. The story about this everyday man is quite interesting.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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Thank you for your review. What was interesting about this narrative poem?
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He sounds like a common man.
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He is, but that's fine. The world needs them too. Be blessed!
