The Miranda Chronicles
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Shot in the Dark (Miranda)"Miranda solves a mystery.
13 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Another action-filled post! First you engage the reader with the suspense that something bad could happen while Miranda is in the store alone and then something terrible does happen! Then you add humor by having the youngest of a family she babysat for is the deputy who is sent! Good idea to ask for Mitch!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Another action-filled post! First you engage the reader with the suspense that something bad could happen while Miranda is in the store alone and then something terrible does happen! Then you add humor by having the youngest of a family she babysat for is the deputy who is sent! Good idea to ask for Mitch!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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There is nothing more humbling than to see someone you babysat for as an adult. Lol. Thank you so much for this awesome and insightful review. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Why do I get the feeling that Miranda getting shot at it is just the beginning of trumped up action? And of course, the sheriff on the way to save a day, that doesn't need to be saved, adds to the collage. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Why do I get the feeling that Miranda getting shot at it is just the beginning of trumped up action? And of course, the sheriff on the way to save a day, that doesn't need to be saved, adds to the collage. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2022
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Things might geta bit crazy before they get calm again. Lol. Thanks so much for this great review. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, HHAHAHAHAAHAH!! Small town life at its finest!! I had a teacher-friend who, when she fell down the stairs one time, in the middle of the night, en route to the bathroom, she lay there, at the bottom of her stairs, naked, praying that she hadn't broken anything because all the ambulance corps volunteers had, one time or another, been students of hers. This chapter was SO spot-on reminiscent of that!!
I was definitely not expecting anything THIS enormous to happen!! Yikes! This is quite intense and shocking...but so meaty-good!! Even if I were reading this at 2 a.m. and had to be at work at 7 a.m., I would still definitely not put this book down at this chapter!! You're doing GREAT with the suspense factor. Great writing still again!!!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Oh, HHAHAHAHAAHAH!! Small town life at its finest!! I had a teacher-friend who, when she fell down the stairs one time, in the middle of the night, en route to the bathroom, she lay there, at the bottom of her stairs, naked, praying that she hadn't broken anything because all the ambulance corps volunteers had, one time or another, been students of hers. This chapter was SO spot-on reminiscent of that!!
I was definitely not expecting anything THIS enormous to happen!! Yikes! This is quite intense and shocking...but so meaty-good!! Even if I were reading this at 2 a.m. and had to be at work at 7 a.m., I would still definitely not put this book down at this chapter!! You're doing GREAT with the suspense factor. Great writing still again!!!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Wow. I love knowing my writing would make you sleepwalk through the next day. That scene may or may not have been a red herring. Does Missy own a gun? Probably, she's a good old Southern Redneck. Lol. But stuff like that happens randomly more often than not. Thank you so much for the awesome review. I really appreciate the stars. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
That would be scary, being shot at, and it makes it more difficult when there is a random shooter just cruising and taking advantage of a lone employee in a reasonably remote place, like the gas and go. Mitch is called, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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That would be scary, being shot at, and it makes it more difficult when there is a random shooter just cruising and taking advantage of a lone employee in a reasonably remote place, like the gas and go. Mitch is called, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thank you for this nice review and the kind words. I appreciate them. Gretchen
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Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story with us. I'm glad Miranda asked for Mitch. I know that was the right thing to do in many ways. LOL Mitch needs to comfort her.
Tonight it is quiet. (I would leave out 'it'.)
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thank you for sharing this story with us. I'm glad Miranda asked for Mitch. I know that was the right thing to do in many ways. LOL Mitch needs to comfort her.
Tonight it is quiet. (I would leave out 'it'.)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thanks so much, Barbara. We're you a teacher by chance. Because your suggestions are spot on. Love it. Thank you so much for this awesome review. Gretchen
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Yes, I'm a retired teacher.
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I knew it. Thank you so much from your new student. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
Ha! I had to chuckle at your ending to this chapter for relatable reasons. In a small world, age often reveals itself with uncomfortable reacquaintances, especially when your children's childhood friends are now in their late thirties. Nevertheless, this is an exciting chapter, Gretchen. Your ease of humor is so damn good! (I love it). Best JohnC
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Ha! I had to chuckle at your ending to this chapter for relatable reasons. In a small world, age often reveals itself with uncomfortable reacquaintances, especially when your children's childhood friends are now in their late thirties. Nevertheless, this is an exciting chapter, Gretchen. Your ease of humor is so damn good! (I love it). Best JohnC
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thank you. I'm sure a shrink would say I use humor as a defense tool. And I say why not. No one ever went to jail for humor. (Although, a few Twitter accounts have been lost). Thank you so much for this relatable review. Much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
What a really dramatic, exciting chapter this is. Miranda's age was definitely showing. Still good writing from you. Always a great read. No spags, anywhere.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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What a really dramatic, exciting chapter this is. Miranda's age was definitely showing. Still good writing from you. Always a great read. No spags, anywhere.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Why thank you. I'm blushing. I do appreciate this wonderful review and the awesome rating. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh My Word! That would be frightening! She did well does not
cover it. She did great! I'm sure Mitch will be proud she asked for him personally. I wonder if Missy was the shooter.
Someone is definitely messing with her. Well done, Gretchen. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Oh My Word! That would be frightening! She did well does not
cover it. She did great! I'm sure Mitch will be proud she asked for him personally. I wonder if Missy was the shooter.
Someone is definitely messing with her. Well done, Gretchen. Nancy:)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much for this awesome rating and great review. I definitely appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This was an intense chapter, Gretchen. I liked the way you
started with everything seeming normal, then the headlights
appeared and soon the shots. That was a scary few scenes. I'm
glad Miranda made it safely into the building. What she did then
was super--shows her knack for thinking ahead and protecting
herself. I understand why she wanted the deputies to call Mitch.
After the fact when she realized the danger, she was in, she needed
someone she knew--Mitch. You added another interesting twist
to your already interesting story.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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This was an intense chapter, Gretchen. I liked the way you
started with everything seeming normal, then the headlights
appeared and soon the shots. That was a scary few scenes. I'm
glad Miranda made it safely into the building. What she did then
was super--shows her knack for thinking ahead and protecting
herself. I understand why she wanted the deputies to call Mitch.
After the fact when she realized the danger, she was in, she needed
someone she knew--Mitch. You added another interesting twist
to your already interesting story.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much. I appreciate the review and thank you so much for messaging me about the spag. I post most chapters at night after work. Sometimes my brain is slow to react to proof reading. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
Now it would have been hilarious if she had changed officer Douglas's diaper. I like what you've done in this chapter. Miranda seems a tad more vulnerable than in the past. It adds dimension to her character.
"I'm Deputy Tyler Douglas, I'm here to," he says. [I'd suggest a double dash to indicate interruption of speech after the "to", instead of the comma.]
Sweetheart, I think, crazy doesn't begin to cover me today. [To whom does "Sweetheart" refer?]
More and more, Missie seems to loom as the suspect, working behind the scenes ... especially since you haven't introduced any other characters since the beginning whose motives can be twisted enough to cause Miranda harm. And I know you're not going to bring some unknown in at the very end to pin it on. That wouldn't be cool.
Jay
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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Now it would have been hilarious if she had changed officer Douglas's diaper. I like what you've done in this chapter. Miranda seems a tad more vulnerable than in the past. It adds dimension to her character.
"I'm Deputy Tyler Douglas, I'm here to," he says. [I'd suggest a double dash to indicate interruption of speech after the "to", instead of the comma.]
Sweetheart, I think, crazy doesn't begin to cover me today. [To whom does "Sweetheart" refer?]
More and more, Missie seems to loom as the suspect, working behind the scenes ... especially since you haven't introduced any other characters since the beginning whose motives can be twisted enough to cause Miranda harm. And I know you're not going to bring some unknown in at the very end to pin it on. That wouldn't be cool.
Jay
Comment Written 29-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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I would never pull a new character out of the blue. I hate red herrings too. I have my money on Missy but haven't really figured out why she is hell bent on destroying Miranda's life. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts about this. I plan to post this weekend. Gretchen
