my life's journey
my life's philosophy3 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I thought what I was reading would be alphabetized throughout, but I was mistaken. Still, your words are words to live by. They are all familiar. I recall many from catechism, Sunday school and orator's words. Yet, the world twirls 'round the universe as if they were never spoken.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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I thought what I was reading would be alphabetized throughout, but I was mistaken. Still, your words are words to live by. They are all familiar. I recall many from catechism, Sunday school and orator's words. Yet, the world twirls 'round the universe as if they were never spoken.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2022
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i chose to group items by topic rather than alphabetized though that would work too and I may revise it according. I have a longer poem that I will break down into three parts but not post so I can submit it freely
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
So many lines of this were brilliant. But I'm sorry, you diluted them with redundancies or irrelivancies, driving your audience away. I hope you have the wisdom and the time to prune your poem to showcase the pearls of wisdom. Kate xx
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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So many lines of this were brilliant. But I'm sorry, you diluted them with redundancies or irrelivancies, driving your audience away. I hope you have the wisdom and the time to prune your poem to showcase the pearls of wisdom. Kate xx
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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great suggestions I will revise it. make it more succinctt
revised per you and other's excellent suggestions. Did you finish NaMoWriMo? I did but my story, "The Life and Times of Big Daddy is a real mess of a first draft.
If you have been around
As much as I have
67 journeys around the sun.
Life has taught
You a lot of lessons
This is what I have learned.
Apologize for your misdeeds
Avoid negative people
Believe in yourself
Be kind to everyone
Be optimistic
Don?t be cruel
Don?t be afraid of failure
Learn from your mistakes
And the mistakes of others.
Do not engage in violence,
Either real violence, or violent rhetoric
Don?t do or say stupid stuff
Don?t be Judgmental
Follow your dreams
Learn something new every day
Love your friends
Love your spouse
Tell her every day
How much you love her
And how special she is to you.
Live in the present
The past is the past
The future is yet to come
And is unknowable.
Practice a daily act
Of random kindness.
Practice the yoga of speech
Before speaking, think of three things
Is it true, is it kind
And is it necessary to be said.
It is not true, not kind
And does not need to be said,
don't say it.
Remember YOLO
You are only live once.
Remember what Bugs Bunny said,
"Relax Doc,
None of us get out of life alive".
In the end
Just be thankful
You are still alive
And kicking.
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Very nice. Yes I finished 50308 words at 16h15. I didn't even know you were doing it. Why didn't you say? I tell everyone, especially in advance... then the fear of failing is greater than the pain of doing. My draft is also a huge mess, but that okay I have been told many times. Anyway huge congratulations on the achievement. Are you going to try out for the next step? Kate xx
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have some excellent advice for all of us who are still kicking, as you put it. I have a few more trips around the planet than you have, at seventy-six. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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You have some excellent advice for all of us who are still kicking, as you put it. I have a few more trips around the planet than you have, at seventy-six. I wish you tons of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2022
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thanks. lots of things to think about as we get older
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revised
If you have been around
As much as I have
67 journeys around the sun.
Life has taught
You a lot of lessons
This is what I have learned.
Apologize for your misdeeds
Avoid negative people
Believe in yourself
Be kind to everyone
Be optimistic
Don?t be cruel
Don?t be afraid of failure
Learn from your mistakes
And the mistakes of others.
Do not engage in violence,
Either real violence, or violent rhetoric
Don?t do or say stupid stuff
Don?t be Judgmental
Follow your dreams
Learn something new every day
Love your friends
Love your spouse
Tell her every day
How much you love her
And how special she is to you.
Live in the present
The past is the past
The future is yet to come
And is unknowable.
Practice a daily act
Of random kindness.
Practice the yoga of speech
Before speaking, think of three things
Is it true, is it kind
And is it necessary to be said.
It is not true, not kind
And does not need to be said,
don't say it.
Remember YOLO
You are only live once.
Remember what Bugs Bunny said,
"Relax Doc,
None of us get out of life alive".
In the end
Just be thankful
You are still alive
And kicking.
